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Thank you! I'm glad you like it :D

Thank you!

Thank you very much!

Hello again!

Thanks for the reply and the correction images, they're really helpful. I'm glad you gave me such a thorough review because this lesson was hard to understand.

The first two images were taken from the demos:

https://d15v304a6xpq4b.cloudfront.net/lesson_images/826c1a46.jpg

https://d15v304a6xpq4b.cloudfront.net/lesson_images/990761dd.jpg

And these are the last two:

https://imgur.com/a/dBrq6Y9

I didn't draw the other leaves for the sunflower because i wasn't quite sure how to approach that, should I have drawn a heart shape from the get go?

Anyway, thanks again!

Hello!

Thank you for such an in-depth critique, the tips you gave have been a big help during the revisions; drawing bigger is really useful to understand what I'm trying to do and how I'm doing it, and I tried to take my time with the branch construction, while it wasn't perfect I do think that it went a lot better than last time I tried these.

https://drive.google.com/drive/folders/1AcOfyzG_MIxXDHHIRh47-EFScdi9LOGP?usp=sharing

Please let me know if any other tips can help me improve further!

The revision seems better, they stack more naturally now and the perspective is nice too.

The intersections are fine as well.

Remember to keep practising the completed lessons and good luck on your journey!

This looks like it will be very useful, thank you for sharing!

Hello, I’ll be doing your critique today!

Organic Arrows

Good sense of depth and variety of arrows. Nice and smooth lines, the hatching is done well too.

Organic forms with contour lines

The ellipses rotate very well and follow the motion of the sausage great work here!

The contours look a little flat, try to ghost them like you would an ellipse and then when you are ready, draw an overshooting curve.

Texture

These textures… wow

Perfect transition from dark to light, great use of shadows!

Dissections

More amazing textures! They wrap around the forms like they belong there!

Form Intersections

Excellent work! great hatching and intersections!

Organic Intersections

This too is great! You would do great in future lessons!

Hello, I’ll be doing your critique today!

Organic Arrows

Good sense of depth, especially on the second page. the hatching is done quite well too.

Organic forms with contour lines

The ellipses rotate although some of them (mainly the ones at the edge) could use more rotation based on the line

The contours aren’t confident, did you try to ghost an ellipse before drawing it? some of them don’t rotate as they should and a lot of them aren’t overshooting so that might be contributing to the issue. This might help you understand my point:

https://d15v304a6xpq4b.cloudfront.net/lesson_images/77f2ca1c.jpg

Texture

The texture analysis is very nicely done! I really like how you handled the brick and the scales.

The dark side seems to be a bit too thick for your gradation making it appear like the texture should be darker there, but the light side is perfect

Dissections

More good looking textures here, I love how some of them interact with each other.

Form Intersections

Good variety of shapes, but it isn’t clear where the intersections are, if there are any. The linework is really light.

https://d15v304a6xpq4b.cloudfront.net/lesson_images/8d4a68c8.jpg

Organic Intersections

You’re not supposed to put shadows on the form that is creating them and some shadows look a bit awkward

https://d15v304a6xpq4b.cloudfront.net/lesson_images/516f8d4f.jpg

You'll get better as you go on, but intersections, ellipses, and organic forms are really important in the later lessons so i just want to know if you understand the concept and you can move on

Hello, I’ll be doing your critique today!

Organic Arrows

Extremely nice sense of perspective and depth; in some of the arrows you’ve drawn the hatched lines on the outside, we’re trying to indicate a shadow that helps add to the depth like so:

https://d15v304a6xpq4b.cloudfront.net/lesson_images/f875589f.jpg

Organic forms with contour lines

The ellipses are drawn well and they curve along with the sausage well. But they don’t rotate like I’d expect them to. This might help:

https://d15v304a6xpq4b.cloudfront.net/lesson_images/dc19ce85.jpg

Remember that the angle of the ellipse changes depending on the view:

https://i.imgur.com/rXLBxSg.png

The contours have less of an issue with the angles but can be improved still.

Texture

Good analysis, I the last analysis the darkness is starting from left, yet the texture is darkening on the right, but it's fine.

Dissections

Good textures, they wrap around the form well and break the silhouette well.

Form Intersections

It seems like you understand the concept, but some of them (mainly the third page) don’t have the intersections drawn on them.

Organic Intersections

Great sausages, they feel almost real on the first page! Nice shadows on the first page, they seem a little too thin on the second page though.

I hope this helped!