MrIGI

Hello!

I'll be trying to give you some feedback on what you could improve on your homework and on what you achieved well!

Superimposed Lines:

Nearly all of your lines seem to be confidently drawn so good job on that! Only two small issues I could see are I think due to the same thing, rushing a bit too much. The first lines don't have any fraying on the starting side but on the second page there is a bit and a bit more on the last sets of lines. The other thing is most lines are close to each other except for a few ones, once again more towards the second page so I think you may be rushing a bit and should take your time to do the exercices :) There's no rush in doing drawabox so take your time before each stroke and once you've mastered the exercise more you'll be able to go through it faster

Ghosted Lines:

Good job on that exercise as well! Most lines are confidently drawn and quite a few have the right angle to reach the other dot. Keep practicing and you'll have perfect confident marks every time!

Ghosted planes:

Looking even better than most of your Ghosted Lines Great job!

Ellipses in Planes:

Good job most ellipses touch the four sides of the planes (even the hardest ones) this is a tough exercise so don't despair you're on the right track!

Tables of Ellipses:

Good job you drew through all your ellipses.

I can see you struggles with certain angles, don't forget you can always rotate your page, always take your time and try to make them touch the border otherwise great job!

Funnels:

Great job you drew through your ellipses, they fit close to each other and they all keep the minor axis line alignment!

Plotted Perspective:

You seem to have followed the rules well, the back forner of a few boxes is nearly parallel to the boxes so all good

Rough perspective:

Most of your lines trace back near or directly to the vanishing point so it seems like you're getting the gist of it. Only thing I would say is once again a few of your lines seem a little wobbly in comparison to other exercises so don't forget to take your time and use the ghosting method for every stroke.

Rotated Boxes:

The first boxes around the center are all good, it just seems like you got a bit lost towards the edge ones even if they're not (all) incorrect. I'll take for example the top right one (furthest from the center). You didn't start by making the top side as close as you could to the boxes on it's sides so it's a little skewed. Though it seems like you get the gist of it for most of the boxes so I'd recommend you try this exercise first in your next warmup to make sure you got it :)

Organic Perspective:

Good job on these boxes the lines are really clean, you varied the size and they all look fairly solid. I'd just recommend you vary your boxes a bit more quite a few are very similar don't hesitate to go into more rectangular boxes and to vary the initial Y to get more different boxes!

I hope this review helped you out Good job on this lesson 1

Good luck for the next step, take it slow and I'm sure you'll manage !

You got the go ahead from me to get to the 250 Boxes and I'll be looking forward to critiquing this when you get it done!

Best of luck!

Hey Kiryanotkira. I'm V1rgil, I hope you'll be fine with having me critique your work. I'm sorry if I reply in short sentences, because that just means you've done well and with little mistakes. I may point out some issues, but these are largely just problems solved with practice. Meaning when you do them in your warm ups, it'll get improved. Let's get into it.

Super Imposed Lines

Strong. Some unstable lines but expected in the beginning, the key takeaway is that you had no visible fraying on both sides. I can see that your short lines are pretty accurate and confident. Also liked your experimentation with the really long lines, while fraying is most evident there I can appreciate attempts to really attack drawing from the shoulder. Minor problems in that your lines fray at the end, but solved with practice. Good job.

Ghosted Lines

While your lines sometimes wobble, you effectively demonstrate you can confidently draw straight marks and usually hit them with accuracy. Minor problems in your wobbling with some lines, solved with practice. Good job.

Ghosted Planes

You keep really consistent diagonal and vertical lines attacking the middle. Your strengths with mark making in the previous assignments really showed yourself capable of executing clean marks.

Only thing is, what is this mark? (https://imgur.com/a/DFK2KtW) Are you drawing through your mistakes? In case you are, I should let you know that it's not encouraged to do so. The next time you mess up a mark, you should own it and keep it there as a reminder of where you could improve. Not exclusive to the page by the way, I could find one other example, but just somethings to keep in mind when you do them as warm ups.

Small curves here and there, but minor problems solved with practice. Good job.

Table of Ellipses

I think your submission is missing the Table of Ellipses. Don't resubmit, just reply with a link to the Imgur WITH the Table Of Ellipses. I'll come around later when it's here.

Ellipses in Planes

These were really strong. Even shape, drawn through 2+ times, and touching all four sides of the Plane. While your ellipses can look rough sometimes, and go outside of the Plane, it's minor problems solved with practice. I could suggest that you draw through your box no more than three times, just to keep it cleaner and with less searching lines. There are inconsistencies but you are more right than wrong, good job.

Funnels

You followed the rules well, in your construction of the central and minor axis line, the funnel arcs and keeping the funnels within said arch to the best of your ability. My only problem is that you seem to struggle with keeping the Funnels aligned to said Minor Axis Line, but you HAVE shown some ability to heed that alignment in my examples here. (https://imgur.com/a/gUUSfsQ). The Blue Numbers tell me you CAN align it well, especially on 1. It's 5 and 6 I'm worried about.

Still, you've displayed understanding of this exercise. So these are more likely just minor problems solved with practice. Good job.

Plotted Perspective

I think you're missing this assignment as well. Drop a link.

Rough Perspective

Nice work here. Rough perspective was rough for a lot of people, in that they struggled to maintain a consistent trajectory towards the VP for most of their boxes. You displayed great finesse with your accuracy. Each box had at least four line extensions, and I am under the assumption you based them off of your corners, where you've shown no obvious inconsistencies there too.

While you had some moments of trouble diverging towards the VP, that is a minor problem, solved with practice. You are more accurate than inaccurate. Great job here!

Rotated Boxes

Great work here. Albeit Square looking, I still see an attempt to heed the convergence rules DrawABox teaches. Your outer boxes are clearly diverging away from the Central Square, you ghost through all your lines and the distance between each box is not at all inconsistent.

The only problem is that you're not going dramatic enough, for just one example I drew up what a box could've looked like, but if I had to tell you something to improve your work here, reference your side when making the boxes so it all looks congruent, as some of your ghosted points aren't even touching boxes. And do not be afraid to be really elaborate with your converging lines! Draw short lines, lines at a crazy angle, etc. (https://imgur.com/a/yy1kjWQ) I drew this on mouse, so sorry for the rough work, but this is just how I would've interpreted that one specific box to display my point. I referenced the other boxes for where I could ghost, and I did my best to be steep.

These are all just minor problems, solved with practice. Otherwise, good work here.

Organic Perspective

Some great work made here. Dramatic foreshortening, consistent, straight lines and diverging parallel lines, clear depth understanding with Boxes closer being bigger and farther being smaller. Not even a problem with your boxes looking the same, hinting at your strengths with making boxes out of the Y method.

I like it. Seriously, I have no other comments about your work, because to me this is just really solid. Great job!

Conclusion

You really understood a lot of the assignment given to you. In your clean lines, strong ellipses, and great understanding of materials particularly related to VP's, Horizon lines and rotation, in spite of Lesson #1's attempts to throw you off and challenge you. There's some work to be made in Rotated Boxes or Funnels, but that's what warm ups are for. You're not done with Lesson #1! You'll still be doing these in the future in your warm-ups as long as you're doing DaB.

Just give me the missing assignments and I can complete my review.

Hi Goodmoring/Goodnight i would like to say Congratulations on finishing the Lesson 1.

1.Superimposed Lines

The picture its not that clear tbh but I can see that you drew them confidently. some of them have archs, The archs it can be fixed by trying to arch consciously to the opposite direction. not bad though

2.Ghosted Lines

Your lines are confident as I said earlier. Few overshooting which is not bad. a few undershooting. You have great lines and accuracy.

3.Ghosted Planes

It's so perfect that you have very confident line. Most of them hitting start to end dots. You have great lines and accuracy. Few undershooting. Remember overshooting beterr than undershooting still Great though.

4.Tables of Ellipses

You drew your ellipses confidently.

Some are not snuggle to each other and in the boundaries

overall you did great job being confident and great job most of the circle are snuggles each other

5.Ellipses in Planes

Same as tables of ellipeses.

6.Funnels

Great work being confident

A few of the ellipse are snuggle against one which is good.

A few overshooting which is not a bad thing.

Most of it are symmetrical it's so good.

7.Plotted Perspective

Great work on this.

I like you have overlap boxes.

8.Rough Perspective

Yes some are not confident but most of it are. It happens make sure to warm ups.

the front are confident

Great job Hitting the VP of some lines

I think you some repeated line I'm not sure because of the pictures kind of pixelated

9.Rotated Boxes

It's so clean i like it.

The gaps are consistent

All of the boxes are pointing towards

A few wobbles but it's still good

You really did great Job on this thing.

This is a difficult homework but yours beautiful and so clean.

You have repeated lines please be mindful of that. You should kept the line as it if were correct and move on.

10.Organic Perspective

Your lines here are confident,

You did great making small boxes as they are far.

Some of the lines in the boxes are vanishing towards the vanishing point great job.

Some are diverges.

Still it's still good

I'm surprised that you enjoy this one because it was stressfull for some student people including myself

Lastly about the picture make sure nexttime its not pixelated because it's kinda hard. Be mindful on that

Love your notes about the homeworks.

Again congratulations on finishing the lesson one you did great overall you really put a effort on it great job.

Lines

Your lines are looking really confident! They got better and better as you moved through the exercises but it is important to note that in the superimposed lines exercises you do show slight fraying on both ends of your lines. Make sure to take your time to position your pen. That being said, the exercises are looking pretty good and I can see the improvement, any precision issue will come with more practice eventually.

Ellipses

The exercises here also look great! You focused on confidence over accuracy, which is the main point. In the funnels exercise, I can see just a few issues in the layout itself. And it seems like you went over some ellipses more than three times? But it could just be an illusion from overlapping with the others. Other than that, good job, and I'd recommend playing with gradually increasing the degrees of the ellipses in your warmups!

Boxes

The hardest part of lesson 1! I think overall you did a good job for the challenge it presents when starting.One of the main issues I see, especially at the beginning of the Rough Perspective and Organic Perspective exercises is that the lines seem to have lost confidence. It's normal to hesitate here since now your lines have more of a purpose, you know how the end product must look: a box. Either way, it does seem that it got better again in both as you advanced through it, but it's good to remember (especially as you go into the 250 boxes challenge) that you should always put confidence first on each individual line. Don't rush anything and remember to ghost and trust your muscle memory.

Both the Rotated Boxes and the Organic Boxes exercises look good for a first attempt in my opinion. I'd say probably the biggest reason the Rotated Box looks off is because the first adjacent boxes have a longer width than the central one, even though it should be decreasing in size (and converging faster) as its turning away from us. You did apply both concepts (decreased size and a more extreme convergence) in the far-end boxes so it seems like you realized what the issue was. One last thing would be to apply line weight to the parts that overlap, so it's easier to see. Try it out when doing this in your warmups or even in this completed one.

That's it, I think you got the gist of the lessons and did a great job at them, anything that needs to be refined in technique or understood in concept will definitely improve in the 250 boxes challenge. I'd say this is complete and you are ready to move to the challenge. Congratulations on finishing Lesson 1! Good luck!