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    7:32 PM, Monday February 22nd 2021

    I didn't mean 2/3 and 3/4 as two divided by three or 3 divided by four, but "2 or 3" and "3 or 4" instead.

    To summarize, i think you draw over your ellipses too much. I would do the initial stroke and one or two more. If you detect that an ellipse has more than 2 other ellipses around it means that you probably draw through that ellipse too much.

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    7:26 PM, Monday February 22nd 2021

    Hello, Michael:

    Thank you for participating in the critique-exchange discord initiative!

    Overall i think you did an excellent work. Your self-critique it's good and it had served you to improve through the challenge. You have some mistakes but all of them are expected because you need more practice on them, but that polishing part will fit itself in place as you do warm ups so don't forget about them before each exercise.

    I have seen that you did a lot of dramatic foreshortening but only a couple of instances were it was shallower. You should practice shallow foreshortening more because you will need it more for future lessons. Dramatic foreshortening is useful for eye fish camera like drawings, but we are not going to practice those for learning construction so it would be better if you focus on shallow foreshortening in future exercises.

    Your hatching seems sometimes rushed. Remember that every line drawn on drawabox counts for the plan-ghost-draw process and the hatching lines are no exception. Try to take hatching like an improved version of the ghosting lines exercise from lesson 1, you have to do it anyways so better take this as another opportunity to practice the ghosting method.

    Besides having good results i think the reason some of your boxes end up being distorted is because of the inner corner. The reason could be in the nature of the exercise itself that guides you to let the inner corner to the end to make the mistakes obvious. A way to avoid this from now on is to plan all your corners after drawing the first 3 main lines and then adjust any corner that shows too much convergence (or that diverges) respect the others. You can find a more detailed description of the process in this ScyllaStew video. I recommend you to try out this method because you are going to draw even more boxes through this journey.

    Last thing is that i think you are afraid of using more marks if you realise that the marks you already put on the paper are good enough. I think that's a bad idea because small errors that you can detect aren't that small and they will eventually accumulate into a bigger problem that anyone will detect easily. If you plan your drawing, place a mark and while marking other parts or looking at that first mark you realise that mark is wrong, change it and put another one that is correct. I have my pages filled with marks that were wrong and it's super useful to have them. They track your planning progression through the course (the less marks the more you are improving). They help you to identify the areas you are struggling with (too many marks while drawing pyramids? Maybe you have some trouble with them!). And you practice more the planning of a drawing and your observational skills! Half of drawabox is to teach you how to think and look at the things you want to draw ... and that happens in the most part when you are planning and thinking where you are going to place your lines.

    Congratulations for completing this challenge. I hope my review have been useful to you. I will be glad to help you answering any question regarding this critique and good luck with lesson 2!

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    1:11 PM, Saturday February 20th 2021

    Hello, Badpretender:

    Let's have a look to your submission.

    Lines

    Your superimposed lines are as expected on the exercise. There is a bit of fraying at the end but it will reduce with practice, you will need this skill by the end of lesson 2 so remember to apply it to your boxes on the 250 box challenge.

    Ghosted lines are well executed, i think you got the point of the exercise quick. There are some points where your lines turn a bit wobbly. Try to focus on writing from the shoulder, lifting up your elbow could help if you are not still doing it. Also try to make a smooth transition from the ghosting phase to the final stroke. It should be felt as if someone push your pen down while you are starting another ghosting motion.

    Your planes were good too and i think you will continue to improve just with practice. Well done!

    Ellipses

    Your ellipses are aiming for accuracy before being smooth and confident. This is a problem you should detect from now on. Smoothness and confidence is the top priority of every line you draw from this point onwards.

    Try to play with the drawing speed of your ellipses. It depends of the person but there should be a speed at which you can ghost and draw this ellipses smoothly without too much trouble. For some people is doing it faster and for others like me is slower. This speed doesn't have to be the same speed you use to draw straight lines.

    The orientation in the funnels and the table of ellipses got a bit rotated. This is normal and you will correct it with practice, try to stick the minor axis in place as you did in the funnels and eventually you will get there.

    Boxes

    Your rough perspective was excellent. I have to double check if it was done with ruler while skimming over the submission. This is proof enough that you got the point of how to draw straight lines. I saw that your hatching is not consistent. Try to hatch from one side of the face to end in another side as you are currently doing but ending in the line, if you end before it's not as good as if you land it perfect. I think you can do it with your current skill so aim for that. Hatching is meant to apply the same rules as the rest of the lines and should be ghosted too.

    You made some mistakes here and there on the rotated boxes exercise but this is normal. I think you fixed some of them while completing the exercise. Even though i will say that you always have in mind that every rotation moves 2 vanishing points, the point you are rotating to will be nearer and the other will move away. This means that boxes with different rotations should not have parallel lines between them if that lines are affected by that rotation. That last phrase was dense, try to think about it.

    You had some trouble with part of your organic perspective exercise but i think it was a single time thing. If it repeats, remember to treat each line with care and sticking to the entire process of plan-ghost-draw.

    Final thoughts

    I think you are prepared for the 250 box challenge. You did almost no mistakes so you are probably experienced with drawing already. So here is my recommendations according to your level.

    Before each session of your challenge, warm up with some ellipses exercises just 5 - 10 minutes. This will polish your ellipses before they are needed on lesson 2.

    While doing each box in the challenge, try to add lineweight to its silhouette. It is marked as optional in the challenge because it will be one of the things touched in lesson 2. You can start to polish these things safely now so you have a smooth progression. You won't regret it if you follow this advice.

    Last thing, take the challenge with patience. I'm sure you can complete the 250 box challenge in one go but part of the challenge is to let the skills of lesson 1 sink in slowly. I gave you some extra work to improve on so you can get the most out of the challenge but this is only a reward you will gate if you do it at a constant slow phace. I recommend do around 5-10 box a day. The time when you will learn the most will be while sleeping and not while doing the exercise so take your time.

    I hope the critique is useful to you and remember to give some critique to others from time to time. Also check the discord community if you haven't done that yet, there you can discuss about exercises and critiques. You can receive support and help there. Good luck with your drawabox journey!

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    12:14 PM, Saturday February 20th 2021

    Hello, Yellowgirlmc:

    Before i begin with your critique, let me add some feedback about your submission. Try to upload the album in order so it is easier to critique. Also upload all the required exercises in the correct amount, i can't evaluate your progress properly if you submit a half completed lesson. I am missing 1 page of superimposed lines.

    This critique is going to be a hard pill to shallow so be prepared.

    Critique:

    Lines

    You are capable of make straight confident lines as showed by your results in the ghosted lines exercises. In your superimposed lines you have fraying in your lines which normally is not that big of a deal but in your case this fraying starts too early. I think the reason is that you tried to rush through the lesson 1 and this is just another symptom of doing that. I will refer to this more in each section to make clear that rushing is enough by itself to ruin any kind of attempt of draw properly.

    All the content learnt in drawabox is supposed to be additive. This means that if it teaches you how to draw a line, and then teaches you how to make a square with lines, you are supposed to apply the content of lines into squares. The lines on your ghosted exercise are excellent, but comparing it with the rest of the lines in your submission show that you didn't ghost as much as you did with the ghosted exercise in the others. This is a bad thing because i am not 100% sure if you can learn the last part of the lesson without having the most important concept of the first lesson learnt.

    To condense in a simple phrase. Confident lines are always the most important thing in a drawing. If you make confident lines but mess up the rest, the draw will look like another thing but at least seems like a drawing. Wobbly lines are so missleading to the viewer that the brain can't do anything to see a drawing in there. Confident lines should be your first priority always. If you apply this you will improve by an unmeasurable amount your current skill. For doing that you just have to apply the process teached in the lesson for every stroke you do. Plan and mark, ghost and then draw.

    If you are having trouble with the transition between ghosting and drawing, see it like this:

    The final stroke is right after ghosting without any pause between both steps. It should feel like you are ghosting and someone else come behind you without you noticing it and pushes your pen down while you start one of your ghosting motions.

    Don't worry about spending too much time doing the entire process. You will get better with practice and depend less on this as time goes on. You will always have to do the entire process but as you practice it more, you will optimize this process. You will have plenty of time to practice this as you go through the 250 box challenge. But only if you take the process seriously and ghost enough each stroke. Don't skip it because you will have to use that skill in following lessons and each time you rush over a skill practice you will have to slow down later on.

    Your planes suffer the same problem of rushing over them and skip the ghosting phase or doing it wrong. You tried to adjust the trajectory of your lines at the end of the stroke. This is a bad habit. Don't try to adjust in the last moment. You have 3 phases for each stroke and each one of them has one single purpose. The marks and plan phase is supposed to be only about thinking where do you want your line to be; the ghost phase is about practicing the stroke so it can be confident and match your plan made in the previous phase; and the final stroke is about don't let your brain time to adjust the trajectory of your stroke. So depending how you fail, you can practice more that phase in the next attempt. In your case, your marks seems to be always where they should, but the lines don't match that marks so it can be because of your ghosting or your final stroke phase. But we can see that your lines are not straight and confident, and that's responsability of the final stroke so you have to correct it by drawing faster the final stroke, closing your eyes while drawing the final or stroke or any strategy that works for you. The most difficult phase to correct and improve is the planning phase so i'm sure you can solve this problem.

    Ellipses

    You have more confidence doing ellipses that lines which is surprising because it usually is the opposite. You did too much repetition in each ellipse, the perfect amount is between 2/3 but you are currently aiming to 3/4. It's not needed, you can use that extra time to ghost a bit more.

    You did too little ellipses in one of your funnels. Try to always avoid drawing too little in your exercises, that kind of drawing are usually done with the wrist and it's too difficult to do them from the shoulder when you are starting this journey.

    You rotate each ellipse you draw and that's why your ellipses don't match the line in the funnels exercise and responsible of the empty spaces in the table of ellipses too. You have a problem here but you shouldn't be solving it before working on the confidence of your ellipses a bit more. After working on it you can retake this problem and try to adjust the degree and orientation of each ellipse. I recommend you to have this problem on pause until lesson 2 where you will have plenty of time to work on it because you have a lot to focus on first.

    Boxes

    I would like to give useful feedback here but you rushed so much on this part so i will have to guess your problems because they are hidden behind unconfident wobbly lines. Don't worry too much about it, i will try to guide you a little more at the end of the critique so you can fix the majority your problems.

    In the plotted perspective you rushed too besides having the ruler helping you. Seriously we need to work on your patience. With the help of a ruler almost every line should be completely straight but some of your lines have similar problems as your handmade ones. If you did some of the lines on this exercise hand made, please be sure to read slowly your exercises next time they are carefully designed and they should be carefully read.

    You didn't extent the lines to the vanishing point. This is the whole point of the exercise, to teach you how far you are from plan correctly your lines. I will repeat myself, skipping parts of the process will slow down in the future. Try to stick with the method of drawabox.

    In the organic perspective you did a speedrun. No marks, no ghosting and you even draw multiple lines with a single stroke. This is the problem of not taking the previous parts in mind for this exercise.

    In the rotated boxes you accumulate all the mistakes i have previously mentioned. I could identify some perspective mistakes, your horizontal lines didn't rotate. The central box face is a square and the faces on the left and right (let's call them central column boxes) are properly rotated and they are not a square anymore. But the faces of the boxes in the borderline next to the central column boxes, have the same rotation on the horizontal lines than the central columns boxes. They shouldn't. When you rotate a box, one of the vanishing points should be moving near the box and the other should be moving away. In this case, both vanishing points stay in the same place after the rotation.

    Fixing your problems

    First of all, congratulations for reading this far. If you don't want to punch me in the face after pointing out so many of your mistakes you have a frozen heart. Let me apologize if you feel bad about anything i wrote but believe me that i wouldn't write one thousand words if it's not for helping you.

    I will go first with the problems i think you have to solve before continuing with more drawabox content:

    Patience

    I think your problem currently is far from grinding. You have to learn that the process of drawing something is long and takes time even for professionals. It's completely normal to take a long time to draw something and you should be preparing for this at the start of the journey or you will burn out too quickly. Also the most of the learning process happens while you are sleeping after a day of practice, so you will learn more about lesson 1 if you complete it in 7 days than if you rush over it in one go. You have to let the knowledge to slowly sink in. There is no exception for this rule. If you want to learn something it will take time.

    I'm going to ask you more than what i usually ask as revision to work on this. I don't want to see so many signs of rushing as i have seen this time.

    As an aditional note, rushing is useless if you want to receive feedback or improve in general. You will have to wait anyways to receive a critique, and the worse that critique is presented the more time will consume to a person to critique because he will have to spend some of the time you didn't while reading, and rewrite the things you read but didn't apply in order to rush over the content.

    If you want to continue drawing, at least apply the 50% rule and draw for fun. But don't expect to take this course in a single month. I have been doing daily practices from 3 months ago and i'm only at the end of lesson 2. This is a longer path that you can't even imagine. The amount of people that give up without reaching lesson 3 is terrifying. You will need resilence and patience. Rushing will burn you out, because it's impossible to complete drawabox in one go, even in multiple sessions... I aim to a lesson/challenge per month and still feel like i could be rushing too much...

    Confident lines

    Confident lines are not something you can achieve one time and then have in your pocket forever. They take some effort to make. This effort has to be made every single time, you can't avoid it. You should work on every line as if it was the most important line in what are you drawing. I know you are not going to reach that perfection every single time, but you have to try. If you do a line and fail, analyse yourself where did you make the mistake, in which phase, how can you work around it. If you can't find the answer by yourself, ask for feedback on discord and apply that new knowledge for the following lines.

    Reading

    I know it's hard to have in mind all the content that is displayed in an exercise. But at least, try to avoid the mistakes that are already displayed there and do a quick peek at the final result is displayed at the end of each section so you can detect when you are skipping content.

    The people that will do the critiques for you is people that have completed at least that lesson so trying to rush over it without the community noticing it is almost impossible. If someone is harder to fool than a teacher, is other students that also thought about fooling while doing that lesson.

    Revision

    I want you to complete some aditional exercises with some goals in mind. All this exercises should be completed in order and they shouldn't be done in one go. Avoid this advice at your own risk.

    1. I want one aditional page of ghosted lines. Focus on confident lines. You already got this exercise in your first attempt but as you didn't apply it later on i think you need to retake it.

    2. I want one aditional page of ghosting planes. Focus on confident lines. If you plan a square, you do confident lines and you end up with a triangle, it will be okey. Avoid adjusting your lines, the moment you commit to draw you can't change the motion.

    3. You can choose here. One page of organic perspective drawing through the boxes or two pages of organic perspective but without having to draw through them. Focus on confident lines. Do marks for each line and be sure to apply the entire plan-ghost-draw method.

    4. I want one aditional page of rotated boxes. Focus on apply all the knowledge you got from the critique and the extra practice and apply it here. If you can also solve the perspective problem i talk about in the critique, you will gain extra points!

    If you have any doubt or question doing this revision, you can ping me or send me a DM in discord. I have written 2 thousand words and spend 2 hours with this critique so i want to be sure you learn for my own sanity hehe.

    Next Steps:

    In this order:

    1. One page of ghosted lines

    2. One page of ghosting planes

    3. Choose between

      • One page of organic perspective drawing through the boxes

      • Two pages of organic perspective but without having to draw through them

    4. One page of rotated boxes

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    7:02 PM, Wednesday February 17th 2021

    Hello, Alby.

    First of all congratulations, it's a tough challenge to complete (at least it was for me). I have to tell you that i chose to review you as i saw you made some critiques for others, that's why i prioritized your submission over others. This is your reward :D. It's also an essential learning step, so keep helping the community.

    Let's begin with your submission.

    Your lines are confident and the overall technical aspect is good. The bad side is that you missed to extend the lines towards the vanishing points. I have seen that you asked about how to identify which face you should hatch. The answer is, you can choose which one you want, because as you are drawing boxes and not cubes, you can't exactly tell which face is nearer the viewer. Although you can use some rules of thumb to decide, for example the nearest face will be bigger than the rest. Also you can use the convergence of the two axis that forms a face to decide, usually the less convergence the nearer the face is to the viewer (this could be distorted with some boxes that has a corner as the nearest point of the figure).

    Your lines are extended most of the time in the wrong direction. I assume this is because you don't know where is the viewer so it's difficult to tell where is the opposite direction. I'm going to elaborate on this so you can get a better idea.

    When you begin one box, you place 4 dots. One is the seen corner, and the other 3 will form the axis that separate the 3 faces that are nearest the viewer. You have to choose one of these to hatch, you can try with the advice i previously gave you before to choose it. After placing that 4 main marks you place 3 more that complete the silhouette of the figure and lastly you place the inner corner mark and join every mark that you place letting the inner corner for the end.

    After doing that you will have to extend the lines in the same direction your main axis were. From the first middle corner that's near the viewer, to the side of the other 3 points you marked on the first step.

    Also you didn't explore foreshortening and you should. It's part of the reason you have trouble figuring out the exercise, because dramatic foreshortening makes clear which faces are near due to the extreme size difference of each face. Also shallow foreshortening is a goal you should be trying to reach for.

    You didn't try adding lineweight to the silhouette but in your case, as it's an optional step and you have other problems to worry about, you can deal with this later (if you want). This will be one of the main points of lesson 2 so you will have to practice it sooner or later.

    As final advice, please make the submission easy to critique. Yours' is filled with red lines everywhere and it makes it harder for anyone to analyze it. Try to use at least 2 different colors, one for the extended lines, and other for the box itself. This could be also useful to you because with so many lines it's normal to have trouble distinguishing which line is which. Have that in mind for your next submission.

    I'm going to ask you for 30 more boxes. At least 15 should have some sort of foreshortening and try to aim for shallow foreshortening. I want you to focus on extending the lines on the right direction. Answer this critique with your revision and i will give you some more critique.

    If you have doubts of the process of making the exercise you can check this video of ScyllaStew that has a lot of useful things to deal with common problems like the inner corner. And I recommend you to re-watch the video of the challenge and then re-read the challenge itself.

    Next Steps:

    I'm going to ask you for 30 more boxes. At least 15 should have some sort of foreshortening and try to aim for shallow foreshortening. I want you to focus on extending the lines on the right direction. Answer this critique with your revision and i will give you some more critique.

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    5:38 PM, Wednesday February 17th 2021

    Hello, Fynnfluff:

    First of all congratulations for completing the first challenge! Answering your doubt, i think you rushed the challenge that's why you didn't appreciate a noticeable improvement but also because you did pretty good from the start. Another thing i want to mention is that i chose to critique your submission because you have done critiques in the past. Keep doing it because it's a good way to learn and helping others at the same time. Some of us prioritize people that has been giving feedback over the ones, you can check on the discord server the channel critique-exchange if your are interested in improving your critiques or guarantee feedback on your submission.

    Before beginning to enumerate mistakes, i have to tell you how learning mechanical skills works (and all types of learning). The moment that your brain spends on really learning things is while you are sleeping. The more opportunities you have to sleep between practice the more efficient you are at learning. In this case you spend around 2 weeks to complete the challenge doing around 20 boxes a day. Compared to my case that was 5 boxes a day, it's normal that i improved a lot and learnt a lot. The point i want to make is that quality time is more efficient thant quantity time if at the end spend the same amount of it. There is no linear relationship between time spent and learning progress. If you spend more time than me, for example x2 the time i practice, you will learn faster but your progress won't advance in the same proportion, maybe x1,2.

    Now let's see those boxes.

    I can appreciate that your general perception is good but you struggle a bit (as we all did) with the inner corner of each box. You can work around this by extending the plannning phase a bit more so you can re-adjust all the marks with the inner corner. It is explained in detail in this ScyllaStew video, check it when you can and try it her technique in some warm ups. It works like a charm.

    Another thing that i see (maybe because of the extreme bright that fills all your scanned images, pls fix that for the next submission) is that you didn't apply line weight. Applying line weight to the silhouette makes the 3D illusion more real, this will be covered in depth on lesson 2 and that's why it was optional here, try to do this optional parts on each lesson to make the most out of them, they are worth the effort. You can see the potential of line weight on your boxes 169-174 where you tried to fix a mistake and by adding line weight you made it more obvious. You can learn 2 things out of this:

    1. Line weight attracts the attention, making it a great tool to tell the viewer what is the important in a drawing.

    2. Line weight little errors bigger than the whole picture.

    Next thing i want to point out is hatching. Hatching is part of the process and you shouldn't be rushing over it. I have seen a lot of your hatching starting in the middle of a face and not reaching any borderline. This means that all this lines didn't go through the entire process of plan, mark, ghost, draw. You should make this process an habit until you don't need to think about it. This lines should be started at one side of the face you want to draw the hatching on, and end on the opposite side. It's ok if you don't end exactly on the other end, but if you don't even try you won't get out as much of these lines as you could. We want to make the most out of every single line we draw while practicing.

    The last thing i can tell you is that some lines seem not as straight as they should be. This could mean that you were drawing from your elbow or that you wanted to adjust the trajectory in the middle of the action. To fix the first, draw with your elbow in the air, just lift it up enough to don't be a stable point so you have to rely on your shoulder. If this doesn't work you can try to draw on a blackboard or any material that requires you to being stand up and draw some big figures to get the feeling of drawing from the shoulder.

    To fix the second one, you can close your eyes, commit really hard to the final stroke or making the stroke faster so you don't have enough time to react to the trajectory. Also you can be doing the transition of the ghosting phase to the drawing phase in a way that you stop between the 2 instead of making the transition smoothly. The tip that worked for me was to realise that the ghosting phase never really ends, you enter a loop of ghosting and the final stroke should be felt as if someone push your pen down while you are still doing it.

    That's all. I think your lines extend properly to the vanishing points and you did an excellent job in general with the exercise. Next thing will be to continue to lesson 2. I recommend you to warm up before every session repeating some past exercises to polish the foundation you are building right now. I hope you find anything useful on my critique.

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    10:57 AM, Wednesday February 17th 2021

    Thank you for your feedback.

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    6:34 AM, Tuesday February 16th 2021

    Hello, Jumbledbyrd:

    First of all, thank you for the feedback you have given to others. I hope you have learnt in the process as much as the people you helped.

    Let's see those boxes!

    In general i would say you had an awesome improvement. By the end of the first 50 boxes you already achieve some decent boxes and that's a good sign. You have some little mistakes like extending a bit the lines in the opposite direction or missplace some vanishing points. By the last box a lot of that problems have been diminished so i'm going to focus on the mistakes that i are still there.

    The inner corner can be managed in the planning phase and you don't have to wait until you have already placed some final strokes. You can research more about this technique in the following ScyllaStew video. The lesson you can learn here is that the best place to fix your mistakes is in your mind and the second one is when you are placing your marks. Missplacing a little dot will be easier to fix later on than an entire line, with a bit of luck it will serve another purpose for another mark. The important thing is "fix your mistakes before committing to them".

    I have seen that you tend to struggle a bit when the vanishing point is placed near the box. Don't be stressed out too much for this. It's normal. The accuracy you need to make these look perfect is harder compared to the extreme far VP that makes your lines be almost parallel.

    Your hatching is sometimes wobbly or finished before reaching the other end of the box face. Try to treat each hatching lines as a normal one, take some time to ghost it and you will see better results (and it's extra practice!!).

    Don't be afraid of line weight. I know that it can be frustrating make a good box (in this case) and messing it up while adding line weight failing in the superimposed lines... BUT you have to practice it. The results look extremely better when you add line weight and as you will learn in lesson 2, it's super important to create a three-diminensional illusion. I would recommend you to lose this fear (if you really have it) in warmups. You will have to do it in straight lines and organic curvy ones, so practice in both cases. By the end of the lesson 2 you won't regret it.

    And that's all i could get out of your pages. I hope it is enough and you can find something valuable in my words. Any question, feel free to answer with any doubt or clarification you need. Good luck with lesson 2!

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    5:53 PM, Monday February 15th 2021

    Hello, Setura:

    I have seen that you tried to give feedback to others and that's why I chose you. This critique is the reward for giving back to others before receiving anything for you. Keep that attitude! I recommend you to join the discord server and check the critique-exchange channel it could be interesting for you.

    Let's begin with the critique.

    Lines

    Some fraying on the end of superimposed lines, but that's ok. Some of these lines have more than a single starting point, try to fix this because is easier to have that perfect than the fraying on the line end.

    I can see some arching in some lines. Try to lift you elbow when drawing (just enough to don't have it stationary) so you can be 100% sure you are drawing from the shoulder. You can also try to make some imaginary drawings in a wall while standing so you can feel the motion on your shoulder. While drawing next to the sheet of paper it's more difficult to appreciate the difference between elbow and shoulder because both anchor points are near each other. Drawing longer lines with the elbow in the air should force you to draw from the shoulder.

    The arching could be another problem too, If you are trying to correct the trajectory in the last moment, stop doing it. The drawing process of each line is composed by 3 steps plan, ghost and draw. But the ghost and draw are made in the same motion. Planning is self explanatory, you think about how you want the line and put some marks to indicate so. Ghost is practicing the motion in an infinite loop, but one important think comes after this, you draw. And I don't mean ghost, stop and then draw. When you feel comfortable with your ghosting you just put the pen down. It should be feel as if you were ghosting and without warning someone press your hand down in one of the attempts.

    Overall your lines have confidence and that's a good thing to point out in this lesson. Nice work!

    Ellipses

    I think you have almost got it. It's not a goal of this lesson to master the ellipses but it can be handy in future lessons. I recommend you to play with your drawing speed while doing them. It helped me a lot. Drawing speed for lines and ellipses can be different. In my case I do lines with super fast strokes but i need to slow down with ellipses. I will explain it in detail at the end but try to warm up with ellipses from time to time.

    Boxes

    You should have extended the lines of all boxes to the vanishing points. I see that you did it from the second page to the end but it could be a sign of rushing. Please read carefully the exercises and watch the video completely. They are design not only to be helpful to you but also to other people for reviewing it. If you skip some steps reviewers could miss some of your mistakes.

    Your rotated boxes exercise is extremely small. You should have done it bigger. I think you get the idea of it though so I am not going to make you repeat it.

    Also good job doing the organic perspective drawing through the boxes! This will be your day to day in the 250 box challenge so you can use this first boxes as a reference to check your improvement at the end of the challenge.

    Congratulations! First lesson complete. Now you should move on to the 250 box challenge and i recommend you to take some time to do that. 250 boxes are a lot. Pick some number of boxes for each day 5-10 and stick with it every day if you can. Most of the learning will come while sleeping so the more you sleep during this days, the better. Also don't skip warmups, spend some time before your exercises doing past exercises to warm up. I have improved a lot with ellipses just by warming up and it's extremely useful to don't end frustrated on lesson 2.

    I hope my review will be useful to you. I will answer any question you have.

    Good luck with the rest of the journey!

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    8:54 PM, Sunday February 14th 2021

    Hello, DCRand:

    I will try my best to point out everything to improve on your submission. I will approach this feedback session following the same structure as in the lesson: lines, ellipses and boxes.

    Lines:

    Confident lines with pretty good accuracy. Good job here, don't worry about the fraying on the end of your lines while adding line weight. This will improve with time and practice, aim for the perfection but don't stress yourself too much about it and you will eventually reach that point. Try to start in the same point you did the first attempt (avoid too many little points on where the line start), it's as bad as fraying but it's easier to fix.

    Your ghosting technique seems solid, no complains. Be careful to don't forget about ghosting from now on, all content teached here is additive to the following so you are spected to ghost every single line. It's a common mistake to forget the ghosting method when doing more advanced lessons but you have to resist that temptation.

    Side note: Your scans seems to have too much bright. Try to scan them with lower brightness next time, it could be hard for the reviewer to spot your mistakes if the picture doesn't show little marks or omits some strokes. The more quality your submission the faster it could be reviewed!

    Ellipses:

    Your ellipses are perfect! (In the context of these exercise) If you want to improve them a lot try playing with the stroke speed. You have to find the best phace for you. It's different for each person so you will have to try faster and slower until you reach a sweet spot. After finding that speed you feel comfortable with, you can build on top of it with warm ups using these exercises to improve.

    Some ellipses are wobbly but i think it's not about "not enough confidence" but about your stroke speed so don't worry too much about it. If you start to face this problem too frecuently, try ghosting more and don't stop between the ghosting and the final stroke. The final stroke is meant to be like a surprise fake ghost, you do some ghosting strokes and then surprise yourself touching the paper in some random attempt without stopping the motion at all.

    Boxes:

    I don't have much to point out here. On the rotated boxes, the back face of each box is meant to be smaller than the front face (before having perspective in mind) so it should be even smaller when perspective is applied to them as they are far from the viewer. Also most of your back faces don't seem rotated and i think it is because you focused on making cubes instead of boxes. Remember, when we talk about boxes we don't expect to have perfect proportions (a.k.a cubes) and in this particular case the goal is to draw cut pyramids, the back faces have to be smaller than front ones so we could rotate the boxes forming a sphere like structure.

    Also in the organic perspective I recommend you to always do the optional steps. They teach a lot with a little extra effort but are required as optional because that specific subject will be focused later. In this case is the 250 box challenge. It also teaches you to don't rush exercises and to have patience. You will need both skills to complete this long journey.

    And that's all. I think you are prepared for the 250 box challenge. Go for it and don't rush! I would recommend doing 5 - 10 boxes a day, 20 a day if you are studying this full time. Most of the learning happens while sleeping and between days, specially on physical skills, so it's not going to be as worth as it could seem to rush through the lessons. Good luck and I hope my review has been useful to you.

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