Kort3

Hello. After reviewing your reply with the redoes I have noticed some details:-

You contour lines and ellipses are much better but your ellipses in particular look like they have been drawn over more than 3 times, this makes them look cluttered

Your organic intersections have also improved a lot. The only thing I would recommend is maybe adding more sausages next time

Your dissections show a much clearer understanding of whats a shadow vs form. There are some forms that you have mixed up the shadow and form with but you have improved a lot from your past attempt

Your Line quality has improved quite much in these exercises slowly.

You drew over the ellipses 2 times whereas it was asked to draw only 1 time over the ellipses. I believe it was asked for a good reason, so better stick to the instructions properly.

Your rough perspective is not good enough yet, you should redo the rough perspective exercise.

Hi there! I saw your review in the queue, so I figured I'd take a look:

Organic Forms and Contours. Right off the bat I'm seeing good form construction, no wobbly lines or any particular stray marks. I think your minor axes kind of skew noticeably high or low on a few of these, not really a rampant problem; just something to be aware of if you weren't already. Your contours are mostly immaculate, and make sense as the sausage bends and rotates through the space. I do think you could experiment a little more with widening the degree of the ellipse to show a sausages back-facing side reach more dramatically away from the viewer. Here's a sketch that I made for another student that demonstrates what I'm talking about as far as widening the degree of the contours.

Insects without Texture. Okay, so browsing through these, I'm not seeing too much to really comment on. I believe you're using good confident lines and applying good construction habits to your bugs. You're also building up your sausage legs with organic forms. Among these non-textured bugs, I especially like you weird bug with the doofy snoot, and the construction on that beetle with the three horns is especially nice.

The only thing I want to point out here is that these bugs ought to have a cast shadow outline to show their position in planar space, otherwise it looks like they're floating in the page, which, while funny to think about, is discouraged.

Insects with Texture. Now with the second half of the assignments, You're doing a great job applying texture implicitly. I also appreciate the effort it took to show the bug before you applied the texture to it. There is one bug, #5 I believe, where the markings on the bug's abdomen are filled in. I believe these are supposed left outlined so that the forms beneath them are unobstructed.

That aside, I want to reiterate that you did a great job with these. Your use of cast shadows with texture is nothing short of exemplary, and I applaud your work on this lesson.

HI there, I'll be looking at your work today

Organic Arrows

The arrows appear to be foreshortening with distance and mostly feel confident and smooth. They don't feel like they are lacking in thought in their construction. However, there are a few points that need to be addressed. The line weight and shading are generally used to emphasize which line is on top of the other. In several arrows, these additions do not help with visually clarifying overlaps. Consider the bottom right arrow; the two larger bends have shading on opposite sides. Next, the width of the arrow is sometimes inconsistent. This is usually an issue with rushing, so make sure you slow down and ghost both the initial and matching curves. Finally, some of the arrow heads seem to have repeated lines. This is not a big problem, but make sure to minimize the number of corrections done.

Leaves

Most of the leaves are flowing and have an element of realness to their forms. For the most part, constructional steps are followed faithfully, with the arms of branched leaves individually planned out and re-joined with the main body. The critique here is that the edges appear to be done without thought on "auto-pilot". Consider how each of the individual bumps have their own place on the leaf as opposed to being just a pattern on the edge. For the leaf textures, look carefully at your reference and understand what on the leaf causes it to have its distinct appearance. For example, note the how the stem leads into the leaf, how it forks, and how light applies to it. This is a similar process to Lesson 2's textures, but with emphasis on what and how along with the study.

Branches

The primary issue of the branches is that the degrees of the ellipses are not shifting. This does not have to be completely realistic as this exercise is not the cylinder challenge, but most of the branches look like this was not considered. Additionally, the ellipses appear to have execution issues and are rather wobbly. This is usually a ghosting/shoulder problem, and is discussed in Lesson 1. That being said, the width of the branches and the issue of visible tails are dealt with pretty well, and those are generally the hardest parts of this exercise, so good work there.

Plants

Most of the demo plants are done well and have a sense of realism in their structure. The elements of construction are usually identified and built upon, leading to a complete member of the plant or fungal kingdom. There are a few areas of this that can be improved. First, small twigs are usually inappropriately represented with a line. These have volume as space as well, so consider a very thing branch or even just a tube of two lines unless the twig really is that thin. Second, not all the forms are drawn through. Each petal/leaf/thin piece of the plant needs to have its entire form constructively added to be a part of the whole. Not doing so is skipping crucial steps that help you reason about the subject you are drawing. An example of this is the lotus and several of the plants on the last page. And lastly, most of the contour lines on the fruits/spherical objects do not appear to wrap around the form. They look a little flat and unconvincing. Consider using a whole ellipse to define the volume as opposed to just the one curve. Remember that constructional drawing is the main technique in which this course teaches its content.

The plants that are textured sometimes have too much line weight. In some cases, it can make the plant look messier or bolder than it needs to be. The same thing that was said about organic arrows applies here about clarifying overlap.

Finally, there were a large number of repeated plants. That is fine, but please leave those as warm-ups for yourself as opposed to work to be handed in. This is so that grinding, which is discussed here, is avoided. In the spirit of this, I ask for another page of plant(s), different than the ones in this submission.

Overall, there are done well and areas to improve. Consider working on ellipses and understanding the why and how of constructional drawing.

nice job! for the arrows, they could use some extra overlap if need be, and should have tighter spaces between bends the further away they go. outside of that they look great! the textures you did were great as well, even showing areas where the "lighter" areas were less detailed on the dissections

some of your form intersections look a tad off personally (the bottom left sphere and cylinder in form intersections #4 comes to mind), outside of that i'd say you did the homework very well!

Hello Chieftang, congratulations on finishing lesson 2! I'll be critiquing your submission today.

Organic Arrows

I like these! It's kinda hard to tell what's going on in the second page, but it's good that you're pushing yourself to draw through and understand visually noisy pages like this. Your arrows flow confidently and seem to pop out of the page nicely. The only thing I would change is to try varying the spacing between the folds of your ribbons a bit more, and dont be afraid to let the folds of a single arrow overlap with itself - that can really help to sell the illusion of 3-dimensionality.

Organic Forms with Contour Lines

Nice job keeping your ellipses and curves within the bounds of your sausages. My only note here is that the contour ellipses don't seem to have varying degrees, as described here in the lesson. The same goes for your contour curves, but to a lesser extent - it looks like you started to apply this to some of those sausages, which is good. Just keep this point in mind as you move forward.

Texture Analysis

These look good! Your gradient from dark to light looks good, but could be a bit more dense on the dark side - we're not supposed to see the vertical line of pure black. Your middle texture was well executed in this regard, but the top and bottom could have been filled out a bit more.

Dissections

Great job sticking to purely cast shadows here! The textures look rich and definitely convey a feeling of texture to the surfaces. The instructions did specify to do two pages, but this page is very dense as you mentioned; perhaps I'm being too lenient, but I would accept this as being enough.

I'll suggest an optional additional page of dissections for completeness, but these are well done enough that I don't feel the need to assign an additional page here.

Form Intersections

These pages look good - forms feel solid and the intersections seem appropriate. These pages definitely demonstrate an understanding of how various surfaces intersect with one another.

Organic Intersections

I didn't see these included in the submission? It's possible you did them but they weren't included in the upload somehow.

Overall this was a solid submission that definitely demonstrates an understanding of the material, and an adequate degree of competency executing on the ideas. Go ahead and submit the missing 2 pages of organic intersections, and you'll be ready for lesson 3! Great work!

Hey, I’ll be grading your homework today.

Organic Arrows:

First off, you did a good job adding line weight at the cross over areas. And the way your lines crossover one another look great too. Really makes the arrows look like 3D ribbons. But I will say your lines are rough. As if you’ve gone over them again in places to make them go in the right direction. I know the temptation to fix them, but Uncomfortable said we shouldn’t do it because it just makes them look messy. Also, your perspective is a bit off. Remember, the arrows are supposed to scrunch and overlap with distance and expand with proximity.

I’d recommend doing these again.

Organic Forms:

Contour Ellipses: Your sausage forms look good. For the most part, they’re the right shape and your lines look smooth and confident too. Your ellipses are drawn through like we’re supposed to though, though some are drawn through too much. Once or twice will do. Also, they’re not fitting snugly into the sausage shapes the way they’re supposed to be. A few are too small, but many are too big for the sausage forms. Really ghost those first to make sure they’re the right size. Barring a few mistakes, your ellipses are turning well through space though. I recommend trying these again too.

Contour Curves: Your contour curves look awesome though. They arc and hook around the sausage form like they’re supposed to. Nice.

Texture Analysis:

These look good. I wish I’d done that well with the paper. My only criticism is that the transition to fully black should’ve been a bit more gradual.

Dissections: These look really good too. You kept the lighting down the middle in line and it looks good. Looks very 3D. You made the textures wrap around the sausage form as they should in 3D and you broke away from the silhouette to help sell it as well too. The ice cream, bumblebee hair, and octopus suckers were my favorites.

Form Intersections: Your forms aren’t stretched, so they all look like they occupy the same space, which is great. They’re not small floating groups either and you used like weight to properly show the intersections between forms, which are both good. Overall, not bad at all.

Organic Intersections: Your sausage forms look nice. Nice shape. Properly droopy with the contour lines and curves. My criticisms are the shadows. The middle on the second page doesn’t quite follow the forms as it should. They’re a bit more narrow than the forms casting them too. Besides that though, these look great.

And we’re done here just about. I recommend trying another page of Organic Arrows and Organic Forms with ellipses with the changes I mentioned in mind. Good luck

hello, I'll be critiquing your 250 box challenge today

first of all, congratulations! you have crossed drawabox's first major hurdle, and succeeded where many have failed.

now, onto the critique:

1)you have shown tremendous improvement in you boxes

2) I see that one of the main things you seemed to struggle with was making lines subtly converge. until 195 boxes in, most of the converging lines were basically parallel

3) in the beginning you made a few errors-- you drew some boxes in one point/ two point perspective, and didn't converge some of the lines in the right direction (or was confused because of not drawing some boxes in three point perspective.) obviously, you fixed this problem, but it may have slightly hindered your progress in the beginning

4) I like how you experimented with boxes of different sizes. in the future when you're doing warm-ups, however, I'd like to challenge you to experiment a little bit more with the width of your boxes- like drawing boxes that are very thin.

overall, I think you did I good job. I'd also recommend going over the new 250 box challenge rules to get some pointers

Hi, Feldspar! Congrats on finishing 250 box challenge!

You shown great improvement:

• you lines became much more confident and precise;

• boxes grew in size, got more variety in size, proportion and orientation;

• you started from drawing boxes in drastic perspective only but added will shallow one too.

I see you didn't use hatching lines or lineweight which is acceptable for this challenge but I would recommend doing them in warm ups as it's both additional practice (more lines to draw!) and necessary thing in future lessons to separate forms from each other, for example in Form Intersection exercise in Lesson 2.

Your back corner is still a little off which is normal at it's a result of small mistakes accumulated during planning but it will for sure become better with practice.

Also I would recommend to make extending lines at least twice as long as the edges they extend.

Overall it looks like you got what the 250 boxes is about so good luck with Lesson 2!

Hi Katehcu0! I am Feldspar and I will be critiquing you work today. I hope you've been keeping up with your 50% rule and warmups while waiting! Lets start!

Lines

• Superimposed Lines: I see no fraying on both sides nor wobbling. Good job!

• Ghosted Lines: Confident lines!

• Ghosted Planes: Solid planes all i can say.

Ellipses

• Tables of Ellipses: The vast majority of ellipses are evenly shaped and fit snugly against the borders. Solid work. Some of the ellipses are not drawn through 2 full times, keep this in mind.

• Ellipses in Planes: Some of the ellipses are wobbling and egg-shaped but i see you trying to put them snugly agains all borders and they are confident so this is the matter of some warmups. Remember confident but inaccurate line > Accurate but wobbly line.

• Funnels: Good funnels. Try to vary size and shape of ellipses through warmups and optionally change the degree with every ellipse.

Boxes

• Plotted Perspective: Nothing to add here.

• Rough Perspective: I see repeated lines! In DrawABox, you are not allowed to "fix" lines, you only have one shot at a line, and if you miss it, tough luck. This will force you to have a better planning phase, be mindful when ghosting, and will help your accuracy in the long run. Try to ghost more throughly when going towards the vanishing point, that may prove helpful.

• Rotated Boxes: You have a eye for rotations! Solid job. Remember to keep gaps between boxes not so big and consistent.

• Organic Perspective: Most of the boxes are converging correctly. I see repeated lines again. I believe with 250 Boxes Challenge instructions, you will understand and get better with organic boxes even more.