KamiyaSora

Welcome to Draw A Box! Thanks for submitting your homework. I've noticed that you've been writing notes in your homework- I'd suggest doing them on post its or in a journal as those notes take up valuable practice space. Make sure to check if you're following the example shown in the homework pages to avoid grinding.

Lines

Ghosted lines - In your notes you've written accuracy as something to aim for. This resulted in wobbly-ness in many of your lines. Next time, just focus on getting smooth lines. Accuracy will gradually improve as you continue the course- when we focus on accuracy our brains will try to interfere with our process.

Also no matter how badly a line turns out, don't redo them. Just move on to the next one. (First Ghosted planes page)

Ellipses

Refer back to what I said about writing notes in homework.

Your ellipses are very good- it seems like you've been critiquing yourself on that. A small percentage of your ellipses are wobbly and intersect but those can be improved as you do these exercises for warmups. I'll link Uncomfortable's video on things to remember when going through the tables of ellipses homework.

Ellipses in planes:

A very minor amount of your ellipses are deformed to try and meet all the sides. If that happens I'd suggest continuing anyways when you know your ellipses aren't going to meet all four sides- we want smooth ellipses as our first priority.

Funnels:

Your ellipses have become less confident because you are trying to reach the sides of the funnel. This homework is notoriously difficult- just be aware that the funnel in the bottom left corner is not aligned.

Boxes

Refer back to what I said about writing notes in homework.

Please follow the homework example in the articles to prevent accidental grinding.

Quick note on line weight: Messing up on it is normal, just don't redo the same line. (Plotted perspective)

Rough perspective:

Refer to the lines section of my critique.

A common mistake is not keeping the width lines parallel to the horizon and the height lines perpendicular to the horizon. This can be a sign of guessing because you don't know what the box should look like.

Rotated boxes:

You used hatching as shading- in Dab, we use hatching to denote the side we're looking at. Hatching the gaps between the boxes would make it easier to read.

Your boxes is showing rotation, this exercise is hard so good job on this! Be careful of converging towards the same vanishing point - this is easier to spot in the upper rows if you look at the bottom edges of your boxes. When boxes converge to the same VP the bottom edge will line up to form a straight line.

Organic perspective:

Refer to the lines section of this critique.

You show understanding of depth and my eyeballs have been tricked to see that- nice!

Usually I have people resubmit pages if they didn't follow instructions but you show understanding of the concepts- I'll let it pass.

Hey Oroi! You've waited a while, huh.

Your line exercises look good. The curved superimposed ones look a bit fuzzy, but that'll improve with enough time and practice.

Ellipse exercises are also good. Some of the ellipses in the Funnels don't have their minor axis aligned to the middle line, just remember next time to draw them so that they're cleanly cut in half by the middle line.

Your box exercises are well done! You got a good grasp of one-point perspective by the end of Rough Perspective. Some of the Organic Perspective boxes are definitely not cubes, but the important part is that they look and feel solid.

Try to avoid doing more than required, regardless of reason. Or, to put it another way, do your best on your first attempt.

Careful with the superimposed lines – a sharp change in trajectory = a new stroke. Don’t forget about the start/end points for the non-diagonal lines of your planes. In general, ghost until ready, then commit, and don’t be so overly conscious of the end point.

Ellipses are a little timid – you may be going to slow. Aim for 2 full rotations, and be careful not to use a lesser pivot for those sharp turns. Got your priorities backwards for your ellipses in planes: we want them to be smooth, and rounded, not fill the whole plane. For the funnels, draw the minor axis first, then the arcing lines, so they’re equidistant from it.

Careful with the automatic reinforcing in the rough perspective exercise. Also, do your due-diligence on each line – you’re guessing quite a bit right now. Nice job on the rotated boxes exercise. Organic perspective looks nice, but linework is not great. Lines stop short, and are continued in a different stroke, are wobbly, are scratchy.

Hi, first of all well done for completing lesson 1 :)

Here's what I think about your submission:

Lines

Your lines are confident and smooth, with very little wobbling.

For the superimposed lines exercise, I noticed you have fraying on both ends of the line. I would suggest taking the time to place your pen properly at the start of each line so the beginning will be neater.

Ellipses

Make sure to only draw through the ellipses maximum 3 times. I can see you draw around the ellipses quite a lot, this is especially noticeable in the table of ellipses and the ghosted planes. This makes it hard for you to see if the shape of the ellipses are accurate. You improved on this in the funnels exercise.

The minor axis (the line in the middle) cuts the ellipses in 2 symmetrical halves quite nicely in the funnels exercise, good job.

Boxes

In many of the boxes such as those in the rough perspective and organic perspective exercises, you repeat lines. What I mean is that when a line goes off course you draw another line to replace it. Next time, just keep the original line as if you meant to place it there and move on.

In the rough perspective exercise some of the lines are very far away from the vanishing point, don't worry this is normal and you will improve as you keep practising. The important thing to note is that the boxes still look relatively normal, so don't feel like everything has to line up with the vanishing point perfectly.

Good effort on the rotated boxes exercise. Remember that as the box rotates, you should see less and less of the front face:

[https://imgur.com/bn46MuC]

There are perspective issues in the organic perspective exercise, but do not stress about it right now as you will improve after the 250 box challenge. The same goes for rotated boxes.

Overall, a decent submission :)

Hello,

Good job completing Lesson 2!

Regarding your arrows. You have a good understanding of how to draw the lines to make them look like they are naturally coming from the distance. There are some arrows where the shading is drawn on the outer side of the curve as a minor critique so be mindful of that.

Your organic sausage forms are done well and you have a good understanding of how the contours would widen/narrow with perspective.

Texture analysis is a difficult one to finishso good job on completing it. In your texture analysis assignment you did, however, forget to leave a little white spot near the right side to have a gradient of textures to transition to. There is a 25 Texture Challenge somewhere in the future lessons so you'll be getting plenty of practice then. I just wanted you to be mindful of it.

The Dissections was a particularly difficult assignment to complete. This goes into vague art drawing terms but when drawing, it is good to try to avoid "pattern drawing" which is when we draw what we think an object looks. Our brains are lazy and love to simplify objects in memory to use less neurons. With some textures liek bird feathers and brick it seems like you are drawing what you remember brick walls or feathers look like and simplifying it. Remember to draw the shadows of the texture casting on to the surface around it to capture good textures. You do a great job with capturing those cast shadows on your kiwi, pancake rocks, and soil + pebbles textures.

Another think to keep in mind is some of your textures dont seem to wrap around the 3D organic forms. For example, it looks like the brick wall texture is on a flat surface when we want to make sure it looks curved. Remember the ellipses and contour lines from the previous assignment to apply to those forms!

Your form intersections assignment is done really well and it seems like you have a good understanding and grasp of how forms intersect in 3d space. Props to you! I, personally had a lot of trouble wrapping my head around it.

You do a great job with the Organic Intersections assignment as well. My only minor critique is extending some of the cast shadows of forms to further cement the idea that it is laying on top of something.

Good job with your work! I think you are ready for the next lesson!

Arrows: Nice creative shapes, but your lines are wobbly. Remember to strike with confidence and ghost more.

Organic Shapes: A little wobbly.

Textures: This is supposed to work by observing what are the darkest parts vs. more minor darks. Then on the light side you only draw the darkest shadows whereas on the dark side you accentuate all the shadows. Instead you just drew the same pattern across the whole box and used narrower lines on the right side. I think you should redo this exercise.

Dissections: I think these look nice. Sometimes you forget to bend the texture around the sausage and just seem to replicate an image in that space.

Shape intersections: Good. Your lines are a lot more confident here than on the other exercises.

Organic intersections: The shapes are supposed to sag and lie on top of eachother with more overlapping. I think you should watch the video again and redo this.

It's nice to see you working hard and getting through all the exercises.

Superimposed Lines: Overall Good. They are nice and confident and free of any arching. Just remember to take care when setting down your pen. There should only ever be fraying on one end of your lines.

Ghosted Lines: Again, good. One stroke one line as instructed. I'm not worried about some of your lines missing their marks, that will improve with practice. However, I am noticing a slight arch so some of these lines. Remember to take your time and always rotate the page to the optimal angel to get that clean straight stroke from your shoulder.

Ghosted Planes/ Ellipses in Planes: Kind of a mix bag on this one. I'm not sure if it's the quality of the photo, the crippled paper or a lack of confidence but there is some major janky action to the lines on the first page. Thankfully the second page is much smoother. Again we have some lines with a slight curve to them. Just keep rotating that page!

Table of Ellipses: Very impressive. There all drawn through twice and oh so smooth. There are a small handful that overlap a tad too much but that is a nitpick for a very well done assignment.

Funnels: Again very good. Majority of the ellipses are touching with minimal overlap and the minor axis is spliting most of them into equal halves. I do believe the minor axis is misaligned in the bottom right hand corner. But again nitpick.

Plotted Perspective: Perfect. It's everybody's favorite exercise.

Rough Perspective: Overall Good. We got some wobble to the lines but the boxes are drawn through and you have your guide lines head back to the VP. Don't think about too many things at once. Plot a set of lines and focus on that stroke. Keep in mind that every single Horizontal line should be parallel to the horizon line and every single vertical line will be perpendicular to the horizon line. There should be no lean or tilt to those lines.

Rotated Boxes: Considering the degree of difficulty, this is not too bad at all. Although the perspective gets a little funky and your missing some boxes on the top and bottom, the lines are stroked with confidence, with minimal wobble. Also I always appreciate hatching. It makes the exercise soo much easier to see and critique.

Organic Perspective: The essence of the exercise is there. The boxes are following the curve and change in size as the fall towards or away from us. Remember the one line, one stroke rule. You should only go over lines to add weight, not to correct them. All in all we're going to learn more about the "Y"method of constructing boxes and 3 point perspective in the 250 box challenge.

Overall Thoughts: Very good. The exercises are complete and you seem to understand the gist of things. Just be sure to re-visit these exercises in a regular 10 - 20 minute warmup before each drawing session to help improve line quality and accuracy. With that said I feel you are ready to enter the 250 box challenge. Cheers and Happy Drawing.

Hey, congratulations for completing this lesson, lets start with the feedback.

For your lines i think you did a good job, you imposed lines and ghosted lines, even if not perfectly accurate have a nice flow and smoothness, precision will come with practice, your ghosted planes also look nice with line quality, but i would recommend you to vary them more in size and angles to have a more challenging time.

Onto ellipses the same applies, the will eventually get better with practice and close the gap between the two, so here we are fine too.

But about your boxes i have some problems, your plotted perspective is good, except the fact that you used uniform strength all across the boxes, making it hard to distinguish between the front and back, i can see that latter you put more line weight into the front lines, but this could be solved by using less initial force, because everything looks a little bit too crowded and dark. With your rough perspective boxes this issue is solved, but i can see that your line quality is lower compared to the one you was able to make at the start of the lesson, remember to take your time with each line, ghost them until you feel it. Rotated boxes are really hard, so i understand most of your trouble with them, but something easy that would help you is to put shading in the faces of the boxes, this is not an simple matter of taste, it helps to make everything more clear and clean. And your rotated boxes are fine as they are, i would only recommend you to put more line weight in closer boxes and faces of those boxes.

In general good, but i think you should take more time, if you feel burned out apply the 50/50 rule and then tackle it with more energy.

Hi.

Overall you have done a pretty good job. The lines are non wobbly and the extensions are correct. The hatching is consistent too. I can see you had trouble with some of the convergence but its fine as its a continuous process. As such i see no major problem with the boxes. Just remember the important stuff like drawing from shoulder, ghosting your lines. Also add boxes to your warmups for added practice (unfortunately boxes are something you can never escape). Since you've done everything upto the mark you may continue on your journey towards the next lesson.

Good luck! O~O

LINES

In general, I think your lines exercises are good. You did them with pencil if you don't have a fineliner is better use a pen than a pencil. Also your lines arch a bit or missed the point in some planes, but your accuracy will improve over the lessons.

ELLIPSES

In the tables with ellipses you forgot to go through some of them more than one time (it have to the two three times), but you went back in the planes exercise, the ellipses here are nice and tight into the planes, there are some wobbly lines here and there but not something to worry about. Some of your ellipses in the funnels are not being cut in to equal halves.

BOXES

Plotted perspective looks good. In rough perspective some lines aren't aligned to the horizon, you tried to repeat some lines, avoid repeating the lines if the line didn't go well don't worry and move to the next. The rotated box are nice, some wobbly lines and the hatching is a bit messy but nothing to point about rotation. And finally the organic perspective, the boxes are a bit separated, I can't see if you plotted the lines or did them freehanded, in future you can try to do more boxes overlapping and add line weight to clarify which one is in front.

Lastly, your lines are still wobbly, keep doing your warm-ups before starting your exercises and draw them with confidence the accuracy comes later, is better a line off but with a smooth flow than a wobbly/scratchy line. Every line in your work is important think and ghost them before putting you pen the page.