QriousK

Thank you for the critique, I greatly appreciate it!

Hi, nice work on completing Lesson 1!

Lines

The superimposed and ghosted lines are smooth and clean. The only exception are your arcs, which are bit wobbly. A few of your ghosted planes are wobbly too.

Ellipses

Your ellipses in planes are even. However, the next exercise could use a few more ellipses in the table, especially in the first page. They should be snugly packed in there. Make sure to draw through your ellipses 2 full times. Some of them seem to be draw through only 1-1 1/2 times. The funnels look good, just remember to keep the ellipses smooth. Try to avoid sharp points on the top and bottom.

Boxes

The "Plotted Perspective" exercise look nice and neat. So do the "Rotated Boxes" and "Rough Perspective" assignments. Your oragnic perspective work looks like a lot of fun; good job on using different shapes and angles! Don't forget to converge the box's lines as they move away from the viewer. You did that well on the first page, but the perspective becomes more shallow on the second page (see the last rectangle, the box in the left bottom corner especially).

Lines

• The line exercises look pretty good. They're smooth and I don't see any wobbling.

Ellipses

• Your ellipses in planes are also smooth and even. The ones in the tables are a bit uneven. It seems some were not drawn through two full times. Try to draw these shapes twice through, at a slower pace.

• The ellipses in funnels are nicely aligned along the minor axis. However, some are cramped (see the middle funnel).

Boxes

• The boxes in plotted perspective exercise converge to the horizon, despite the fact you didn't have a ruler. However, please don't scribble your hactching lines. It will make the form more difficult to see. Instead use your arm to draw smooth diagnols from one end to the other.

• Your rough perspective sheets look fine. The red lines are a bit off of the blue lines. Don't be afraid to slightly overlap them.

• All the boxes have been drawn through in the rotated boxes assignemnt. I see you followed most of the steps, but some of the boxes are missing. See the boxes on the four corners. Their back edges don't quite converge back. That is because they don't entirely follow the convergence of the middle boxes. About 2 boxes are missing from each row of the overall form. You should have 25 boxes total.

• I can clearly see your use of the ghosting method in the organic perspective assignment, so nice work there. The lines converge as they move from the viewer. For the 250 box challenge, feel free to try line weight variation and some more angles.

Lines

• I see a bit of fraying at either end of some of your lines. The arcs tend to waver from one end to the other. Remember to draw from your arm and not your wrist.

• The same advice applies to the ghosted lines. A few are wobbly, but I see that you improve your strokes throughout the exercise.

• The ghosted planes are solid. Try experimenting with more angles as you use this exercise in your warm-ups.

Ellipses

• The ellipses in planes nearly touch all four sides. However, I noticed some are diagnol and only reach two corners. Aim to touch the four edges of the planes, not the corners.

• The table of ellipses meet all criteria for the exercise, except for being smoothly executed. That said, I see they are more smooth in your funnels assignment.

Boxes

• Speaking of smooth, the boxes in plotted perspective boxes assignment are well-executed. The rough perspective and rotated boxes look good too. The latter one especially meets all the criteria.

• Now your organic boxes could use more diverse angles as I see you used a similar one for each, but other than that it seems fine. When you draw boxes as a warm up, I recommend practing line variation for more visual interest.

Hey there! Nice work on the completing Lesson 1.

Lines

The line exercises look good! The ghosted planes have many diverse angles and sizes.

Ellipses

Your ellipses are smoothly executed too. That said, remember to draw through them two full times. I see a few in the table that look like they were only drawn through once.

The forms in the funnels are evenly shaped. Yet I see a guide there that is not a funnel, but is more oval shaped. The result of this is are some pretty cramped ellipses. Remember to draw funnels going forward, that is the arcs going inward, not outward.

Boxes

The plotted perspective boxes are fine for the most part, there's just a couple lines that are slanted. When using a ruler, remember to draw straight lines that are perpendicular to the horizon. Great use of line variation in the organic perspective; I can definitely tell which boxes are meant to be in the front. In the last rectangle of the second page, I see a few boxes that come off the line. In your next warm-ups, allow them to stay on line and go with the flow. :)

Good question. My point was that convergence should be clear even if we don't see the vanishing points (as Uncomfy mentioned in "The Next Fifty" homework section). Size wasn't necessarily the issue, but some of your converging lines stopped short. So I recommended shrinking the boxes. Hopefully this clears things up.

Take a look at Box 89 on your page and Uncomfortable's example. He allows the lines to pass through the boxes to illustrate convergence.

To answer your question, the revision was necessary for me to ensure that your lines would come together, instead of stagnating. Otherwise, it was not vital in allowing you to pass on to the next lesson. That said, I'll mark this as complete.

Nice improvement! It seems you made a lot a progress with this exercise.

• There is a good variety of forms present here. Each orientation and size is different which allows you to experiment with many angles. I see you corrected your hatching technique as well. Earlier it was done stylistically, then later the lines moved in a direction that enhanced the form. Well done.

• It seems there is one issue that occurs on all your pages however. Some boxes are too big! This is important because we can't see where the lines converge if they run off the page. I recommend drawing slightly smaller boxes so we can see convergence.

• Many of the lines start to come together, especially after Box 88, so I believe you get the gist of the assignment. Don't be afraid to practice more extreme perspective as seen in 223, 225, and 228.

You had a great start to the exercise! Most of the lines were converging, if not close to convergence. However, I see where you might have rushed later in the assignment.

• From pages 1-10 the boxes and their lines were visible on the page. While many of the lines converged, they overlapped with other shapes and forms which made them hard to see. Boxes 24 and 25 are a bit mishapen. I think you were too worried about the top rectangles here, so I agree you should focus on the lines. Boxes 28 and 29 appear too extreme because their lines diverge instead of converging.

• From pages 11-50, your boxes became too big and many lines veer off the page so it is difficult to tell if there is convergence or not. Try to draw smaller in future lessons so you can observe the perspective.

• Lastly, many boxes seem to lose dramatic perspective due to the the lines moving away from each other instead of towards each other (see box 201). This assignment is alot of work, but try to be patient and you will likely see desired results.

Recommendations

• Use different materials

  • Use colored pencils/pens to draw the converging lines. This will make it easier for you (and others) to see your converging lines. It is not necesarily a problem if shapes overlap as long as the lines are visible. If you don't have colored pencils/pens, try using a pencil for the lines, and a pen for the boxes.

• Draw smaller

  • Drawing smaller boxes will allow us to see how your forms converge. The boxes don't have to be that much smaller. Just go for the sizes you had in pages 1-10.

Lines

Strong start to the homework with the line assignments. I don't see any glaring issues. However, I notice the ghosted lines seem to taper at the end. Try to maintain the same line weight for similar assignments going forward.

Ellipses

The ellipses look good too. Just remember to draw through them two full times. A few shapes in the first page in "Table of Ellipses" aren't completely finished.

Boxes

Your boxes are solid! However, the Organic Perspective page could use more dramatic foreshortening. Right now, it appears cluttered because many of the boxes are close together. Keep space and distance in mind for your next assignments.

Thank you for the advice and explanation!