Ransom9133

Looks great! I think this is an improvement nice work!

Hi there! I'd say good work overall! I just finished lesson 6 too and am working on the wheels. I haven't gotten any feedback so I'm not sure if I'm the beset person to give you feedback but I'll try.

First, the good:

I think your form intersections are really good! For the most part I can tell that you really thought through how forms would intersect. This was a difficult one for me but I think you did a good job.

Your wii remote looks really good! Very convincing 3d forms. I like how you built up the different parts of the remote. Very nice. Also, clevery use of subdividing on the extension cord. It seems like it maybe got a bit tedious but you stuck with it. Your lines seem to be consistent with the vanishing points of the overall box and that is really tough. Nice work!

Form intersections:

Pretty good! I think the drawing over lines and some of the hatching can be a bit distracting, but overall it seems like you are capable of visualizing how forms interact with each other. A few of the cylinders into spheres seem a bit off, but those are really tough. I wouldn't do it over but just keep thinking about it. One noticeable mistake was I think page three of the intersections where a cone intersects with a sphere on the left side looks noticeably off. However there is a sphere and a cylinder above it that look good! (both on left side of page).

Everyday objects:

I think you maybe could have done a little more subdividing. For the perfume bottle, for example, your front plane looks good. On your left "plane" however, how did you get the placement for the internal vertical lines? It looks like guesswork and I think the lesson wanted to avoid that as much as possible. Maybe watch the bluetooth demo again if you are curious. Another place you could have practiced this is on the wii remote. I think you could have drawn a line on the right hand side to make the d pad, and then flipped it using the methods talked about in this lesson to see where the left side of the d pad should be.

I would also encourage you to continue to be aware of how these different 3d shapes fit together. I think on the coffee mug you had a good opportunity to make sure the handle follows along the same vanishing points as the mug but it misses it. Compare especially the top part of the handle to the top part of the mug (assuming that the handle top and mug top are parallel in real life). Also, again on the mug you missed a chance to flip where the handle attaches to the mug across the center line. Also also, I think in general keep practicing your boxes. I think that your mug does not look like a convincing box.

One other thing is to continue to be mindful of your cylinders. One thing that is really helpful for me is to rely pretty heavily on the center line because I know that the center line should cut the ellipse in half pretty equally (if I'm remembering correctly).

Sorry for all the negatives! I can tell you put in a lot of work, this homework was really difficult and confusing for me with all the subdividing and flipping lines, but I think you did well!

I just finished this lesson too! ours looks better than mine so take mine with a grain of salt. I really liked your insect drawings they looked awesome!

Your organic sausages with contour lines, the contour lines look maybe a little flat? like the line goes straight a bit much in the middle and I think the examples I saw from the lesson there was more of a constant curve. Looks very neat and confident and accurate though. Nicely done overall.

Maybe for the scorpion I'm not sure if the foreshortening is off or just like the proportions but the body looks a litte long.

Grasshopper edges look good! Looks a little flat overall? I'm not sure why though. Maybe the segments don't really wrap around? Same with the lightning bug/beetle after that. Not sure why though. Might be just because of the way it looks from the side/top?

I'm not sure what the next one is...a mosquito? The leg placement looks good but the shapes look a little off? I'm not sure how to elaborate. the solidity/roundness is confusing. The center line looks confusing. I think the far edge looks like it just ends, like no rounding on it.

The cicada or Aphid looking thing next looks awesome! Very round, very solid!

The wasp looking thing after the spider looks awesome, probably my favorite. Very convnincing forms! I think it's specifically the thorax and how you wrapped the segments around it to make it look rounded. Very nice.

Overall looks really good! I'm trying to remember all the things he said ha. I think the forms looked solid, it all fit together in a convincing way. Nicely done!

...I would move on to animals but honestly i wouldn't trust my advice too much ha. Good luck!

good work! I really do think your planes and ellipses improved! the rough perspective was much clearer and I hope it helped! I would move on to boxes if I were you.

Superimposed & Ghosted lines - Looks good! You go over a little bit, but not any worse than I do and I'm on the third lesson (and not great in general, but we're working on it :D). I would just be sure to start on your first dot every time. I see sometimes where you miss BOTH dots. It's fairly difficulty to hit the second dot every time, but because you are starting from stationary, you should hit the first dot every time (or most of the time). Keep working at this!

Table of ellipses - these look pretty good too! for the page that starts with ellipses slanted to the right - this page is good. You draw through your ellipses (most of the time, make sure to do it ALL the time!!) You keep your major axis pretty consistent, nice work! My only critique would be to work on staying on the lines a bit more. Some of your ellipses are consistently floating behind or above the box. This happens, ellipses are hard. I think what I would have liked to have seen is one ellipse floating a little high, so the next ellipse you try and compensate a little lower. Even if you over-compensate and still aren't perfect, that is OKAY. I think the goal is to just be mindful of what you are doing. I'm not sure what lesson it is in but Uncomfortable talks about not grinding through lessons but following the steps and, more importantly, assessing as you go if you are hitting the goals. This is super tough since the lessons are already intimidating and hard, but you will grow much faster if you are mindful of your work as you go. For the table of ellipses that starts with ellipses straight up and down in the upper left hand corner, and the upper right corner has a little smiley face line: same feedback but things are worse in this one. I would ghost it more. I would say it is totally okay for the first lesson and exactly where you should expect to be. To improve though, work on being more consistent with ellipses. It's encouraging for me that even in uncomfortable's videos, he doesn't draw perfect ellipses (ellipses where the lines are perfectly on top of each other) most of the time. Keep practicing!!

Funnels - look good! Your most accurate ellipses! This shows me that you can definitely do this! Just be confident, know that you can do it, just slow down by ghosting until you are ready to draw that ellipse (but draw quickly)

Ghosted Planes/Ellipses in planes - I love all your little "oof" comments, I do the same thing! (except I usually say "yikes" when I give myself feedback). I know that you can draw confident lines, you proved this in the ghosted lines exercise. I feel like when you did the ghosted planes exercise though, you didn't keep your confident lines. When I moved to planes and boxes I noticed I did the same thing. Slow down. Don't set your goal to draw a perfect box/plane. Do the steps for ghosted line. Ghost until you can pretty consistently stop on the second dot then draw your line. Before you move to the next line stop and look at the line you just drew. Do you need to force yourself to go faster? (note that "fast" isn't the goal, it is just a reliable way of forcing your brain off and relying on muscle memory) Do you need to adjust the angle? Some of your ellipses are pretty far off the mark too, that's okay, you'll get it but keep practicing. It's important to go slow and adjust as needed. It gets tedious but if you really want to improve you need to focus on making minor adjustments after every ellipse.

Plotted perspective - looks good! If you are going to draw lines on the faces though, focus on accuracy. Ghost even these lines!

Rough perspective - I would re-do this one. I can tell that you followed the goal for thsi exercise for the most part. I would discourage using pencil. If you HAVE to to distinguish it from the boxes, still only draw one line and use a ruler or a bookor something else to plot your lines. As it is, I can't tell if you accurately plotted your lines back. Your lines look much more confident in this one though!

Rotated boxes - I actually think you did a pretty stellar job on this one! You kept your boxes together. You rotated well by making the angle of the lines more acute (turn towards each other quicker, I don't remember geometry ha). Seems like you understood this exercise well!

Organic Boxes - I think you got this pretty well. On one of the pages in the middle box there are like two separate lines? I'm not sure what happened there but it lost the impression of boxes traveling through space. They don't seem to get smaller as they "move" away.

superimposed lines - Great! starts at the same point and your lines look confident (smooth)

Ghosted lines - honestly really really awesome, way better than mine, I feel like I shouldn't even be critiqueing this

Ghosted planes - This isn't even a critique, but just FWIW, i noticed that you did something similar to me on this homework. Your lines looked AWESOME on the ghosted lines but when you moved to planes they started to overshoot a bit more. Something about having it be more than just a line puts on the pressure maybe and causes mistakes? Be confident, keep ghosting until you are stopping on your point and then smoothly draw the line in rhythm. Ellipses look really good!

Table of ellipses - I wouldn't re-do it, but try and focus on hitting the top and bottom with your ellipses. I pretty much only noticed this on the upper left exercise of table B

Rough perspective - looks to be expected! Keep being patient with those lines :)

Rotated boxes - I thin kyou got the point and goal of this exercise. nice work!

For organic perspective I'm honestly not sure what he is looking for out of it, but your boxes are believable. When I look at them it looks like boxes that are moving through 3d space!

Looks pretty good! I think you can move on to what is next.

Lines looked nice and confident and started at the same point in the first exercise.

For the second one (plotted lines? can't remember the name) I would maybe do this again. Your line wobbles a bit. I can tell from the first exercise that you can draw a confident line, but I think there is something about putting borders or goals on it by drawing points that makes it tricky. Just push through even if it doesn't feel right. go faster if you need to. One thing I noticed is that your lines get thinner at the end like you are gradudally lifting off. I don't think you should be doing that, you should just stop on the point. I think some of those bad habits transfer to the next homework, ellipses is panes.

Ghosted planes exercise: Your lines actually look really confident and straight in this one! They overshoot a good bit, which isn't bad at this point, but they should be getting better focus on ghosting the line and STOPPING at the point, not lifting your arm off the paper gradually. Do this consistently until you can confidently stop on the second point. Your ellipses o nthis are okay, but they get better in the next exercise!

I think the ellipses in boxes exercise is actually pretty good, not thoughts from me.

I might do the ellipses in the funnel exercise one more time. I would focus on keeping your ellipses all aligned a tthe same angle. They stay pretty well within the funnel so that is good!

Rotated boxes looks pretty good. It looks like you are trying to re-draw the lines though. I know it's tempting but don't do it! I think the thought is that as you keep practicing you'll eventually get better, but if you keep fixing it, you'll much more slowly figure out how to get it right the first time. if that makes sense.

I think you can move on to the next step, just keep practicing those things. 1. Ghost more carefully (but not slower) 2. don't redraw lines.

I would also do ellipses in planes as a warm up as you are doing your boxes or whatever is next!