Nisakiii

Hi,

I hope this ones are a little better, as I somehow struggled with the bigger ones, I drew a few more on the back.

https://imgur.com/a/A8Z5Qpp

Hi Uncomfortable,

first I want you to thank for the honest rewiev and this website in general =)

I did the assign revisons and hope i could catch up a little on the things i missed.

https://imgur.com/a/2wMCJyD

Looking forward for more feedback.

Thanks in advance

Nisakii

Hi,

i will try to critique your work.

english is only my second language so i hope you can understand everything.

• superimposed lines: the lines are looking good. They are not to wobbly.

At some point, you start to fray on both ends. Stay focus and try not to rush through.

https://d15v304a6xpq4b.cloudfront.net/lesson_images/1585f266.jpg

• ghosted lines: you did a good job here. the strokes are confident and you always draw a start and ending pint. which is important to apply this method.

-ghosted planes and elipses: Again you used confident strokes on the planes, which is good. Sometimes you did overshoot a little bit or start to wobble, but you will get more precise with more pracice. So don´t worry to much over it. Just keep an eye on it. Also your elipses are mostly inside the planes and you drew over them 2 times. Good job.

• table of ellipses: you did draw through the ellipses, they touch each other. Some of them overlap, but I am sure you saw this as well. Most of them are inside the bound.

-funnels: You did again a good job staying inside the bounds. You used mostly confident strokes, but sometimes you did start to wobble. Also, try to focus on the minor axes. This is a common mistake which I did myself. The minor axis should cut the ellipses in two symmetrical halfs.

https://d15v304a6xpq4b.cloudfront.net/lesson_images/58039837.jpg

-Boxes: You did a good job on the plotted perspective, for the hatching you should also try to use the ghosting method.

In the rough perspective section you started to draw through the lines again, and sometimes the lines are a little bend. Which could be happened, because you hesitated to do the strokes. Don't think about a line to much if it is not perfect. However, overall you did a good start. The boxes are not perfect, but they will get better with time. Especially after the 250 Box challenge

Let's come to the rotated box exercise. It was a good try and it is normal for most students to sturgle here a little bit. As the boxes moved further away from the center, you began to struggle more. Some boxes are not rotated at all or in the right way.

https://d15v304a6xpq4b.cloudfront.net/lesson_images/d73eea49.jpg

You did draw over a few lines more often, which makes it look a little bit messy.

I recommend trying this again after you finished the 250 Box challenge. Then compare the two results. I am sure you will see a lot of progress.

And last but not least, the organic perspective. There are again good confident lines, you used the ghosting method and are going from small to big. Also, good job on the rotation. There are a few minor mistakes in perspective, but you will get better with it.

There is one additional Point to the Homework overall. Try to avoid these big ink splashes. For further lessons, they can destroy a whole page of work. Please keep this in mind and change you Pen if nessecary.

I will mark your lesson as complete. You should move forward to the 250 Box challenge. Remember to use the previous lessons as a warm-up.

Have fun drawing and good luck.

Hey Ho,

I will try to put out my first critique to you.

Let start with the first section.

Lines:

• The strokes look confident to me and are not too wobbly. They are not perfect, but it looks like you get the point out of the lessons.

• in some lines there is fraying in the beginning, just keep an eye on it.

• I recognize some wobbling lines in the ghosting planes section. Make your strokes confident, they are looking good!

Ellipses:

.- not all of them are drawn through 2 to 3 times

. - otherwise, there are looking good to me. Most are not overlapping and are close together.

Boxes:

.- well yes there are a few mistakes in perspective, but this is totally normal. You did draw through the boxes. And you can see the space. They will get better with practice.

One advice, if you highlight some areas, try to use the ghosting method and make confident strokes. Not these wobbling scribbles.

I hope this will kind of help you out. In my opinion, you can start the 250 Box challenge, but let's see what more experienced users will tell you. =)

Keep up the good work, and sorry for my bad English.