RobZ23

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    5:01 PM, Sunday February 21st 2021

    Hi and welcome to the Drawabox club, I'll try my best to look through your work and see if I can offer any helpful advice

    Superimposed Lines

    There’s a slight bit of fraying at the start of your lines, the main thing is just to take a little extra time to focus on your starting point.

    Bit wobbly at times, but looking at your improvement in the second page, this will develop alongside your confidence.

    Ghosted Lines

    Really liking it; some of the lines are nice and smooth

    Similar to the superimposed lines, just make sure that you’re nailing the starting point of your line.

    With regards to your point about curving lines; a fair bit of it will just be about building muscle memory as you say, but I think this part here about Arcing lines might help you to deal more specifically with those curving lines that you're talking about:

    Arcing lines: https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/9/arc

    Ghosted Planes

    Much like with your ghosted lines I’m liking them.

    You’re doing a good job at making sure that the end of your line doesn’t over or undershoot.

    Tables of ellipses

    Doing a good job: Maintaining degree, angle, Drawing through ellipses

    More Confidence and shoulder work should improve smoothness over time.

    Ellipses in planes

    Much like table of ellipses

    Funnels

    Good transition of degrees

    Just make sure that the major axis of your elipses are at right angles to your minor axis as you go along the funnel.

    Plotted perspective.

    The crosshatching on the middle box on the bottom row overflows slightly onto the upper plane of the box.

    But apart from that this exercise is nicely done.

    Rough Perspective

    One or two of the lines are a tad bit shaky, just make sure that you're turning your page so that you can draw at a comfortable angle.

    Other than that it's well done; line work on boxes is overall smooth and consistent.

    Rotated Boxes

    Overall, I think you’ve done a good job here, just a couple of points:

    Regarding the boxes in the corners of your assignment; I think they should be rotated slightly more away from us, so that we can’t “see” the upper or lower planes of the box, giving us a more direct side view of them. This helps to provide the more "circular" overall view as shown in the example:

    https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/16/step9

    Some of the top planes of the boxes in the outskirts could be slightly narrower to emphasize the foreshortening and rotation of the box (much like the degree of an elipses), mainly the ones on the left-hand side but apart from that I think it’s very well done.

    Organic Perspective

    Your sets of parallel lines heading away from the viewer tend to diverge a bit too much, preventing them from focusing together on a single vanishing point in the distance, but I wouldn’t worry about this too much as this will be explained in much further detail in the 250-box challenge.

    Overall, I think you’ve done a great job and I wish you luck on your journey through art!

    Next Steps:

    Next step(s):

    Feel free to move onto the 250-box challenge if you haven’t done so already.

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    5:05 PM, Sunday September 20th 2020

    Thank you for the great feedback! I appreciate how well structured and thought out it was, I will definitely be adding ellipses to my warm-ups and will try to avoid correcting my lines as I continue to improve them.

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