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• Arrows: it shows depth better now, not smooth though, focus more on those in warmups, try aiming for smooth lines

• Contours: again lines not smooth, but you got the concept right

• Texture analysis: looks OK now

• Dissections: looks way better, but still some things to improve here:

  • hairy texture only shows hairs breaking contour on one side and it breaks contour evenly (as form wraps around some smaller ones should be visible from behind), other side should be similar

  • Try doing following textures for warm ups: 1) cow/tiger or other animal flat pattern (its flat, so you need to show wrapping around by curving it/changing scale as it nears the edges. 2) scales/feathers - it has a lot of protruding forms, so good for breaking contour + vary the scale and orientation of scales/feathers as they approach the edge.

• Organic intersection - I don't think you got shadow part yet, it does feel like surface they-re lying on is flat which is an improvement, but shadows they cast onto other forms feel too short - remember shadow wraps around form it falls onto.

• Arrows: First 2 pages have non-confident lines, third page is way better. Line weight is too thich - when 2 lines overlap just slighly darken the one thats on top. Thickness of arrows is also varying too much (it should be smaller thickness for part further away and bigger for part nearer the viewer.

• Contours: some ellipses are like 3+ go overs - should be 1-2 at most (its fine to do more in air hovering above paper). Also ellipse degrees do not wary (as 'sausage' turns in space all parts are at different angle to viewer so ellipses will gradually change in degree - i.e. get more narrow or wider)

• Textures: It feels like you rushed this one a lot - draw big sausages so it's easier to draw textures.

• Form intersections: some forms are a bit skewed but overall it looks OK, intersections are bad but it's still fine at lesson 2 (as it's hard + this exercise will be given in future lessons)

• Organic intersections: lines look a bit jagged and unconfident + a lot of shadows are missing/wrong, though you did get the hardest part - piling forms - right.

Overall I think it's good work - I will still request revision for some exercises to make journey ahead smoother.

you improved a lot, good job! - this challenge is tough.

Your main mistake (in latest boxes) is converging lines in wrong direction (i.e. box 246) - which makes it not a box but a wedge.

you're probably fed up with boxes, but still do some as warm up sometimes - like rotating a single box - as you will revisit boxes in future lessons.

Ellipses look OK now, though their degrees in funnels barely vary...

Rotated boxes look OK now

organic perspective is still bad but I guess 250 boxes challenge will improve those boxes so you can move on. Do not forget to limit boxes to ~5/6 per page and extend convergence lines after every page.

• Superimposing: OK

• Ghosting: OK

• Planes: OK

• Ellipses tables: you should try to make them touch row boundaries and other ellipses, also vary degrees among rows (i.e. one row of circles, another of very thin ones, etc)

• Ellipses in planes: while you did try to hit 2 points on a plane you were supposed to try to hit 4 points (the middle points of each border line)

• Funnels: ellipses should be varying in degree - your funnel ellipses have nearly the same degree

• Plotted perspective: OK

• Rough perspective: OK

• Organic perspective: your boxes convergence lines diverge a lot (convergence lines start on corner of the box closest to viewer (Y shape center) and then all parallel lines to Y lines should converge (get closer) as it goes away. Also draw through your boxes.

• Rotated boxes: center box and 4 boxes around were good, then mistakes happened: next boxes in line have same convergence as initial 4 boxes - it should converge more as box gets rotated. As for boxes in between you should not guess that much - boxes should be very close to each other so that 2 planes of boxes in between can be almost the same as nearby boxes. Also draw through your boxes.

Thank you!

Thank you for the critique!

Thanks for the critique!

Regarding leaves - for some reason I find twisting leaves harder than arrows. I will try to keep your tips in mind when moving forward.

Hello,

overall your work looks good, though in organic boxes you forgot to draw through your forms - this helps to understand 3D space better.

good luck in 250 boxes challenge, it gets boring after a while so do remember the 50% drawing is fun part from Lesson 0

Hello,

good job completing the lesson! most exercises are done well, here's critique:

• for Arrows I see a lot of chicken scratching (confidence >> accuracy in drawabox ), also there's not much of them you could have done more - I suggest doing some confident arrows

• organic ellipses/curves - I see some lacking line confidence in some of them once again, also your sausage hardly rotate in 3d space - most ellipses/curves have same degree which while possible hardly happens in real life (look up some slinky photos), I suggest to try contours exercise with varying ellipses degrees

Good luck in your art journey!