The more I struggle, the worse it seem to get. I have replied with two pages of cows. I know they are sorry-looking cows, but I hope you can see that I have tried very hard to make everything snug against everything else.
Thank you for your patience with me, it is very appreciated.
Hello and Thank your for your critique and patience.
I have now added 2 more Pages, a Sphinx Cat and Squirell.
Thank you so much for this thoughtful critique. I was sure I was doing horribly, but now I see clearly what I am doing right and what I need to work on. You're right, I had two sizes of the Hercules beetle and accidentally uploaded the smaller one into the album.
Thank you so much for this thoughtful critique. You explained to me exactly the parts where I have been struggling. I have done my best to improve.
Thank you so much for the good advice and critique, this helps a lot. I will know what to work on for the future.
I actually think this looks really good.
Your ghosted lines are confident and strong. That said, you have more fraying at both ends than you should have. Take the time to carefully place the pen at the exact same place before you execute the line.
Your ghosted planes look great
Your elipses are snug in their boxes and confident. You say you struggled with the elipses in funnels, but they look snug and well aligned.
Rough perspective is decent, the lines do converge.
The rotated box exercise is a beast and you've made a really solid attempt here.
The organic perspective looks good, the boxes rotate and get. larger and smaller and overlap, selling the illusion well. That said, you seem to have started going over lines several times, which you should never to. One confident line, and live with your mistakes.
Your crosshatching also sometimes messy, particularly in the plotted perspective exercise. You should avoid scribbles like this, it will make it harder to see your drawing later.
Well done, and good luck with the 250 Box Challenge.
Next Steps:
Practice ghosting as part of your warmup. Go ahead to 250 boxes.
Thank you so much for this thoughtful critique. You really helped me see why I was struggling in places.
This looks really good, your linework is confident and your ellipses look great.
WHen you get to drawing boxes, you keep drawing the same lines over and over, and you have to stop doing that right away. Each mark should be made once and only once, confidently, and you should then live with the result. Never draw the lines over again, like you keep doing.
I would work on getting lines perfecty straight when you move on to the 250 boxes challenge.
Hi! Welcome, and congratulations on the beginning of your journey.
There is some good work here, and also some issues I would like to point out.
Your superimposed lines are overall quite good. They are smooth and you start. from the same point. However, the arched lines have a slight wobble to them, as if you are letting your brain correct the trajectory. And the "straight" lines are bent. This is a common mistake, and it is adressed in the instructions to Lesson 1, which you should re-read.
You ellipses are a problem. You should be drawing them in one smooth motion, but most of them have places where you change course jankily. I think you need to practice ghosting and confidence, and executing your lines in one smooth motion. The same issue is present in most of your work.
Your plottet perspective looks clean. Good.
Your rough perspective is good, in as much as the lines converge more or less in the direction of the same vanishing point. However, it becomes really clear that you reinforce lines, and draw several lines over when they dont come out the way you want. You should always draw every line only once, and accept the result - this is where practicing confidence, and executing lines in 1 smooth motion becomes important.
Your rotated box excercise is a solid attempt. Certainly, you've been struggling, but in general, the boxes rotate and are next to their neighbors. You saw a difficult excerise through to the end. Well done.
Your organic perspective is also good. The boxes overlap, flow and increase in size as they get "closer."
Next Steps:
Do on more filles page of the Tables of Ellipses exercise, focusing on confident, smooth lines, and ghosting.
Hi!
You have some super confident linework, both the superimposed lines, ghosted lines and ghosted planes are smooth and confident. You really killed this part, good job.
You ellipses are also confident and snug, both in the first exercise and in the funnels. Some of them get messy when you seem to do 3-4 passes instead of 2 - You should stick with doing exactly 2 passes.
When you get to the boxes, you start wobbling your linework - are you more nervous here? The plottet perspective looks good, and the vanishing points in rough perspective all trend toward the right direction (although they could be better, of course). The problem is the linework in the boxes - you still need to ghost the lines, and execute them in 1 smooth stroke. You have shown you CAN do it, so you need to do it.
The rotated boxes exercise is puzzling - the boxes rotate, and are snug, but suddenly you have these corner boxes jumping all over the place, for no reason that I can see. I want you to attempt this again, and get every box roughly where it needs to go - it doesn't have to be perfect.
The organic perspective is really good, the boxes increase in size, and you have many flowing overlaps, it really sells the illusion of motion.
Next Steps:
Reply with another atempt at the Rotated Boxes exercise, doing your best to have every bux snug next to its neighbors.
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