Lunando

I replied to you more than half a year ago right here: https://WWW.drawabox.com/community/submission/1IS5MKTJ

On the same day I wrote the initial message.

Hey, your welcome!

If you're using a scanner for your pages, make sure that the scanner is not boosting up your contrast, brightness and sharpening of your scans as some scanners do by default. Scanning works fine if you disable all the mentioned things above in your scanner settings. The easiest thing often is to just place it in the sun and then take a picture of it.

Now to my critique:

I really like that you started to draw through all of your ellipses which was my main critique! Also the fact that you didn't spend too much thought on accuracy but rather on confident lines is good. You seem to still struggle a bit with keeping the ellipses the same size and degree. Some of your ellipses are still a bit uneven and bumpy or with pointy ends, so watch out for that. Make sure you ghost as long as you need, to be really confident with your motion before you put the pen down on the paper. There's still a lot of room for improvement regarding especially the "smoothness" of your ellipses not leaving them wobbly and uneven! You can also slowly start working on their accuracy but still keeping in mind that we always put confidence over accuracy. First we want smooth and confident ellipses, if we have that we can start working on accuracy!

Make sure you continue to practice your ellipses!

I think I would not differentiate between form and cast shadows, at least not for the paper texture. And yep, exactly as stated in the video you choose which parts you think are important enough to include. I don't quite understand what you mean by changing the light intensity, could you elaborate on that?

I would argue, that most of the shadows in the pictures are form shadows, but that's besides the point. I would recommend, you analyze the picture as best as you can and when you unsure you just decide weather you think the shadow(s) in question are important enough to include or not.

Alright, thanks! I actually did everything with 1 ballpoint pen and a brush pen, but I did go over the lines more than once in order to add line weight and make my car read better. But I went over board with it and making the car read is definitely not the main goal of these exercises, since we're not after pretty pictures, I guess I needed a reminder of that...

So here is my additional car: https://imgur.com/a/h3kH1pd.

I know I messed up the back of the hood pretty badly. I noticed it right away after I put the line down. I honestly don't know what I was thinking, but eventually decided to just roll with it. I did a correction over paint in Photoshop to show how it actually should've looked xD. My pen was also fussing around a bit, leaving some blotches here and there and didn't draw at all sometimes, so I had to go over a few lines again to make them even visible. But apart from that I stayed away from going over lines to create line weight and tried to do everything right away by varying my pressure a bit. I actually scanned my Lamborghini from the previous submission before I added the extra line weight and in hindsight it looked way better before I tried to make it "read". Well what's done is done.

And if I got it right you mean by working in 3D vs 2D that once I've put a line representing an edge in 3D space down, it is final and when I start to modify it in a neither additional nor subtractive (3D) manner I undermine the illusion of 3-dimensionality I tried to build up so hard, right?

Thanks again!

Hey, Lunando here. First of all a little general tip: Try to always take the best possible photos of your work as that makes it way easier for people to critique it. Make sure you have a good lighting (Sunlight is usually best) and make sure you don't have shaky/blurry pictures. With that being said let's get right to it.

Lines 

Alright, your Superimpose Lines are looking pretty good. You're still struggling quite a bit with the curved lines but that's something that will get better with practice! Although it isn't really an issue in most of your lines it is worth mentioning that you should try to stay away from fraying on both ends, meaning try to always start on a single point and keeping that one "clean". Moving on to your Ghosted Lines I really like the confidence in your lines here, you're not afraid of overshooting or inaccurate lines, which is great! Although overshooting is secondary, it certainly is something you would want to keep working on in the long run. I also think that you could've varied the length of your lines more as we want to be able to confidently do long lines as well as short lines. In your Ghosted Planes that confidence continues, it's great that you don't seem to be afraid of making mistakes and that you didn't try to correct any lines which ended up shorter or not at the right place, as that tends to make the mistakes only more obvious. 

Ellipses

I see that you definitely had your difficulties with the Ellipses which is totally normal in the beginning! One major thing that I'm noticing is that in your Tables of Ellipses you didn't draw through the majority of your Ellipses twice as explained in the instructions here: https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/11/drawingthrough. Leaving a lot of them with pointy ends and uneven so that they aren't actual Ellipses anymore. In your Ellipses in Planes sometimes you did go over them twice, mostly in your second pages, but in the remaining you didn't. Same goes for the Funnels. This is something really important as our main goal is to create confident marks and smooth and even ellipses. Which is more important than being super precise about their placement. Always put confidence over accuracy.

Boxes

In your Plotted Perspective I would recommend you to completely extend your Lines to their vanishing points and not only drawing the parts relevant to the boxes but that isn't such a big deal. But one thing I want to bring up is hatching: Hatching here is optional, if you decide to do it, don't just do it sloppily or rush it. Use your ruler if allowed or use the ghosting method to create tidy evenly spaced and parallel hatching. As mentioned in the instructions here: https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/14/step8. Your rough perspective looks pretty good here and there are a few perspective issues but that's something you'll work on in the 250 Box Challenge. Moving on to your Rotated Boxes  I like the fact that you actually rotated your boxes and that you tried to keep the gaps in between your boxes mostly consistent. You missed drawing through the boy in the lower left corner and the back planes of your boxes are a bit off generally as there should be a similar half sphere in the back. Keeping in mind that this is definitely the hardest exercise from lesson 1 I still want you to stay mindful of your linework. Always ghost and plan your lines thoroughly and most important: don't go over lines multiple times in order to "fix" them as that will only create more clutter and will lead more attention to the mistake itself. Once a line has been put down we must work with it. But since you weren't supposed to be really ready for this exercise it's fine. Great that you pushed through it! In your Organic Perspective is again some of the just mentioned "line fixing habit" but apart from that and a and few perspective issues, once again on which you'll work in the 250 Box challenge, they're pretty good.

Hey Eny, congratulations on finishing the 250 Box challenge. Overall you've done a pretty good job and there's definitely an improvement! I'm not sure whether you've used pencil for your line extensions or just a light gray or something as it is really hard to make them out, so I can't really evaluate whether you've applied it correctly but by what I can see it looks fine. Here are a few things which could be improved upon:

• Especially in your earlier boxes; but also in some of the later ones your lines often are diverging instead of converging. Remember that in 3 point perspective lines will always converge! Never be parallel and especially never diverge! Think in 3 sets of 4 lines each, each set will converge towards a single vanishing point. I've noticed that you had quite the variety in the orientation of the boxes which is great! But I think you could've played a bit more with the rate of foreshortening. In the end you start to change it up a bit introducing stronger foreshortening, which seems to have made it easier for you to wrap your head around the concept that the 3 sets of lines all converge to a single point.

• Although your lines are generally good and very confident, which is our main goal, there's sometimes a bit of arcing and wobbliness in some places. So just make sure that you're still keeping the line exercises from lesson 1 in your warmups.

• I like that you later on tried to add lineweight to your boxes as it helps to reinforce the illusion of solidity, organizes our linework and is great additional mileage! It's great that you stayed true to the principal of confidence over accuracy here!

Thank you!

Well, reading through others peoples submissions + the critiques beforehand to see where most of the common mistakes lie is definitely helpful. And since texture was a part of almost all of them, I tried to avoid it. xD

Lesson 7 here I come...

Generally felt-tips work best when hold (almost) perpendicular (90°) to the paper. I don't know why it's working better with the 01, 03 when drawing with them at more of an angle. I would recommend you try to increase the angle of pen to paper. It doesn't have to be the full 90°. Try out what works best. Hope it helps.

Alright, there's definitely an improvement! Your Ghosted lines are pretty good, still a tad wobbly but better! And your Ellipses are getting more confident!

Make sure to keep practicing both of them, as there is still room for improvement!