Pingu83

Thank you alot for your feedback, it definitely helps to see someone elses point of view and expertise. I'll make sure to keep this advice in mine when I return to some of these exercises in the future.

Hi, I’ll be doing your lesson 2 critique. Before I get into the meat of things I would like to say I am not qualified by any means I am only using my knowledge to critique this and I am not certified so please please take everything I say with a tablespoon of salt for good measure.

Anywho, starting with the “Organic Arrows” exercise; I believe that you did a good job at capturing the perspective in the arrows however I feel like there are a good amount of loose pieces of your arrows that could have been used to let your edges overlap and further the exercise’s helpfulness to understanding 3D space.

For your “Organic Forms with Contour Lines” I see that in your ellipse variation of the exercise that a large amount of the ellipses stay the same degree throughout the entire sausage form. On top of this, I also see that some of your ellipses seem squished or clumped together and it breaks the illusion and importance of the exercise a tad bit. I will say that your ellipses are correctly aligned and have been drawn through well. Meanwhile, in your contour curves variation I think your curves hook around very well, however I do not understand why some of the curves are facing in one direction while others are not. 

I think you did a really good job on your “texture analysis” homework I think it demonstrates that you understand the difference between the implicit and explicit texture as well as the dark to light gradient. 

On a similar note, your “Dissections” homework is pretty well done, I can definitely see the cast shadows and the texture flowing with the curvature of the sausage form. However, I wish more of the textures you drew broke the silhouette, as I believe it really helps describe the texture to the viewer. (ex: your feathers should have been poking out like the dragon skin one, or at least in a similar manner) I also wish you applied the gradient (as shown in the texture analysis homework) to your dissections more often (ex: your octopus and corn does a good job at this while the mushroom does not have this smooth transition present) as I think the transition of a darker space to a lighter space would make your textures look more realistic as well. But overall really good job.

Your homework for “Form Intersections” is decent, I believe it captures the purpose of it well but it wish your boxes would be shaded on the correct sides and I wish your forms would have a smoother form of intersection instead of just a line stacked on top of another. (If you don’t know what I’m trying to get at look at this first aid kit for clarification of what I would’ve liked to have seen in your intersections: https://imgur.com/a/6Inx5Bz) 

Finally, your homework for the “Organic Intersections” exercise needs some work as the forms don’t seem stacked but rather clumped, on top of this majority of the forms seem to lay parallel on one another which ruins the idea that the forms are like water balloons and the illusion of stability of these forms. You also seemed to shade the shadow’s attached to the form its on not the form its projecting the shadow on; remember that these shadows are being projected onto the form below it and such the shadow would bend according the shape of the form below it.

Overall, I believe you demonstrated your comprehension of this lesson and the hard work you have put into the program thus far. Good luck with lesson 3 and beyond. But please keep practicing these exercises as you will see a massive improvement in them. See these assignments like exercises at the gym, you don’t just squat once and get strong legs you have to keep squatting frequently, so on that note please keep these in your warmup selection as I think you will see positive improvement if you do these exercises more frequently. Cheers!

Hi there, thank you SO much for your reply. I really appreciate your critques; in the revisions I really tried to take into account what you mentioned. Please let me know what you think if you are able. :)

link to revision images: https://imgur.com/a/dsrDfnm

I think your exercises demonstrate that you really comprehend the material. Kudos to you. However, one small critque I have is on your Plane of Ellipses exercise some of the ellipses do not fit snuggly in the space but that is only for a few of them. Overall I think you did a fantastic job.