Omertoso

Hi, I will be critiquing your work today.

Good job on completing Lesson 1, you've done well.

With regards to lines, there is a little wobble and bowing in the lines, but not too major. This is often due to the arm not given full control by the brain over the mark, leading to deviations. It is important to strike marks with confidence. Based on your work, this should get ironed out in the 250 box challenge.

Ellipses are done well, however I noticed for the Ellipses in planes. some of the ellipses don't touch all 4 sides of the plane. This is relatively minor based on your work, but it is something to keep in mind moving forward.

Boxes are done well, good practice of the ghosting method. Exercises are done according to instruction and done well. Wobbling still exists but should be ironed out in the 250 box challenge. Rotated boxes and Organic perspective are done well too, however some of the boxes don't converge properly in organic perspective. This is another thing that will be ironed out in the 250 box challenge.

All in all, good job on Lesson 1. Add these exercises to your warm-ups and proceed forward. Good luck!

I’ll see if I can offer any advice for the rotated boxes exercise. You’ll need it for the 250 box exercise

Superimposed Lines: you’ve done well here. Good job at starting on the dot!

Ghosted Lines: your lines are good here too

Ghosted Planes: lines are good here to, and good job experimenting with your planes; However you might have rush some planes though

Tables of Ellipses: You followed the direction here well. It just needs a bit more practice to make sure to add these to your warmups.

Ellipses in Planes: your ellipses could be in your planes a bit more, but nice consistency with your ellipse.

Funnels: Your lines should be a bit more centered and the ellipse needs to rotate with said lines too. Good job on touching the edge of the funnel though.

Plotted Perspective: Well done here you follow the direction correctly.

Rough Perspective: the front and back sides of the boxes look a bit rushed but the lines in between look good. Just take your time and focus with this exercise.

Rotated Boxes: Some of the boxes are not Finnish and starting points of the boxes should be closer to other boxes. Good shape though!.

Organic Perspective: I feel like you were too experimental with some of the boxes. Some of the lines were drawn twice, make sure to plan out your lines first and ghost them before you commit the line. The lines on a box should always be parallel to the lines from the other side of the box. make sure to study that line before you place the first dot, and of cours take your time and don’t get overwhelmed if your other boxes don’t turn out how you would like them.

Overall you did well. Make sure to take your time with these exercises. Start out by making sure you understand the basics of the exercise and then start to experiment with how you draw them. Finally make sure to do your warmups!

Hey There!

•The Problems in (superimposed lines, ghost planes, rough perspective, rotated boxes and organic perspective ) you are facing are wobbly lines. So try to loosen up yourself and try ghosting more and relax draw with confidence.

•We all are beginners so we tend to make mistake but we have to realize and tackle the problem and solve it.

For Ellipses also try ghosting more and draw after ghosting ( without stoping).

• Superimposed lines try to avoid fraying ( distortion) at the starting and end of the line.

• Try to understand what Uncomfortable (Irshad) is saying in the video also read the text all knowledge he shares is useful so try not to ignore.

Stay Consistent and Happy Journey!

• Ghosted planes look really good. Good job on sticking to only doing two passes on the ellipses.

• Funnels look great, no complaints there.

• Ghosted lines - come on, you can do more than that. Fill the page! Try longer lines too if you’re feeling more confident.

• Super imposed lines look confident and precise, but work on the longer ones, as I’m seeing a lot of fraying.

• Organic perspective could use some different line weights, just to guide the eye better. Other than that, perspective looks fine. Would have liked to see more effort on the hatching/shading. Use it as an opportunity to practice parallel ghosted lines. Bonus points if you use a thinner pen too. Some questionable distorted perspective on page 2, but whatever.

• Plotted perspective looks good. You did a better job with the hatching here - nice straight lines too.

• Rotated boxes? Not sure what happened here. You seem to be missing the second layer of boxes on each side. You also didn’t draw all the way through on most of them. Please redo this bit and follow along with the official video if you’re having trouble. Hey, at least you got straight lines though!

• Rough perspective looks fine by me, although I would have liked to see more boxes drawn per page. Otherwise, good job.

• Ellipses table looks top notch, nothing more to say. Gets even better on page 2. Really well done here.

• Overall, great progress. Loving your straight, accurate, and confident lines. Ellipses are also super tight. I can tell you’ve had previous experience with drawing. Looks like you got a bit confused with rotated boxes, but I don't blame you, as it's supposed to be quite a hard exercise designed to push and torture you :)

• If you found my feedback helpful, I would appreciate a review of my Lesson 1, thanks.

• https://drawabox.com/community/submission/1U42P1IR

Hello! Good job finishing the lesson. Let's get it critiqued!

Starting with the lines

Superimposed lines No fraying at the start point, which is good. Some wobble, which can be helped by being more confident when drawing the line. Focusing on the end point may help too.

Your Ghosted Lines&Planes are great. Very little wobble, which will improve with more mileage, although it always helps to stay confident in your execution over accuracy for now. I see no issues in Ghosted Planes that weren't present in Ghosted Lines, which makes me think you took your time with the exercise. Good job!

Moving on to ellipses

A fine Tables of Ellipses. You drew through the ellipses and made sure to try and fit them within the borders and against each other. Fairly smooth and even shape on average, although they sometimes become stiffer and deformed in Ellipses in Planes. This can be helped by reminding yourself that a smooth, even shape confidently executed from the shoulder is more important here than fitting the ellipse inside the plane and touching all four sides.

Good job with the Funnels, drawing through your ellipses and placing them snug against each other and the funnel sides. I'm noticing that some aren't aligned with the minor axis. You want to make sure that the minor axis cuts each ellipse into two equal, symmetrical halves, down their narrower dimension, as mentioned here in the course.

And finally, boxes

Plotted perspective is done correctly. A few of the back edges are slanted, which is expected and can be mitigated with taking your time to align the ruler.

Excellent Rough Perspective. You did well in keeping the faces of the boxes rectangular and extending the depth lines to the horizon line. Your linework remains mostly uncompromised by the increased complexity of the task, keep it up!

A solid attempt at Rotated Boxes. You did well by doing the core setup, drawing through the boxes, applying rotation fairly well and trying to keep your gaps tight and consistent. All required boxes are present as well.

In Organic Perspective I'm seeing good rotations and scaling with depth and no leaning into dramatic foreshortening. However, there are a few problems with this exercise. First off, some edges seem to be diverging rather than converging towards their vanishing point. Revise this part of Rotated Boxes exercise for help with your convergences. About that box marked with a question mark where only two sides are visible (it's not the only one like that, too): it turned out like that because you didn't do the Y method correctly. As you can see, your initial Y is more of a ? shape. Quoting the lesson instructions: "The lengths of the various arms [of the Y] is up to you, but do make sure that the angles between them are of at least 90 degrees - when the angles get smaller than that, things tend to get a little... weird."

In conclusion: A very solid submission, with some struggling in the Organic Perspective part. Still, I believe you've learned well, and with keeping provided feedback in mind, you are ready to move on to 250 boxes and iron out the kinks there, together with warmups.

Hello! Good job finishing the lesson. Let's get it critiqued!

Starting with the lines

Superimposed Lines look fine. Most fraying is at the end point, some on both ends, being more careful when placing your pen on the start point should help with that. Some wobbling, which can be helped by being more confident executing the stroke while focusing on the end point of the line.

Ghosted Lines look very confident to me, aside from the few wobbly ones, which might have happened due to hesitation or using your wrist accidentally. Remember to be confident and use your whole arm while drawing to mitigate this. Your Ghosted Planes are fine, but I notice increased wobble in the lines. This might've happened because you didn't take your time or were hesitant due to the increased volume of work. I'll just take this opportunity to remind you that how much time you have, or how much time you'd like to take, is not a factor here, so the only thing dictating how much time you should be spending is how much time the specific task you need to perform demands.

Moving on to ellipses

Tables of Ellipses: You drew through the ellipses and tried to fit them within the borders and against each other as well as you can. Some of these are on the wobbly side, minimizing movement from the wrist and elbow should help with this. Some aren't quite so smooth and even, so together with the previous suggestion, try your best to ghost thoroughly and execute confidently. I'm noticing the same trends with Ellipses in Planes, maybe a little exacerbated due to the increased complexity of the task. Again, I suggest taking more time ghosting the ellipses, executing confidently from the shoulder, and minimizing wrist movement.

In Funnels you did well in drawing through your ellipses and trying to place them close against each other and the funnel sides. Some ellipses "spill" outside the sides, which you should strive to avoid, keeping your ellipses as close to the sides as possible. Some ellipses aren't aligned with the minor axis. You want to make sure that the minor axis cuts each ellipse into two equal, symmetrical halves, down their narrower dimension, as mentioned here in the course. This misalignment can also be caused by simply having your minor axis not be centered between the arcs, so that's something to keep in mind as well.

And finally, boxes

Plotted perspective is done correctly. A few of the back edges are slanted, which is expected and can be mitigated with taking your time to align the ruler.

Your Rough Perspective is solid. You did well in keeping the faces of the boxes rectangular and extending the depth lines to the horizon line. I see increased wobbling your linework here at the start. This may be from being more cautious now that you're constructing boxes. I see that wobble subside later in the exercise, keep it up!

A very good attempt at Rotated Boxes. You did well by doing the core setup correctly, drawing through the boxes, applying rotation fairly well and trying to keep your gaps tight and consistent. All required boxes are present as well. I see the complexity of the exercise hasn't compromised your linework here, good job!

In Organic Perspective I see good rotations and scaling with depth, no leaning into dramatic foreshortening or diverging edges. Wobble returns to the linework briefly, but you seem to have returned on track rather quickly, which is great. One thing I'd like to point out is that you should try to rotate the boxes in a way where three faces are visible, as I'm noticing a few boxes where I can only see two.

In conclusion: A very solid submission, I believe you've learned the material well. Your biggest struggle seems to be ellipses, but I think further mileage in warmups and keeping feedback in mind should help, so no revisions. I believe you're good to move on to 250 boxes.

Hello! Good job finishing the lesson. Let's get it critiqued!

Starting with the lines

You did Superimposed Lines well. No fraying at the start point, and eventually very little at the end as well, and very confident.

Ghosted Lines&Planes: pretty great. Only the slightest of wobbles, which will improve with more mileage, although it always helps to stay confident in your execution over accuracy for now. No increased issues in Ghosted Planes, which makes me think you took your time with the exercise. Good job!

Moving on to ellipses

In your Tables of Ellipses you drew through the ellipses and tried to fit them inside the borders and against each other. You seem to have drawn through a lot of these more than the requisite 2-3 times; I see you stopped that as the exercises go on, so that's good. Very nice Ellipses in Planes, with only a few deformed ellipses. Those are probably deformed because you were too conscious of trying to touch all sides of the plane, which can be helped by reminding yourself that a smooth, even shape confidently executed from the shoulder is more important here.

In Funnels you did well in drawing through your ellipses and placing them snug against each other and the funnel sides. Some of these aren't aligned with the minor axis, I think this is mostly because the axis itself isn't centered well between the arcs, so that's something to keep in mind for the future.

And finally, boxes

Plotted perspective is well done, very minimal slanting in back edges, which makes me think you took your time aligning the ruler.

Nice Rough Perspective as well. You did well in keeping the faces of the boxes rectangular and extending the depth lines to the horizon line. I see some wobbling your linework here that wasn't present before. This may be from being more cautious now that you're constructing boxes, just remember that these are the same ghosted lines that you should execute with the same confidence and plan as thorough as before.

An excellent attempt at the notorious Rotated Boxes. You did the core setup correctly, drew through most of the boxes, applied rotation well and kept your gaps tight and consistent. All required boxes are present as well, the only minor thing here is that you forgot to draw through the outermost corner boxes, i.e. draw them with "x-ray vision". You should do that for consistency's sake.

Organic Perspective: Good rotations, no leaning into dramatic foreshortening or any diverging edges. Try to scale your boxes more with depth in your warmups, i.e. draw the further boxes smaller and the closest one bigger. Linework looks like it lost a little bit of confidence here again with some light wobble and drawing over your lines twice. Keep the execution of your strokes confident and your ghosting thorough no matter the task, and leave the resulting stroke be as it may. The time to avoid mistakes is gone once the pen touches the paper.

In conclusion: Honestly, a very well done submission. I believe you learned the material well and are ready to move on to 250 boxes.

Hello! Good job finishing the lesson. Let's get it critiqued!

Starting with the lines

You did Superimposed Lines well. Most fraying is the end point, which is good. A little wobbling in the trajectory on the larger scale, which may stem from hesitation. Just a reminder, once the pen is on the paper, there can be no hesitation. Focus on the end point and draw the line confidently, don't let your brain steer.

Ghosted Lines&Planes: a bit of arcing, which can be helped by consciously arcing in the opposite direction slightly so that in time it becomes subconscious. Some wobble - the same point about confidence from Superimposed Lines applies. Remind yourself to use your whole arm, draw from the shoulder, and confidently!

Moving on to ellipses

In Tables of Ellipses, you drew through the ellipses and made sure to try and fit them within the borders and against each other. Some are on the wobbly side, try to minimize movement from the wrist and elbow to counteract this. I'm also noticing some uneven, deformed ellipses. Taking more time ghosting may help, as well as drawing more confidently from the shoulder. Smooth and even shape is a priority.

Your Ellipses in Planes are done well too, with even and confident shapes taking priority over touching all sides of the planes, which is good. A few deformed ones, probably because you were too conscious of trying to touch all sides of the plane. It helps to remind yourself that a smooth, even shape confidently executed from the shoulder is more important right now.

You did well in Funnels, drawing through your ellipses and placing them close against each other and the funnel sides. A few of them aren't quite aligned with the minor axis. You want to make sure that the minor axis cuts each ellipse into two equal, symmetrical halves, down their narrower dimension, as mentioned here in the course.

And finally, boxes

Plotted perspective: all done correctly. A few of the back edges are slanted, which is expected and can be mitigated with taking your time to align the ruler.

In Rough Perspective you did well in keeping the faces of the boxes rectangular and extending the depth lines to the horizon line. I'm noticing increased wobbling your linework here. This may be from being more cautious now that you're constructing entire boxes, and can be helped by ghosting your lines more thoroughly and executing confidently from the shoulder.

Very good Rotated Boxes, you did well by doing the core setup correctly, drawing through the boxes, applying rotation well enough and trying to keep your gaps tight and consistent. However, you missed the outermost corner boxes, so please finish those.

Organic Perspective: I see good rotations and scaling with depth, no leaning into dramatic foreshortening or diverging edges. I'm noticing just a few edges are drawn twice over, which you really shouldn't do. Once you made the stroke, leave it be, no matter how it turned out, the time to avoid and fix mistakes has passed.

In conclusion: A solid submission, I believe you've learned well and are ready to move on to 250 boxes, after you finish the corners in Rotated Boxes.

Hey, congratulations on getting through lesson 1! Here is some feedback. Just a heads up--there will be some revisions requested, but if you do them, they'll help you.

Lines

Line confidence looks to be the #1 thing to work on here, but I do see signs of improvement by the end of the lesson.

When my lines start to get wobbly, I "reset" myself by just drawing a bunch of loose, straight lines (not superimposed or dot-to-dot--totally free) on scratch paper. Then I do some superimposed lines, and then I go back to whatever I was trying to do.

Eventually you'll find your optimum speed--fast enough to be confident, slow enough to be reasonably accurate.

Ellipses

This looks very new to you, and ellipses take a while to get down. It took me a couple of months of including them in the 5-10 minute warm ups for them to look decent. (I'll still sometimes get weird ones.)

It looks like one of the tables has one pass on most of the ellipses, and the other has more than one pass. I'm going to assume you reread the instructions and learned that you need 2-3 passes.

Ellipses in planes and funnels: These are good attempts. However, these ellipses need 2-3 passes.

For ellipses, try a similar thing to smooth them as with lines. First, draw a few quick super loose ones (not in a table or anything--just free on the page), then a few aligned with a minor axis (like this: https://imgur.com/a/FVVPp6Z ). Afterwords, try constrained ellipses (like one or two panels of a table).

Boxes

Plotted perspective: This looks solid.

Rough perspective: Looks like you understand the idea here. The horizontal and vertical lines are correct, and the rest aim at the VP.

Rotated boxes: This is a good effort. You'll understand how to do this more as you draw more boxes in space.

Organic perspective: I see you've rotated the boxes and made a good effort. There are a lot of divergent lines, but the box challenge will train you to make them converge, so don't worry about that now.

Hello! Good job finishing the lesson. Let's get it critiqued!

Starting with the lines

Superimposed Lines are off to a good start. No fraying at the start point, which is good, but there is large scale wobbling, which can be helped by being more confident executing the stroke while focusing on the end point.

Ghosted Lines&Planes: More wobble in Ghosted Lines, which may stem from hesitation and desire for accuracy. I'm seeing it subside in Ghosted Planes, which makes me think you took your time with the exercise and reminded yourself to draw your lines more confidently from the shoulder. That's great! I'll take this opportunity to remind you to keep striving for that confident, smooth execution. Accuracy, we're told, will only come with mileage, and cannot be forced.

Moving on to ellipses

Tables of Ellipses came out well. You drew through the ellipses and made sure to try and fit them within the borders and against each other. Your Ellipses in Planes are done well too, it looks to me that you tried your best to keep them smooth and even while making them touch the 4 sides of the plane. The few that are deformed are probably because you were trying to fit them into the planes too much. That can be helped by reminding yourself that a smooth, even shape confidently executed from the shoulder is more important here.

Your Funnels are looking fine, ellipses were drawn through and placed snug against each other and the funnel sides. I'm noticing that some aren't aligned with the minor axis. You want to make sure that the minor axis cuts each ellipse into two equal, symmetrical halves, down their narrower dimension, as mentioned here in the course.

And finally, boxes

Plotted perspective is done correctly. Some of the back edges are slanted, which can be mitigated by taking your time to align the ruler. Very tidy hatching!

Your Rough Perspective is solid. You did well in keeping the faces of the boxes rectangular and extending the depth lines to the horizon line. I see your lines wobble at the start, which might've been because you were more cautious now that you're constructing boxes, but you seem to have regained the confidence in your linework as the exercise progressed. Just a reminder, always use the ghosting method for your freehanded lines and prioritize confidence in your execution!

In Rotated Boxes, you did well by doing the core setup correctly, drawing through the boxes, applying rotation and trying to keep your gaps tight and consistent. All required boxes are present as well. A strong attempt at a difficult exercise.

Organic Perspective: Good rotations and scaling with depth, no leaning into dramatic foreshortening or diverging edges. I'm noticing some returning wobble in the linework here, remember to always draw your lines confidently from the shoulder and give yourself time to ghost thoroughly, no matter the exercise.

In conclusion: A solid submission and a lesson well learned. The 250 boxes challenge awaits.