Orbibobi

Thank you very much for the critique!

Will keep the issues in mind and try to correct them especially the shading/shadows I want to improve at.

Also I guess just as info (probably irrelevant at this point), I think I only mistakenly used fineliner for lines with the mouse demo. Everything else is either ballpoint or brush pen.

Especially the last four drawings are definitely ballpoint pen only but since it is relatively dry/pale I went multiple times over the same line to apply some more lineweight/thickness to make it visible/readable amidst all the construction and I guess it ended up looking like a fineliner.

Again thank you for your time.

Thank you for the critique and pointing out the issues

Honestly looking back I didn't have a clear distinction between the clean-up pass and adding line weight will have to look into that.

Thank you for the critique. Will try to apply corrections where pointed out!

Advice noted, and thank you for the clarification on my original post message.

Thank you for the extensive critique.

• Yes I tended to slow down towards the end of lines, will work on fixing it as well as the short lines.

• With the rough perspective I forgot to upload the second page it seems (fixed it now)

• On organic perspective I got sloppy and didn't use the dot ghosting method. Will use it always from now on. Instead i went straight into the Y with lines and then eyeballing other lines from the endpoints.

Again thank you for your time.

RPMFX gave you a nice critique (I'm just gonna repeat in my opinion the biggest problems you should work on first) and its hard to judge at the beginning if you're inexperienced or doing something wrong.

The main thing I would strongly emphasize as he said it is to draw confidently from the shoulder and prioritize smoothness and confidence over accuracy. The elipses are especially wobbly. The second biggest problem would be with the boxes as it seems you didn't actually think where they should go. Imagine the line from one point to the other ghost it and actually look where your arm is going and adjust accordingly. I noticed it myself the difference when you think you are ghosting to adjust and when you actually ghost to adjust.

Otherwise good luck.

Thank you very much for your time and pointing out the points to improve.

Hello and good job on the lesson.

Here are my thoughts:

Superimposed lines:

• Seeing some fraying at the end. Of course at the beginning natural and it will diminish with practice, but at the end be mindfull of it.

• The curves look like they weren't drawn as confidently or were drawn slowly with a wrist and not with the shoulder since there is quite a bit of wobblines.

Ghosted lines:

-Seems good although again some wobbles.

Ghosted planes:

-Looking good. (Basically all of the internal lines have a good direction)

Table of ellipses:

• Here we see the wobbly lines are back -> shoulder and confidence. But there is noticable improvement towards the end of the exercise so great job there (getting warmed up?).

Ellipses in planes:

• Wobbles are less noticeable as before. Accuracy in planes also good. There is inaccuracy with multiple passes of ellipses but do not worry with practice it will go away just something to be mindful of.

Funnels:

• Quite nice there is some outliers, such as some ellipses are deformed. Priority is a confident smooth stroke/ellipse at this stage so if accuracy suffers for now so be it. Some ellipses also arent aligned to the minor axis.

Plotted perspective:

• Looking real nice here. Although there is a weird line in the first scene which should go vertical but instead goes at an angle (upper left, i can see you didn't shaded it so i assume you realized that its wrong).

Rough perspective:

• Looking good, looks like you know what you're aiming for. Only again try to eliminate the wobbles with a confident line.

Rotated boxes:

• Also well done, and do not be afraid to rotate the side boxes even more.

Organic perspective:

• Quite well done. Maybe some convergent lines are going in the wrong direction instead of a common vanishing point but nothing major for now.

All in all well done.

Hello and good job on completing lesson 1. Here are my observations.

Lines

The start of the lines is good always from the same point but we can see some feathering on the other side which is normal and accuracy here comes with time.

There is slight wobblines in ghosted lines as well. To get rid of it you really have to think and use as much arm as possible and as confident stroke as possible. Again accuracy should come with time.

The same with ghosted planes.

Elipses

Here lies the most notable problem I see where I think you prioritized accuracy. The goal is to have a smooth and confident elipse. To get that you really have to use your arm and do it a bit faster than you probably did to get rid of wobbles.

Same with elipses in planes but less notable.

Funnels are accutrate as well but some wobbles are still present.

Boxes

Ploted perspective looks great and clean. Only thing to have it a bit more presentable and prettier is to apply some lineweight to the silhouettes of the boxes.

Rough perspective looks good, looks like you understand where the lines should go. And again accuracy should come with time so try to minimize the wobbles.

Rotated boxes look nice and clean.

Organic perspective clean.

Boxes wise have to say they look really clean but there are minor errors with rotated boxes and organic perspective like the convergance of the lines which I belive will be solved if you go through the 250 box challenge.

And accuracy and wobblines wise again try your best to draw with the arm accuracy will come later. I only started to notice my accuracy with boxes improve towards the end of the 250 box challenge so do not worry if it doesnt come immediately.

Hopefully I helped you and didn't make to many mistakes myself, and good luck on your future endeavors.

Thank you very much. :) But yea I had trouble with using the whole arm at first and using the elbow mostly but will try to focus on that even more.