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Hello Lazy, you did pretty well with your revisions!

the rotated boxes in particular came out really well, with the rough perspective, I see there are some problems with the inner side of the boxes, but don't worry you'll have plenty of time to practice with the next challenge.

Good work!

Hello beckerito, thanks again for your valuable critique, I did have a hard time with the texture part, it is as you said I forgot a lot about it, for the next lesson I'll be sure to practice it and I'll buy a bigger ellipse guide too.

When I'll be back from vacation I'll be sure to practice following along your suggestions and the links you provided.

Thanks again for taking the time to critique my submission!

Hello Lazy, I'll review your submission.

First I'll answer your question, about the rough perspective yes the correction lines need to match the lines of the boxes you have drawn, you should see where the line of the boxes would go independently from the VP position, so if a box you drew reached the vanishing point, it was drawn well, if not then the red lines wouldn't hit the VP.

As for organic perspective the exercise objective is to rotate the boxes, however doing this exercise incorrectly isn't a big deal, you'll have plenty of time to get better with boxes.

Lines: Starting from your superimposed lines, it looks like you had some trouble drawing straight lines, especially in the first page, so much so that it seems like you didn't draw the first line with a ruler, Uncomfortable does it himself in the video, it is much more simple to keep your superimposed lines straight if you "follow" a line drawn with a ruler. Further looking at your lines I can also see that your longer lines tend to bend a bit, to contrast this try to consciously draw in the opposite direction of the bending.

in the plotted lines and plotted planes you did much better, not only the line quality got better but you also plotted every plane as it was required, well done!

Ellipses: you did a wonderful job in the table of ellipses exercise, your ellipses are smooth, drawn more than one time but not more than three and not bumpy, your ellipses in planes are also well done.

The funnels exercise seems to be also well done however some of your funnels don't divide in equal halves the ellipses, practice it this exercise a bit more.

Boxes: I'll critique the rough perspective and the rotated boxes, the other two look fine to me.

About the rough perspective, to make your boxes all aim to the vanishing point I would plot the construction of your boxes, I'll paste what I've said in another critique " **when drawing the horizontal lines that are supposed to aim to the vanishing point, try first to ghost them, whenever you feel that the trajectory is right place a dot before actually reaching the vp, then check if it is still on the trajectory, finally draw the line.

Checking the trajectory of your boxes should help a lot in this exercise**."

About the rotated boxes, the boxes aren't really rotating , I'll paste what uncomfortable said in the lesson https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/17/rotation, if you look at the image, you see the vanishing point moving on the line, to rotate the box the vanishing points need to move.

Hello Bagi

I'll review your submission

1) Lines: starting from your superimposed lines you did a fine job, most of the lines are quite compact and are all smooth, though your longer lines are less compact, in your practice sessions I'd suggest you to draw more longer ones. good job!

the plotted lines are also fine, although you could have drawn more of them and also long ones, you didn't do badly, is just that if you don't practice with a variety of length in mind, it might come back to bite you whenever you'll have to draw longer lines.

the plotted planes are also well done, it seems to me that you did plot each and every single line, which was what was asked in the lesson, so good job!

2) Ellipses: starting with the table of ellipses you also did a good job here, the ellipses are drawn no more than 2 or 3 times and are smooth and consistent, still some of the first boxes in the first page were not ghosted enough, be patient with ghosting. The funnels are also mostly well dived. good job!

3) Boxes: in general you did well here too, although it seems that you had some difficulty with making the correction lines converge with the vanishing point in the "rough perspective exercise", try to plot your boxes, when drawing the horizontal lines that are supposed to aim to the vanishing point, try first to ghost them, whenever you feel that the trajectory is right place a dot before actually reaching the vp, then check if it is still on the trajectory, finally draw the line.

Checking the trajectory of your boxes should help a lot in this exercise.

The rotated boxes exercise is also well done, the only major problem I see is rotating the corners, unfortunately I'm unable to currently give you any advice with how to fix this other than practice, It has been quite some time since I last practiced it and right now I don't have access to papers.

Still you did well!

Good job!

Hello Douglassales

Today I'll review your submission.

Arrows: Well done! The arrows are smooth and confidently drawn, you also managed to keep your arrows consistently getting smaller, one critique I do have is that you could have overlapped more arrows on themselves, I understand that it gets messy quickly, however it is done so not only to draw more but also to give you the possibility to test line weight, and understand what form goes on top of another, anyhow you did well!

Branches: your branches are also fine, one thing I can't confidently say is whether or not you drew all of them with one single line or with multiple strokes, although judging by the fact that some lines seem to get darker and thicker it seems like you did follow what uncomfortable said. One thing I can tell you for sure is that while you did vary the degrees of the ellipses you could have varied them a lot more by bending the branches more, still you did well here too

Leaves: Well done! your leaves have a nice flow even the one you bent, you did well in not zigzaging and cutting back in your forms too!

Plant construction:

I think you did a really stupendous work with your plant construction, you have an excellent grasp of how to construct complex object from simple forms, not only that but your attention to detail and use of shadows are astonishing.

I don't think there's anything I can critique here.

Well done!

Hello Aithran, I'll critique your submission

1) lines: in general you did all of the three exercises very well, your superimposed lines are smooth, compact and have very little frying at the end, well done! Ghosted lines are also well drawn as for the ghosted planes, which you also have carefully plotted. Well done indeed!

2) Ellipses: here again you did great, your ellipses are confidently drawn and have no bumps at all, you did well in drawing them with two or three strokes. Both your tables of ellipses and ellipses in planes are great, the only critique I can give you is that sometimes a few of your ellipses invade other ellipses, but honestly there are just a few of them and with practice you'll eventually get even better in this regard. Funnels are also drawn well and the ellipses are split in equal halves.

3) Boxes. Plotted perspective is great, got no real critique for them. As for the rough perspective while generally being also well done, I see that there are more than a few correction lines not reaching the vanishing point, no biggie with practice you'll also get better with this exercise, one advice I can give you, is to costantly check if the dots you place while plotting your boxes are still following the trajectory to the vanishing point.

The rotated boxes exercise is also well done, it seems to me that you had an hard time with the corners, that make it appear less rotated, try to exaggerate the rotation of the boxes, give it some more practice. Still you did a good job!

As for the last exercise you also did well, you manged to rotate many of your boxes.

In general you did a very good job with this first lesson, well done!

Honestly this might contradict what I suggested you just now, however don't get too worried about the rushing or not thing , I've also been suggested a bunch of times that I rushed an exercise or a lesson in general.

I believe that it is best to just keep in mind that you can take things slow and also take several days to complete one exercise... If you feel like it.

Truth be told, I usually too get the urge to "go" and wrap things up, especially when many weeks have passed since I started drawing a lesson's exercise, I think it's only natural.

So as long as you feel satisfied of what you did, I'd say it's good enough, if it isn't then somebody will tell you to re draw some pages, no biggie.

About the hatching lines, Uncomfortable did say to hatch, however not like that in the rotated boxes exercise, in his youtube video he hatched in the "gaps" between the boxes, or better yet the sides of the boxes.

I don't think he has actually stated that hatching the front plane of a box is wrong in that particular exercise, however for me personally it was a bit distracting ahahah, so maybe is best not to do it.

Anyway I wish you a constructive and pleasant artistic journey!

Hello AQUIETLULL, I'll review your submission .

1) Lines: generally well done, your lines are not wobbly but firm and smooth, however i noticed that your longer lines are less compact and tend to either move a bit upwards or downwards, try to consciously draw in the opposite direction to counter this.

Good job with plotting the lines in the ghosting lines part, however it seems to me that you didn't fully plot every line in the ghosted planes ( I'm referring to the middle lines) with some it seems you did indeed plot them with other not, you should always plot them because they really help with your aim and accuracy ( this will start to matter a lot in the final lessons)

2) Ellipses: your ellipses are okay, you could really improve them by taking things slowly and ghosting them more.

For example: taking a look at your table of ellipses most of your ellipses have a good flow, are not bumpy and are all drawn two or three times.

However looking at the ghosted planes with ellipses, while you do keep a nice flow , they seem to have been drawn too hastily, the first and the second strokes are a bit too further a part from each other showing that you should have kept ghosting for a little while longer.

With the funnels is a mixed bunch, in some you didn't mange to divide the ellipses in equal halves and in others you did, I'd suggest you to practice them a bit.

3) Boxes: Well done, you've done quite well what was required from the lesson (that is drawing through the boxes and applying the correction method in the rough perspective part), still however I see that some of your boxes are still wonky and that many don't reach the vanishing point. To fix this, here again I'd advise you to plot your box ( i quickly drew one for you to follow how to plot it https://imgur.com/a/6br1IX1) basically you need to plot your ghosted/imaginary horizontal lines that aim to the vanishing point, while ghosting them place a dot before you reach the vanishing point, check if the the dot is still in the trajectory of the ghosted line and if it ultimately leads to the vanishing point.

As for the rotated boxes it seems fine, you did manage to rotate the boxes and kept the corners of the boxes quite close to one another, though you shouldn't have drawn hatching lines on the front planes of the boxes, it makes it quite difficult to see through.

As for the organic perspective the objective of the exercise is quite difficult for beginners, so don't worry you'll have plenty of practice with the 250 boxes.

Anyway I think it is more than "passable" as you have said, rather i think you did quite well.

Good job!

Hey Beckerito thanks for the critique and sorry for the late response.

I'll take in consideration your suggestion by drawing some other pages of form intersections while looking at the pinned post and drawing some other objects.

I must admit that I didn't believe my submission would have passed the "complete" mark ahahah.

A big part that left me dissatisfied was, as you said, the orthographic and the constructions not matching up, a part in which I'll try to get better at.

Anyway thanks again for the critique!

Hey Beckerito, I've finished the 15 cylinders in boxes that you requested, I hope the correction lines are all visible, the ink of a coloured pen was starting to finish. Here is the link: https://imgur.com/a/dFGEYJJ

I added the correction for the minor axis. Somehow (I don't know why) I had previously thought that I had to abandon that correction method ( I must have misread the page).

Anyhow about university, don't worry too much, I'm sure your experience will be different. Covid messed up mine big time, so even during graduation day, I had to stay at home due to covid restrictions (It felt a bit underwhelming ahah).

I hope and wish you to have a fun and constructive experience in uni! be steadfast with exams and all good luck to you!