PaulPisces

Based on Aki's critiques, as well as the last revision, I'll mark you as complete.

However please take more note of the example homework page from the lesson for the layout and orientation of the page. For example your rough perspective Aki gave you the example page to follow. The mistake there would having to draw your boxes a bit too small.

You fixed the mistakes for the most part, and I’d say you are ready for 250 boxes.

In your future warms you will pick 2-3 exercises to draw for about 15 minutes before you tackle boxes each day.

1-2 pages of boxes a day @ 5-6 per page is a good target. Take your time and ask questions in #basic-challenges for this one.

Good Luck!

Pretty good overall, but you have some concepts to make sure to get.

1) "We're also going to draw a nice, swoopy line as you can see here. Imagine this line moves from closer up to the viewer and pushes back into the scene, getting further away" - you came toward the viewer at some point after the first box in each pane.

2) Place dots for every corner of every box, before drawing the line. This applies to every ghosted line from now on. This was rushed and it shows.

3) 3 panes per page is what was asked for. Please follow directions more carefully in the future.

Lastly I'd mention that when uploading in imgur, you can select as many photos as you want when you are uploading, and it will put them into a tidy album, that you can share the link of. When taking a picture of your work take the picture with your phone perpendicular to the page, and hold the camer closer to the paper.

I was a bit rude of you to not go back and correct how you uploaded when it was pointed out. Maybe now you see the effort I took far outweighs a little inconvenience on your time. You will be needing to do these critiques (5 of them( before you can submit your 250 boxes,

I would like you to reply with your first 2 pages of your 250 box challenge, as that relates to this exercise pretty well. I'm giving you the benefit of the doubt here.

Attach all the revisions I requested to this critique please.

Overall pretty good. But there are a few things to point out that are important, and appeared in all of your attempts.

1) You havent drawn all of your box lines (a couple of visible ones, but a lot of the hidden back lines). We are meant to draw all 12 lines of each box. That is far more important than shading. when shading make sure you arent drawing parallel to any hidden box lines.

2) Keep the gaps between boxe consistent. The prior box dictates where you will place the edge of the next box.

3) Rotation, you started to get it in the last one I think, but you want to rotate more like shown in this tutorial picture pinned at Lesson 1 on Discord: https://cdn.discordapp.com/attachments/368870697742630912/715669112222908466/zfr3o7xneog31.png

I'd like you to draw the rest of the lines on your last attempt. you can do that in a different color.

Overall you got this one. I would recommend learning to draw your lines parallel to the vertical and horizontal when you ghost them. ghost to place the dots (if you mes up jsut place another dot), and then draw your line.

Good job on this on - enothing to really note except the ink running :)

Overall you did OK. The main issue is not aligning the ellipses to the center line of the funnel (that is also the minor axis of the ellipse), and on one or two you drew through the ellipse more then 3x.

I'm asking for a page with just one funnel, try to keep the ellipses aligned to the center line, that line should divide the ellipse in 2 equal parts. If you can, try to vary the degree (width) - narrow at the center of the funnel and getting wider as you move out.

On this one - in each section we want to draw the ellipses in each "section" with the same angle (tilt) and degree (how open the ellipses are. These are better then the ellipses in planes, you made 2x around for the most part and you didnt deform them as much to fit. Good job, and keep those things in mind for your warmups.

1) I'll address the first problem as I'm still seeing wobbling. Wobbling is (usually) from your eye/brain trying to correct the line while in flight. Try drawing your lines a little faster - you can slow it down later when you have more control over the line trajectory.

2) You didnt place dots for every line, on every plane. Take your time, place your dots, and then ghost/draw your lines. Dont forget to rotate your paper so the motion you are drawing wis the same for each line. This is what builds muscle memory.

3) Ellipses -- Your top left is pretty confident and smooth, although you didn't manage to draw it through 2 -- We are supposed to draw through our ellipses between 2x and 3x.

I'll be asking for a single page of ghosted planes, and then add the ellipses in those planes (picture of ghosted picture of ellipses in planes). Pack your planes on the page similar to the example homework and directions https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/15/example

and keep all your dots small.

edit: don't try and deform the ellipses to fit. smooth and confident regardless of if you hit the side lines of the plane.

You have the concept down really well, but you've had a lot more arcing here. Wrist should be locked. Elbow and arm are driven from the shoulder. Please watch the video and read through this part https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/2/video