Jukesir

wow, that was a detailed critique, thank you!

thanks, i'll try to keep this in mind

also, i have been using the critique exchange program on the DaB discord server, but you have to do 5 critiques yourself to get added to the list, and it takes alooot of time to get done

thank you very much for the reply!

im probably going to finish drawabox with this in mind, since im not really sure where i would go next to improve anyway, but i hope i'll figure out what to do after finishing drawabox

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superimposed lines look slightly wobbly at first as your brain tried to steer your pen back on track, but wobbly lines don't seem to appear much later so it's fine, just be sure keep that in mind to keep your lines straight and confident

your ghosted lines look pretty good, there is a clear confidence boost of the lines here, i can see a bit of the other exercises poking through the page below, it's not as bad here, but be sure to take pictures of your homework on a blank backdrop as it could get confusing

the ghosted planes are pretty good, no major problems with the lines and ellipses look solid and confident aswell as you prioritized confidence over accuracy, which is good, one thing i do want to point out is that the vast majority of your planes are rectangular or square, you should have tried out some crazier quadrilaterals for your planes, not a mistake but something recommended in the example homework https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/15/example, and something you should try to do in your warm-ups from now on

tables of ellipses are solid, the ellipses are confident, snugly arranged, you've got a variety of different degrees and you've drawn through all them 2 full times, similar for the funnels

plotted perspective is done carefully, you understood how each line goes to it's vanishing point, there are some vertical lines that are a bit slanted in the back, but those are an accumulation of all the small millimeter errors you make with the ruler, so it's fine, just keep it in mind as you move on, one thing i want to add on is that if you're going to do the hatching lines, treat each line as a you would every other line: prepare, ghost and execute confidently, dont just rush them

the rough perspective is pretty good, confident lines, rectangular front and back faces, extending the lines correctly and they fall pretty close to the vp. one thing i want to point out it that i see you got comfortable with the 6 boxes layout near the end, while not a mistake, you definitely should vary them up, making some closer, some further away, bigger, smaller etc. this is crucial as you move onto the 250 boxes challenge as you cant just draw 250 of the same box

the rotated box challenge is decent, you drew every box even the extreme corners, some of the extreme angles aren't rotating though https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/rotatedboxes/notrotating

as for the organic perspective, the boxes have shallow convergence, which makes them feel like they belong to the same scene, some of the sets of parallel lines diverge as they move away from the viewer but dont worry, proper convergence is something that comes with mileage as you continue doing these exercises in your warm-ups and move onto the 250 boxes challenge

overall, this is a solid submission and i think you understand the concepts well enough to continue, good work and good luck on the 250 box challenge, it'll help you with perspective immensely

• superimposed lines:

on one page the starting end ending points of the lines are cropped and the pages aren't numbered so its hard to tell if you've improved, but on some lines there is fraying on both sides, while fraying on the end is mostly fine, be sure to take some time to place your pen on the starting dot before executing the line

• ghosted lines:

some lines wobble a bit but most lines look pretty straight and confident,

• ghosted planes:

most lines look good, one thing i do want to point out is that you could have taken more advantage of the space you had and fit the planes more snuggly, its not a mistake but you get to do more of the exercise https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/15/example (the example homework demonstrates this nicely)

• tables of ellipses:

just want to point out that you could have used a ruler for the frame if you wanted to (although i do see that you have done that for the later frame exercises) some ellipses look uneven and dont seem to be touching anything but thats to be expected at the start, make sure to take alot of time to ghost and practice them in your warm-ups moving on (can't really tell if you've improved or not since the pages aren't numbered)

• funnels:

once again you could have used a ruler and something round for the funnels themselves if you wanted to

most ellipses look fairly aligned to the minor axis

• plotted perspective:

looks good, just make sure that the hatching lines touch the edges of each box

• rough perspective:

the line quality takes a hit, make sure to take time preparing your line when ghosting

• rotated boxes:

some boxes arent actually rotating, the ones at the very edges/corners, instead they're following the exact same vanishing points, https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/rotatedboxes/notrotating

• organic perspective:

the convergence is shallow and thats good

but i can only find 1 page linked in your homework of the 2 assigned

things you did right:

• varying the boxes that you draw

• using the ghosting method

• estimating the convergence generally got better as you went on

• a bit of line wight added to the silhouette of the boxes (more so on 150-250)

not many mistakes and the ones that happened early on deminished as you moved through the challenge

i think you can move onto lesson 2

it's alright, but be sure to include them in your warmups

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the boxes generally appear to get better as you went on,

there were some divergences but they appear less and less often as you moved on

a small thing i notice is that im not sure if you added line weight to the silhouette of each box, it's hard to tell

but mostly i think that you can move on

the form intersections are better now and less confusing, although i do want to point out that your hatching lines should have the same amount of effort put in as all other lines (planned, ghosted and executed with confidence) they look rushed, something to look out for as you move on

as for the organic contours, i only assigned 1 page of them, and you should only do the amount of work that is assigned because you cant be sure if you're doing them right, they are slightly better, but most of them aren't really hooking around the back (you should overshoot them as if they were to go slightly behind the form if that makes sense) (https://d15v304a6xpq4b.cloudfront.net/lesson_images/77f2ca1c.jpg) and be sure to align the angle of the curve to the minor axis! (the flow line) (https://d15v304a6xpq4b.cloudfront.net/lesson_images/4d7871e1.jpg) this is something you can practice in your warm-ups (as you'll be adding all of these exercises to your warm-up selection)

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arrows

X - some of the lines on the arrow heads look rushed, you should always ghost every line and execute with confidence

X - there doesn't seem to be any line weight added to the part of the arrow closer to the viewer, making it slightly confusing to figure out which part is behind and which is in front in some arrows

correct - all of the arrows compress and get smaller as they move farther back

organic forms

X - the degree of the ellipses/contours remains mostly the same (https://d15v304a6xpq4b.cloudfront.net/lesson_images/6822fd02.jpg,

https://imgur.com/rXLBxSg)

X - the contour curves are very shallow, they aren't hooking around on most sausages (https://d15v304a6xpq4b.cloudfront.net/lesson_images/77f2ca1c.jpg)

X - the contour curves are misaligned to the minor axis (the flow line) (https://d15v304a6xpq4b.cloudfront.net/lesson_images/4d7871e1.jpg) (although the ellipses seem to be fairly aligned)

correct - most of the ellipses touch the edges of the sausage

texture analysis

correct - drawing in cast shadows and not lines

correct - gradient is smooth

correct - no hatching or dotted lines

dissections

X - some textures appear really scribbly (especially the hairy one on the second page)

X - some textures have outlined forms instead of shadow shapes (especially the crocodile one on the first page)

correct - not afraid to break the silhouette

form intersections

• the point of this exercise is to make all of the forms look like they belong in the same scene, it's easier to do if 1.all of the forms have consistent, shallow perspective (some of your forms have dramatic foreshortening) and 2.if they are equilateral (some of your forms are long)

organic intersections

X - same as in the contour curves exercise, most curves aren't hooking around (https://d15v304a6xpq4b.cloudfront.net/lesson_images/77f2ca1c.jpg)

X - some of the cast shadows are small, they also dont follow the surface that the shadow is cast onto (https://d15v304a6xpq4b.cloudfront.net/lesson_images/516f8d4f.jpg)

• most stacks look fairly solid, but the 3'rd stack looks slightly unstable, it feels as if the sausages would quickly fall over

(i saved the critique and cant edit the revisions, i forgot to add, you should also focus on keeping the curves aligned to the minor axis of the organic forms and also make sure to vary the degree of the curve)