MayADay

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    1:17 PM, Thursday June 9th 2022

    Hello,

    Glad I could be of help.

    Have a good day :)

    2:20 PM, Wednesday June 8th 2022

    Hello, no worries, nice to have you back.

    Great job that's much better. :D

    Now I certainly can approve you to move on.

    Have a nice continuing of the journey

    See ya :)

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    8:54 PM, Tuesday May 31st 2022

    You're welcome, I'm glad our comments helped you. :)

    8:51 PM, Tuesday May 31st 2022

    Good evening Lublu,

    I just come to suggest you that I understand your willing to help but to not give any comment on someone else lesson unless you're has already been criticized.

    Don't take it as a critic, it's just a reminder from the Drawabox rules.

    Have a good journey :)

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    8:42 PM, Tuesday May 31st 2022

    Hello...

    I don't want to be rude and I'm sorry to say that the main difficulty here, in whole lesson, is the confidence, it seems like no ghosting method is applied.

    So going in more details:

    • In the ghosted lines and the ghosted planes you may a achieve the lines to go to the points but the lack of confidence caused wobbly lines.

    • For ellipses I might save the page of funnels but the rest or don't follow the delivery, the table of ellipses, or are too wobbly, ellipses in planes.

    • For the rough perspective, the third row of first page and on the second page the second+third row, the perspective lines are pretty good. For the boxes the wobbly lines remain.

    • For rotated boxes I will not much comment on that 'cause is a though exercise but if I have to say something, aside wobbling, the cubes that follows the principal lines are good.

    -On the last, the organic perspective, I see the effort on rotating the boxes but again the wobbling part catch the eye.

    I'm sorry repeating the wobbling word so much but is important to me to make sure that you can see the good things and the mistakes.

    I will write on Discord chat to see if someone else could help me define your best next step 'cause, I'm not sure what here will be the next step and I don't think I can mark the lesson as completed...

    I hope for now that my comment may help you somehow...

    Good luck with the journey :)

    4:54 PM, Tuesday May 31st 2022

    You're welcome, we are all on the same journey and don't worry we will improve somehow someday. I'm sure it had, he better now know where he can continue on and where has to improve :)

    Yeah, sure it's not that easy on the small screen :o

    See ya! :)

    4:15 PM, Tuesday May 31st 2022

    Thanks, the app is new to me and I'm learning step by step. :)

    I read and liked how you commented on Hal9000 lesson 1. You observed and evaluated according to the criteria of what the exercises required, making a good point on what was well done and what needed to be reviewed.

    I know you have just finished lesson two but can I take the opportunity to ask you, if possible, to have a look and a comment on my 250 box challenge? It would meant a lot to me.

    Thanks again for the comment and see you again maybe on Discord or Drawabox :)

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    3:45 PM, Tuesday May 31st 2022

    Hello,

    I agree with @Ivopedro.

    The work overall is a good job 'cause you see the effort but the training with breathing more through (more ghosting) will brought certainly an improvement on the things that he pointed out.

    Well done and good luck with the journey of next lesson. :)

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    250 box challenge

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    6:25 PM, Monday May 30th 2022

    Thanks for replying

    I somehow managed to get to the chat.

    Your comment now anyway is really helpful to make me confirm my doubts of if I did everything alright.

    By reading your description i can tell there's not so much difference rather than the size of the screen

    Thanks again

    Have a good day :)

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    2:45 PM, Thursday May 26th 2022

    Hello, I see your work and I see the effort you put.

    The confidence is there so that's a good point.

    The accuracy on the other hand is missing in some points in particular in the ellipses, especially in the table of ellipses.

    I'm sorry to say but I think you don't understood the task there (table of ellipses)... In little sections there're too much variances of ellipses and in the sections where's the curved line you use ellipses as borders not only on the sides... You need to have at least two sides of the ellipses that touches a solid line (in this case the sides of the section/rectangle)...

    So that exercise has to be redone after rewatching and rereading the instructions.

    The only one more thing I have to say is more a suggestion than a critic, 'cause it's well done, on the organic perspective: try not to correct the lines with further lines. The felt-tip pen is there to make you see the mistakes and so to know where to do better.

    In conclusion overall it's a great job. Follow the step I write and after that you can move on onto the next lesson.

    Keep the good work and have fun. :)

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