Kort3

I'm sure that you will improve using references and making the warmups, so keep going!! Has been a pleasure! ^^

Hi Feldespar!! I'm Kort3, but i think we already know each other, I'm happy to see you again. Let's take a view to your work shall we?

Organic Arrows

These look good! You're making good usage of the depth of the page by experimenting with the rates of foreshortening in your arrows, but your arrows do sometimes look a bit unnatural as it seems to me you're not always confident on how their edges should overlap.

Do not be afraid of letting edges overlap as they create a more solid structure. In order to achieve a more cohesive arrow construction use the ghosting method, that way can gauge whether your lines would look right and overlap the way they should before committing to any marks.

Your usage of hatching helps you establish how your arrows twist and turn in space and further your own understanding of the tridimensional space these objects occupy, but do remember that your hatching lines must still follow the principles of ghosting and mark-making, they must have clear end and start points, be carefully planned and executed and not end at arbitrary points.

In general you're moving in the right direction in this exercise, so continue to tackle this exercise during your warm ups, practice with the ghosting method and different types of arrows and the ways they move through 3d space, this will help you take your understanding of arrows and the way they move through 3d space further, developing your spatial reasoning skills even more.

Leaves

I like these too! They communicate their fluidity and sense of energy, it's good that you're not only trying to capture how these structures sit statically within space, but also how they move across it from moment to moment.

However, something to note is that the majority of your leaf structures don't fold or bend in any way. Leaves are organic structures that are affected by all sorts of forces, from the wind to gravity to their own weight pulling them down, as such you'll find that in plant structures leaves will actually be oriented in a variety of different ways, and you'll improve faster by thinking about the way these objects look when they move through the world from moment to moment.

Talking about the edge details: you need to spend more time with the execution of each mark - because there are so many and they seem individually unimportant, you're putting less time into each one and so they do not properly rise off and return to the existing stroke - there are often gaps, which is mistake that goes against the third principle of mark making from Lesson 1 and could be avoided by putting more time into the work. But i don't see overshoots or zigzagging marks, so good job here! Remember, no mark you draw is unimportant - if you decided it was worth adding, it's worth giving as much time as it needs to be done to the best of your current ability.

Branches

These ones are pretty good!! Only two things to say here:

1.- I can see here visible tails in a compound stroke. This is a mistake, but is one of the most common ones, so while you will see them in your work, just keep in mind that the goal is to make sure you're doing your best to limit their presence there.

2.- The degrees of your contour ellipses are a little inconsistent and lack variety - to convey a sense of appropriate perspective and solidity, it helps to have more narrow degrees at the cross-sections which are closer to the viewer, and wider degrees at those further away (refer to the image from this section of the instructions for the Branches exercise). I was not able to identify a consistent sense of flow through these branches, which undermined their solidity a bit and flattened them out. Keeping the degree-shifts consistent can help to sell the illusion of 3-dimensionality more.

Plant construction

And lastly let's take a look at your plant constructions, which are generally coming along well made, as you're following the construction methods and techniques introduced in the lesson which allows you to construct really solid looking and believably tridimensional structures. I can see a good developing sense of spatial reasoning in these pages.

I'd like to see more variety of wider and tighter ellipses in the construction of your branches, but still being a good job.

Moreover, the general constructions feel believable and solid. I really like your mushrooms.

Closing thoughts

You did a good job, consistent and flowly, but you can improve even more making more fluid marks when drawing leaves and playing more with the size of the ellipses of the branches, remember that the get wider when go away from the viewer and tighter when closer to you.

For me, you are able to go ahead to the next lesson. Keep going like this, be sure of do the 50% rule and the warmups. Kisses

HI! Looking into yor exercise i think that your problem may be that te extension of the lines you do after the Y axis aren't extended to the vanishing point, but they spread away.

I mean, if you draw the extension of your lines, they might to connect in some point, but i think that if you do it, the won`t.

An example of it is the left axis of your box n16, the up and middle ones will connect at some point, but the bottom one won´t.

Try to extend your lines with different colours and you will see it better.

Hope this will help you, Kisses :)

Hey BuRoBa!! Thanks for taking the time for complete de exercises, I just wanted to make sure that the exercises are done with a real understanding of how they should be done. You were ready since the begining to make de challenge so go on!! Good luck in your way and don't hesitate, I hope see more of your homework in a future!!

Hi novaquide, sry for not reply to you, I didn't see the message, my fault... but you completed it pretty well, good job!! I don't know if you have started with the 250 box challenge, but you are fully prepared to it. I hope that still with the course, because it looks like you can be pretty good. Be lucky and do the warmups!!

Welcome to drawabox, and good work seeing Lesson 1 through to the end! I’m Kort3 and today i’m who will correct your exercises, Let’s take a look at it, shall we?

Superimposed lines.

They are looking great! I love how many there are. Great job including a varied array of line lengths and curves. It looks like you started making woblier lines, but in the second page is visible that you corrected it, good job, you are in the right way. Remember that in draw a box each exercise has a concrete objective, so try to follow the instructions, don’t worry if your job isn’t perfect, is not suposed to be.

Ghosted lines.

Your ghosted lines exercise has also been done well, each mark begins correctly on one of the dots and follows through confidently. Accuracy is just a matter of mileage, so as you continue with this exercise in your warmups you'll find you can hit the mark more precisely, and more often, over time. I would have like to see longer lines, like passing through the page, because it may help draw from the shoulder, but i’m not gonna make you repeat this exercise for that reason. Just make sure you change the lenght of your lines in yor future warmups.

Ghosted planes.

Be careful, however; right now you have a habit of course correcting, as you approach your end points, if your spot your line being off. This is not something we like to see! More than an accurate line, we’re interested in a smooth, straight line, so prioritize accordingly.

Table of ellipses.

Your table of ellipses includes a variety of ellipse degrees and angles, the space was used well and your ellipses are drawn through. Again, excellent focus here on keeping the movements confident.

Ellipses in planes.

The ellipses in planes, too, look good. The most of them touch 4 edges of the planes and looks like you did them with confident.

Funnels

Your funnels looks good but you didn’t draw the minor axis in any of them. Be careful, also, that the ellipses either maintain the same degree throughout, or increase as they move away from the center, not decrease.

Take a look to the mistake: https://imgur.com/a/54gUD6b

And here you have the link to the correct way to do the exercise. https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/funnels/notaligned

Plotted perspective

Nothing to say here. Good job!

Rough perspective

i really like the first page, you did it the best you could, but in the second page it looks like you started to aply te line extension in the wrong way, here you have an example: https://imgur.com/a/ypjq7Pg

You should take a look to this. https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/roughperspective/extendinglineswrongYou started right!!

Rotated boxes

This exercise looks good. Your boxes here are big, snug, and properly rotating. There’s a slight resistance to that same rotation in the back, but that’s entirely expected at this stage, so nothing to stress over.

Organic perspective

These boxes look fantastic, the boxes themselves are well constructed, and flow well as a result of their foreshortening. Nice work, overall. I would like to see smaller and bigger ones, but don´t worry about that, you can try it again in your warmups.

In summary, Good job BuRoBa, you did it pretty well and look like you understood the mayority of the exercises, anyway i will send you some homework just for be sure that you get it at all. i hope it's not too much for you. Do it and send it to me replying this message, i will be alert.

Hi again Cornball!! Thanks a lot for the critique, i will try to repeat the branches exercise for a better understanding of it, has a been a very useful and motivating critique and it looks like you spent a long time doing it. Thanks again! Love you!!!

I don't know if the problem it's mine, but I just can see 1 exercise

Thanks a lot for the correction! It was so useful :)

I will incorporate these exercises to my warm up for sure. Have a nice day!

Thank you so much Feldspar. He's been a pleasure to be corrected for you, as always hehe. I'll try pay attention all of those things in the next lesson! :)