PizzaPlease12

Hello,

I apologize for taking so long to get to this. Thank you very much for the thorough critique. I have no questions and understand your explanation of cast shadows.

This looks amazing, I would buy some ice cream.

You're welcome.

Your Organic Forms are not very off. They follow this section of the lesson very well: https://drawabox.com/lesson/2/5/ellipses . The issue is there is little variance in how the forms twist through 3D space between all your forms (they all twist really similarly) and the contour ellipses are sometimes placed a little off (look at the top middle form) - they all look like that example and this hampers your progress in understanding 3D space.

I shouldn't have said "inconsistent", as that is too vague and sounds like they're worse than I meant. There are also some sharp changes in ellipse degree, especially between the middle (narrowest) ellipse and the ones right next to it.

You're welcome, I am glad to help.

I am glad to help.

Hello, my name is PizzaPlease and I am here to critique your Lesson 2 submission. Congratulations on getting through the lesson and there's no need to be embarrassed, it is dense and time-consuming.

Your Organic Arrows pages are really well-done. The lines are confident. You utilized width and compression to create a very convincing illusion of 3D space. In the future, try overlapping your arrows and making them larger.

The Organic Forms exercise looks good. The degree of the ellipses could be varied more and remember to keep the ends the same size, though you did well keeping the forms simple. Your contour curves hook around properly and will get less flat with time.

Your Texture Analysis page looks beautiful. You did very well creating the gradients. Your use of stippling is used like hatching on the rock texture gradient, which you should avoid even if it looks really cool (reference: https://drawabox.com/lesson/2/2/formshading). Uncomfortable does say stippling is okay in controlled doses - I believe he refers to it as "controlled randomness", but you're creating a gradient I think is only reflective of the light level and not actually pits in the rocks. Please send me the reference to correct me if I am mistaken.

Your Dissections pages are equally excellent. You did well wrapping the textures and breaking the silhouette. I have no issues with these pages, you clearly studied the textures closely.

The forms in your Form Intersections should be equilateral to each other, the same in all three dimensions. (reference: https://drawabox.com/lesson/2/8/stretched). You could've fit more forms on these pages. I would recommend placing contour ellipses on more of your spheres to help sell three-dimensionality, but this will be covered more in Lesson 3.

The Organic instersections pages look great. They are convincingly placed and all of them are drawn through. The contour curves could use more variation to better describe the forms.

Hello, my name is PizzaPlease and I am here to critique your Lesson 2 submission. Congratulations on getting through the lesson.

Your Organic Arrows pages are well-done. The lines are confident. You employed width and compression to create a very convincing illusion of 3D space. In the future, don't scribble out anything you make a mistake on. You'll learn from your failures and whoever critiques your work gets a fuller picture of your understanding, as well. The arrow you put a question mark by looks odd because it is turning back onto itself. The arrowhead and the first bend of the arrow have an unclear relationship, but they're both further back than the second bend so it looks weird. You also applied hatching on the wrong section of the arrow here, making it more confusing.

The Organic Forms exercise has the same issue with not fully completing the pages due to mistakes. Your forms generally look good. They do tend to have ends of slightly different sizes and falter some. You did well varying the degree of your ellipses. The hooked contours page is a little rougher, which is to be expected, and some of your forms aren't simple.

Your Texture Analysis page looks good. You did very well creating the gradients. You should fill the boxes on the left side of the page completely and not be trying to achieve anything but a direct study.

Your Dissections pages are excellent. You could have fit more organic forms on them, especially the second page. Your moon, basketball, and uneven brick textures demonstrate close observation.

The forms in your Form Intersections should be equilateral to each other (reference: https://drawabox.com/lesson/2/8/stretched). You got closer to this on the third and fourth pages. I would recommend placing contour ellipses on your spheres to help sell three-dimensionality, but this will be covered more in Lesson 3.

The Organic instersections pages look great. Almost all of them are convincingly placed and all of them are drawn through. The contour curves are better here. Many of the shadows are cast unnaturally, take a look at this: https://d15v304a6xpq4b.cloudfront.net/lesson_images/516f8d4f.jpg .

Hello, my name is PizzaPlease and I am here to critique your Lesson 2 submission. Congratulations on getting through the lesson.

Your Organic Arrows pages are well-done. The lines are confident. You employed width and compression to create a convincing illusion of 3D space. You overlapped many of your arrows. Pay a bit more attention to where you place your hatching, it is sometimes on the overlapping section (reference: https://drawabox.com/lesson/2/4/step4)

Your Organic Forms are mostly simple and have consistent widths. I recommend reviewing Uncomfortable's example page to gain a better understanding of how the ellipses describe the sausage in 3D, yours are inconsistent. You shouldn't place visible contour ellipses when both sides are facing away, like in most of your sausage forms (reference: https://media.discordapp.net/attachments/368871002584907776/867744968432549928/QTEqgJa_1.png?width=618&height=601).

Your Texture Analysis page is wonderful. You clearly paid attention to shadow shapes and achieved an excellent gradient with the corn texture. It looks like you relied too much on stippling for the plaster wall texture, using it like hatching.

Your pages of dissections show close observation of various textures, but you use hatching here quite a bit (reference: https://drawabox.com/lesson/2/2/formshading). Avoid this in the future. Cast shadows should be drawn as shapes and then filled in with solid black.

The forms in your Form Intersections should be equilateral to each other (reference: https://drawabox.com/lesson/2/8/stretched). You do get better at this in the later pages. You did well completely filling the pages and not clustering forms. I would recommend placing contour ellipses on your spheres to help sell three-dimensionality, but this will be covered more in Lesson 3. Some of your boxes are a little wonky, either not converging at all or diverging significantly. Remember to take your time figuring out convergences, as they are very important to consistent three-dimensionality.

The Organic Instersections pages look good, but might be a little over-full (look at the number Uncomfortable did: https://drawabox.com/lesson/2/9/example). The sausage forms at the tops of the piles don't look convincing, like on the far left of page 1 and the far right of page 2. They look good for the most part and are drawn through properly. The degrees of your contour curves could be varied more, but that'll improve with time.

Hello, my name is PizzaPlease and I am here to critique your Lesson 2 submission. I'm glad you enjoyed it.

First, it appears you're using ballpoint to complete this lesson. I may be mistaken and please correct me if so. Ballpoint is allowed for Lesson 1 and the 250 Box Challenge, but it is much more beneficial to use fineliners and a brush pen in Lesson 2 (reference: https://drawabox.com/lesson/2/4/step4).

Your Organic Arrows pages are mostly well-done. The lines shake a little bit, perhaps ghost them more or try to execute them a bit more quickly. Pay a bit more attention to where you place your hatching, it is often on the overlapping section. Your widths look good, I would recommend experimenting with compression more to sell the idea the arrow is flowing through 3D space.

The forms in your first page of Organic Forms are drawn well, with some inconsistency in width and the same issues with line wobbling. The second page is far less consistent and it looks like the three forms on the left of the page were squished down to fit. Remember, these forms should be drawn with consistent width and end size. The variance in degree of your ellipses is quite small. I would review this section of the lesson and think more about how the sausage forms turn in 3D space (reference: https://media.discordapp.net/attachments/368871002584907776/867744968432549928/QTEqgJa_1.png?width=618&height=601)

Your texture analysis page relies very heavily on line, when you should be focusing on shadow shapes. I would highly recommend reviewing this section of Lesson 2: https://drawabox.com/lesson/2/2 . Your gradients do not effectively transition from dark to light, as there is little nuance in the shadows.

Your first page of dissections has the same issues. Your second page is better and engages more with cast shadows. The textures on the upper right sausage form look implied, but the rest are predominately lines. You did well breaking the silhouette to make your textures more identifiable.

The forms in your form intersections should be equilateral to each other (reference: https://drawabox.com/lesson/2/8/stretched). There are more than necessary on the second page of boxes and it looks like you didn't define all their intersections as a result. The other two pages are less crowded, but still many forms do not have defined intersections. I would recommend looking at this resource: https://imgur.com/a/6Inx5Bz .

The organic instersections pages struggle with confident lines and an understanding of how the forms sit on top of each other. Remember, you should be considering how you're laying one form on top of the other before you put pen to paper. Consider: how does it sag over or wrap around this form (reference: https://drawabox.com/lesson/2/9/step3)? Line weight is applied inconsistently. It should be used to clarify overlaps and can be placed just on the overlapping sections of the form, not the entire form.

These look great. It looks like you're ghosting the weight and you aren't overdoing it. It only needs to go on the overlapping sections to clarify which section of the arrow is closer, you have put it on some of the arrow heads.

I recommend not doing another page now. These are excellent arrows and you'll get more practice with this concept later on.