MechaCatfish

Hello aprizotic,

I would like to critique your homework :)

Lines:

Your superimposed lines and ghosted lines are fine. You clearly understood the instructions and made confident strokes away from your starting point. This is also true for the planes.

Ellipses:

The ellipses within the planes look smooth and are drawn through two times. Some of them have a noticeable gap to one or two walls, but overall I think they look decent.

Your tables of ellipses however... To be honest, this looks very much like scribbles. Did you get impatient since you had to fill two pages? I see deformed ellipses, ellipses that do not fit in their space and ellipses that changes their shape completely within the two turns with the pen.

I think you best go back to the instructions of the assignment and read/listen to them very carefully, then redo the two pages while consciously and carefully applying the ghosting technique to every single ellipse.

One of the things to take away from many of the early drawabox lessons is to give thought and care to every single mark and to not rush through them while being distracted by the "greater goal", like completing the whole page or even just a single box. See also https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/ghostedlines "Step 1: Planning"

The ellipses in the funnels show already greater care again. They are also correctly aligned and most of them fit their space quite well.

Boxes:

Plotted perspective looks fine.

Rough perspective: You already have quite a good "aim" regarding vanishing points! Most of your lines are also still confident. Well done!

Your rotated perspective looks fine! Some wobblyness is apparent, which probably means that you forgot the ghosting and/or the drawing from the shoulder in some instances, but i know how overwhelming this assignment can be, so I rather compliment you for the quite smooth rotations. This is not a task we are supposed to excel in just yet!

Your organic perspective also looks quite good. You rotate and scale your boxes, just as instructed. To comment on your comment: I don't think your scaling up is necessarily too fast. It depends very much on how big and how close your boxes are supposed to be. It is dramatic scaling, yes, but i think it works and if you want more control over how close and big your boxes feel to the viewer, you will learn a lot in the extensive instructions and explanations to the 250 box challenge.

Good luck!

overall pretty good i'd say

-lines are a bit wobbly, prioritize confidence over accuracy

-try to take your pen off of the paper at the end point when ghosting so you don't overshoot so much

-i think it would be better if you draw through your ellipses 2 times instead of 3

-i also think you should just ghost everything a little bit more overall especially on your eclipses

also i would like to see the other lessons you left out

Hi! Yes you can, it's about the mindset: as long as you don't stress about the end result and focus on relaxing, it's fun time.