Liia

Hi there! Saw your submission on Discord, and thought I'd drop you a critique :) First off, a huge congrats on completing the whole lesson 1, that's quite an achievement in itself! Alright, let's get to it :D

Lines

Superimposed Lines - These look good, you prioritized a confident mark over accuracy which led to some fraying on the far end, but that is what we want to see (fraying over accurately wobbling lines). I like how you tried out a variety of lengths, and didn't shy away from doing the page long lines as well! The accuracy comes with practice as we continue to do these in future warmups. One thing to note, is that in the first page, the beginning of the strokes have a bit of fraying (https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/superimposedlines/fraying), but we already see you improve in that on the second page. It's optional, but you might want to also throw in some curves in there in the future as well. This is helpful for adding line weight in future lessons. Nice work!

Ghosted Lines - Your ghosted lines are nice and confident. This is the basis of drawing convincing shapes in the future. Some of the lines curve a bit, and they do overshoot or miss the other line quite a bit, but you've got a good start here. Again, confidence is the key here, the rest comes with mileage.

Ghosted Planes - Your ghosted planes look well planned out and your linework looks smooth and consistent. You took your time with each line and thought through them, in stead of rushing. Again, we have some overshooting here and one plane that has a broken double line. I'm not worried about this at all, you've shown that you understand the core concepts and are applying them.

Ellipses

Tables of Ellipses - Ellipses are tricky and take time to get the hang of. Again you correctly prioritized the confident linework over accuracy. You drew through them twice, and they fit fairly snugly against each other. Some of them are a bit uneven. A few things that might help with this is to try ghosting a bit more, and give your brain time to process it before touching pen to paper. Maybe even try going a bit slower as long as it doesn't compromise your line quality.

Ellipses in Planes - Nice job trying out the range of ellipses. Two things here, try not to go overboard with drawing through, and make sure that all the ellipses touch all four sides of the planes. You have several that only touch two sides, instead of all four.

Funnels - Your funnels align pretty well along the minor axis line and they touch the sides of the funnels. A tip for future warmups of the exercise, is that usually the ellipses on the far ends get a lot rounder than the ones in the center which are thinner.

Boxes

Plotted Perspective - You used a ruler for this and kept your verticals straight and perpendicular to the horizon line. You demonstrated a good understanding of how vanishing points are used :)

Rough Perspective - These look good, and you extended the lines correctly. The biggest thing that will help you here in future warmups, is to focus on ensuring that your front and back boxes are rectangular. Since we're doing one point perspective, we know that all the horizontal and vertical lines will be perpendicular to each other, so even though we give our best guess during ghosting, use this knowledge to help you double check before you commit to the lines. A general note is that it looks like you have an easier time getting your vertical lines parallel, while the horizontal ones are the tricker ones for you. https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/roughperspective/guessing

Rotated Boxes - Nice job getting through this confusing exercise! You followed all the core steps, your boxes are rotating nicely, and you drew all the boxes in the set. I'm not exactly sure whats going on in the bottom left quarter, and it looks a bit like there might be some whiteout on the two right corner boxes, but overall it looks like you're starting to grasp quite well the concept of how to rotate boxes and how they relate to each other in space.

Organic Boxes - You do a nice job with getting your boxes to gradually get smaller as they move back in space. This is a nice start with depth perception. You also have a bit of rotation going on. There are several boxes where your lines diverge instead of converging, so this is something you will want to pay extra attention to when you tackle the box challenge!

Nicely done! I'm going to mark this lesson complete and have you move on to the 250 Box Challenge! You can go ahead and get started right away, but you will need two agrees on this lesson before you get the badge.

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It made me laugh so much xDD

Oooh, a whole story included! xD

Oooo, I'm getting so close to filling out a whole sketchbook! Thanks for that :)

:0000 thank you so much! ???? I was just feeling pretty down about art right now, and your comment made my day :) Oh, and I took a look at your art and woww, I admire your charcoal work, especially the contrasts in values and how you rendered the still lifes!

Thank you so much for critiqueing my work Fable!! Your critique was very thorough and your suggestments for improvement are very helpful! I look forward to implementing them :D Thank you again!

Thank you so much for the critique! :00 Hehe, yes, it took me forever to finish this, its so funny to think that Saif and I were once doing the 250 box challenge together. Lesson 1 and the box challenge, while tedious, didn't challenge my brain and push me to my limits nearly as much as this one did.

Thank you for pointing out the orientations, I think it's been pretty consistent that I need to experiment more with varied orientations, both with boxes and these sausages :) For intersections, I think I was cautious because the lesson said it was the brain breaker exercise, and I was afraid of confusing myself which resulted in me subconsciously avoiding drawing forms that overlapped significantly..whoops xD Again, thanks for pointing that out, as I didn't even realize I was doing that!

Oh, and those mushrooms - your version blew me away with the attention to detail, and how well the kind of strokes you chose represented those mushrooms, and the quality of how well it was executed without being overworked.

Thank you again for taking the time to critique my lesson, you've been an inspiration both here and on discord with your thoughtful and kind input that you give.

Aww, thank you for taking a look :)

https://imgur.com/a/helper-wild-UVeMD7c

Link above was accidentally submitted, here is the correct link!