RJhirad

unfinished.

oh so the shape is as per the lesson, i later realised that i used a 50mm lens so the depth is a little crushed giving it a boxy look. I might redo it with greater perspective to make it look more like how most people actually draw it. sorry for causing the confusion, this was one of those 3am coffee ideas so it's a little

I'm new to this course myself so wait till someone who actually knows what their saying drops by to affirm this by agreeing but this looks essentially done. I'll mark it as complete in my opinion. think of it as a post bump

p.s.: i know I'm supposed to be critiquing your work but how dem ellipses so good? they're really tight for something with that much follow through. Guess

Thanks for taking the time to check my work.

I redid the funnel exercise a few times.

https://imgur.com/gallery/iy5fY50

I was able to open up the link with no problems. Firefox on windows 10 if that helps.

Work looks amazing and given the quality of the casual little doodles on the side I wouldn't be surprised if you've done a few courses before this one cause they're pretty good!

The only thing that's a little off is the rotated boxes exercise. Not bad mind you, just a little janky in bits.

I'm more than happy to vote that you're done with this exercise.

Thanks, I'm not sure of the usual formatting of critique on this website but looks like most people on here use this format so I'll use that in the future.

I think you're good to move on now that you're done w the revision.

Hi, Just to say, I'm still a beginner myself and I just handed in my homework for lesson 1 a couple days ago. So think of this not as expert feedback but more as a sugession from someone at your level.

1-1: Pretty clean imo.

1-2: you're overshooting a little. I don't personally think that's a huge deal but again this is where I'd like to see someone who know what they're talking about chip in. Maybe ask as a query what could be done of it.

1-3: Ghosted planes look clean. I like them.

1-4:Table looks clean too. some of them aren't touching but that's more than acceptable at this point. Also, :)

1-5: Again, clean. Top left of page 2 looks a little shaky like you dropped your line confidence for a moment. but otherwise it's perfect imo.

1-6: No real change in degree of the ellipses. apart from that I think you're more than done.

1-7: clean, all good.

1-8: You need to ghost your lines more and maybe rewatch the video on perspective. Some of the lines are diverging where they should be converging so that's a place to improve. Also remember, you can ghost past where you want the line to end and then just draw upto where the line really ends. Other than that It's done imo. if you just rewatch that lesson and then move along it's good enough.

1-9:Looks good imo. you've kinda made the same mistake as me by changing from squares to rectangles over time but it looks correct for the most part. However, remember that as the boxes turn, they'd have a tighter angle inwards going along the up-down axis.

1-10: Increase box density to help sell the effect more.

Apart from all that i've said I feel like you've absolutely learned a lot from this lesson. I can scroll up and down and see a big difference in line quality and confidence. I'd say you're ready to move along to the 250 box challenge.

P.s.: I've not gotten any feedback for my work yet so if you've learned from anything I said consider looking at my submission and helping me out.

Hi, Just to start off I'm a beginner myself and I just finished submitting my own homework. So consider this as less of an expert analysis of your work and more of a second opinion from someone who's about at your level

1-1:

Looks good. Technically speaking the lesson called only for straight lines but it's all not a huge deal in my(unprofessional) opinion

1-2: pretty damn good imo. Bottom left shows some signs of wrist drawing but it's okay seeing as you've just started up.

1-3: no complaints. Looks good

1-4: It's a little rough imo, Maybe try to be a little slower but still keeping the line confidence up. It's a little too rough to be usable in an actual sketch. Line confidence is less about speed and more about not adjusting your line as you go. Also it looks like you went around 3 or 4 times where uncomfortable went around 1.5 or 2 times. Maybe rewatch the video/read that lesson and try again.

1-5: Same as above, too many time around the ellipse. Ghost more and draw less.

1-6: This is still too many times around but you are getting cleaner. These ellipses are tighter. Apart from that there is no real change in degree of them so that could use some work.

1-7: clean. I like it

1-8: At least from what I see there's a lack of ghosting here, Remember, you can ghost upto the vanishing point to make sure you got the angle right and then just stop at where you actually want the line to end. Some of the parallel lines are actually diverging which shows that you may need to rewatch the video/ go through the lesson again

1-9: I feel like you aren't really thinking in 3D with this one. Remember that as boxes rotate the bottom would fall more and more inwards in perspective as one of the sides would go farther away from the viewer. I'd recommend spending some time just rotating a box of some sort to get a feel for how perspective works. That's something I did with a shoebox that's under my bed. I just spun it around and viewed it from above and below to see how the parallel lines look with one eye closed.

1-10: This is kinda clean. There are a few lines that show signs of chicken scratching (eg: last page bottom right and second-last page large box in the center of the page.) and some boxes look skewed instead of parallel.

In closing, you need to redo a few things but otherwise you're alright. Going from top to bottom I did absolutely see a rise in line quality and confidence. I think you're well on your way to being a great artist.

As a general message to the community please critique my critique as I'm at about the same level and I may have accidentally said something wrong.

Ps.: if you could do me a favor I'd like it if you could check my work in return. I'm waiting to hear if I need to redo any work before I move on to the 250 box challenge and Lesson 2 myself.

I started learning a couple weeks ago myself and I've had the same experience. The best way to get over it is to understand that it's universal. Even most amazing artists look at many of their previous works and groan. Hell, I've been a game developer since I was about 16 and I still hate 90% of the stuff I've made in retrospect. It's about seeing your work not as an indication of your worth as an artist and more as a snapshot of your skills at that very moment in time. It'll get better as time goes on.

Also I understand this is not always easy. Worst case scenario if I can't make a certain stroke I want to make I'll just scribble like a mad man to get the frustration out and then Ctrl Z and go back to calmly working on a stroke I want to make.