Thank you for critiquing my homework. I tried following your advice on ghosting the eclipses, but I'm not sure if I did any better, since when I'm done ghosting the eclipse, and try to draw it, my hands start to shake a little bit. For the rough perspective, I still think I need a lot more practice . Here are the revised pages that you asked for!

https://imgur.com/a/I2TtDMW