Aye, that's all good. I wish you luck on your journey !
Next Steps:
Continue on with your lessons and remember to keep practicing !
Hey, not rude at all, but just what I needed. Thanks for the feedback! Just got these done, I hope they are adequate improvements !
https://drive.google.com/drive/folders/1jos6llRMrT_N5b7ezmH5LUMVUe9wAo4c?usp=sharing
Here's that critique you ordered, fresh off the grill!
LINES
1) imposed lines
I'm seeing here a lot of wobbliness, which is likely caused by you trying to correct your lines as you go. Don't worry about doing this, you want to have confident lines first, no matter if they are accurate. Follow your line fast and confident, drawing from your shoulder. I promise you that it will get easier as you go, you just have to build the muscle memory. Other than that, the fraying at one end is to be expected, so I'm not seeing any other real issues with this.
2) ghosted lines
Your confidence seems to have improved with the ghosting method, that's good. Your lines, while not always accurate, are mostly straight, that's exactly where you want to be at this stage. If you see any issues with arching and bowing, a good thing to try is to consciously try to arch your line in the opposite direction. Otherwise, these are good for your first page of ghosted lines. Another thing to note, if you mess up a line and it feels too bad to keep, don't go over it again, it's still worth keeping on the page. Your first mark should be your last mark.
3) ghosted planes
Your ghosted planes are largely the same as ghosted lines, so not much I can say on these without rambling and repeating myself.
ELLIPSES
1) tables of ellipses
There's a few issues I'm seeing with these. I know it's hard at first, and you really want to fix your mistakes and messy ellipses, but you shouldn't go over the ellipse more than three times at most. They'll be wonky, and they wont fit neatly, but with fewer times going around, you'll see more of the issues you encounter, and thus you will be able to focus on fixing them. Your ellipses are supposed to be messy and ill-fitting, we do these exercises to fix that. Remember, go around your ellipse two times, three at the most, as this will keep it neat and readable. Other than that, your ellipses do have the issue of floating around in their boxes, your first goal here is confidence, and your second goal is to get your ellipses to fit snuggly, even if they don't look very good at first. We will work on this extensively.
2) ellipses in planes
I see plenty of your ellipses have been drawn through only twice or thrice, which is good. I won't drill you on the previous issues which are still, to a lesser degree, still here. Good job, I'm seeing improvement.
3) funnels
Your ellipses are definitely getting better, line confidence, and accuracy. The minor axis is a little off in a few of the funnels, but the ellipses stay mostly on course, so it's still alright.
BOXES
1) plotted perspective
I see you understood the material well enough, this isn't a very mechanical exercise, so there isn't much to mark. You have a clear understanding of basic 3D perspective, that's very good.
2) rough perspective
Another solid exercise, a few small issues, but nothing that can't be dealt with. Again, if you mess up a line, don't try it again, it usually only makes it messier. I know it's hard, and you just want to try it again and do better, I struggled hard with it early on, but you just gotta take it on the cheek. My only other issue, and I don't know if you just forgot to include it, but the homework does ask for two pages of this. It's a small thing, but it could still help to go over this again with this advice again.
3) rotated boxes
This is another one of those difficult exercises that's weighed against you, despite this you managed to handle it well. Boxes are mostly plotted well, perspective is done well. This is one of those exercises that if I did it again, it would still be hard, so don't worry too much.
4) organic perspective
This exercise was done pretty well for the most part, only real issue is the lack of rotation. It will be awkward and uncomfy, but you really wanna explore different angles of your boxes. Other than that, these are reasonably acceptable boxes, with an extra page thrown in!
CONCLUSION
While there are a few exercises that could use revising, I believe that you overall understood the material, and were able to execute the exercises well. With some more practice, and perseverance, you'll be well on your way!
Next Steps:
two pages of imposed lines
one page of the pable of ellipses exercise
one page of the rough perspective exercise
These were the only exercises that I believe you could really benefit from doing again (barring the one page of rough perspective, that one was just a technicality). Once you've completed these, applying the advice I've given, You'll be ready for the next step in the course. Good luck!
Hey, here for that critique. Firstly, don't worry about being left-handed, it's not an issue so long as you are still able to do the work (which you are.)
LINES
1) imposed lines
you seem to already have a solid grasp on the material, little to no misunderstanding there which is great. There is still some fraying and arching on your longer lines, but that is completely fine at lesson 1. The first issue can be solved by focusing your movement on your shoulder, as your elbow and wrist can cause a lot of arching. The second issue (and partially the first) can really just be solved with time and perseverance, if you stick to using these as warmups your lines will become straighter and more confident.
2) ghosted lines
Again, you seem to already understand the core principles of the exercise, very helpful for both of us. There's a little bit of wobble on some of the lines, but I wouldn't really consider that a problem at this stage. You really just want to focus on your confidence, and use of your shoulder, and you seem to be well on your way for both. Again with the last exercise though, there is some slight bowing of some of your lines, which can be solved by really using your shoulder to draw. It is awkward at first, but you will be thankful in later lessons. Remember: draw from the shoulder, pad out the fluid motion with your elbow, you'll be right as rain.
3) ghosted planes
Largely the same gripes as with the last two exercises, which makes it harder to critique. Overall solid understanding, with only some very minor mechanical issues which will be solved with time and effort. Don't worry about missing your mark, it's really to be expected at lesson one. Just plan out your marks and follow through with confidence and in time you'll gain accuracy.
ELLIPSES
1) tables of ellipses
Again, the lesson material is pretty well understood, so there's nothing to bring up here. You really want to make fitting each ellipse into the table your main priority aside from confidence. While your ellipses are mostly very confident, they do tend to stray from the box from time to time. This is not much of an issue however, as it is clear that you are managing to keep your ellipses mostly very neat for lesson 1.
2) ellipses in planes
Honestly this one is much the same as the table of ellipses, so much of what I said about that holds true for this.
3) funnels
I'm seeing a good amount of understanding and execution in your ellipses at this stage. You've done quite well to cut each ellipse in two equal halves with the minor axis, which is great. I still see a lot of overlap and underlap with each ellipse, where some will not line up neatly with each other. Overall good understanding, good minor axis alignment, good confidence, just need to work on fitting your ellipses next to each other some more. This should work itself out as your shoulder muscles get more steady.
BOXES
1) plotted perspective
Not all that much to critique here, you seem to show a very solid understanding of the basics of plotting objects in 3D space. Line weight is good, so each box is clear and distinct, perspective is congruent, all that. Overall pretty good.
2) rough perspective
Not much need to worry over this exercise, it is a very hard one. Plotting objects in 3D space with no line of reference is something you will be doing plenty of later on, so you will definitely improve on this front. Most of your lines were done confidently, and the material was understood, that's what is important here.
3) rotated boxes
This exercise is notoriously difficult, but you still managed to execute each box fairly well. The main goal is to take you out of your comfort zone and make you confront different angles. You manage to stick to each box well and follow through, so I'll consider it well done.
4) organic perspective
First of all you want to make sure your boxes are getting smaller as they get further away, but that was only a problem on page one so I'll overlook it. You also don't want to have boxes that are cut off by the edge of the page, boxes that are shown should be clearly visible. Apart from this, your only issues are wonky perspective, and odd box shapes. As I've said plenty of times before though, these issues should be flushed out in time if you focus on drilling them out.
CONCLUSION
I found it tricky to critique you in some areas, as you largely had a solid understanding already. You have steadily growing confidence, a good understanding of the homework, and what issues you do have are only to be expected at this stage. With some time and effort, these will shop being problems, just trust in your shoulder and you'll be good as.
Next Steps:
I'm confident in saying that you are as ready for the 250 box challenge as you will ever be, as that is where you will work over many of the issues I outlined here. So I recommend moving straight on to that as you wish. Good luck!
Hey, thanks for getting back to me! Below is a revision of the ghosted lines page, keep in mind that I originally did this in August and have had a lot of practice since then.
https://drive.google.com/file/d/1h2dlWtu2nuiigB2ICxuQk_rnkwYibeFE/view?usp=sharing
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