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    4:50 PM, Tuesday July 5th 2022

    I would say don't try and fix a line if you feel like you messed it up even. Also try and be a bit more fluid and confident when you do the organic forms with the shadows. Don't put anything on your spheres, just try and imagine how the forms intersect into it as it is. Texture is well done, as well as all the concepts that the exercises are trying to teach. Just work on making the line work cleaner and I would say you are more than able to keep going.

    Next Steps:

    1 page of organic intersections with more fluidity and confidence, then move on to lesson 3

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    5:50 PM, Saturday June 4th 2022

    I think I started understanding better this time around. Hopefully it shows here, if not then I'm okay with trying again

    6:11 PM, Saturday May 14th 2022

    I kept re-reading this critique and the lesson. I'm not sure If I'm applying the exact methods correctly. I understand their concepts, but I feel like I run into problems of certain textures and constructions where I just don't know how to apply certain instructions. Let me know, I don't care if I have to redo this 10 times.

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    7:17 PM, Friday March 25th 2022


    7:59 PM, Friday December 17th 2021

    arrows are a lot better you really got the perspective down pretty well for those. However, your lines on the form intersection are still wobbly I think you can get it down if you just keep practicing and make sure to take your time on doing the next lesson. Look at some other submissions that deal with the form intersections and pay attention to the lines (you can even look at mine if you like) and it's ok if you miss the line you're trying to connect together as long as they're solid, so you're good for now.

    Next Steps:

    keep warming up by doing some ghosted line and straight forms. also practice ellipses extensively.

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    1:53 PM, Wednesday December 15th 2021

    So, you got a few of the organic arrows to show perspective, but I think you should try to compress them more and show a bit more foreshortening. You also seem to be wobbly on the arrows as well as the form intersections. You should've had one page of just boxes and done some hatching to show faces. You're lines ae extremely wobbly on the Form intersections and all of your lines are very bulky which is basically showing that you're not ghosting lines and you're too scared of messing it up. I feel like you could've done better on the texture analysis the texture is very loose and not really clear. The stone and crumpled paper looks very similiar and the crab skin doesn't look very clear either. To be fair the texture dissections look pretty good, just make sure you are making the texture implicit. For example, the disco ball texture would we considered explicit and that's not what this course wants. The ice cream texture would be and example of implicit texture which is well done there. The organic intersections looks like they had better more confident line work which is good, but I think your shadows need a little better understanding. Make sure you read the instructions carefully and re-read them if need be. I think if you had an official critique they wouldn't let you move on without any additional steps. I suggest you really go over lesson one on linework and practice that for a while. Then you should do 2 pages of form intersections again and 1 page of the organic arrows and try to focus on the foreshortening and the linework maybe even do a couple pages on the side if you have to (that's what I had to do when trying to correct mine). Good luck!

    Next Steps:

    1 page of organic arrows

    2 pages of Form Intersections

    When finished, reply to this critique with your revisions.
    9:17 PM, Tuesday December 7th 2021

    Yeah, I honestly didn't feel like I did that well on this lesson when I looked over it. Thanks for being honest.

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    3:23 AM, Tuesday October 19th 2021

    The organic forms don't wrap around enough making them feel like just lines running across the form. The texture is very well done, I don't really know how to critique it because I haven't grasped it as well as you did there. I would say you're main priority is more confident lines because all the exercises have some wobbly line work. I would suggest doing the 1 page of the organic forms using more curved lines and 1 page of the form intersections. Try and really focus on the line work even if the lines are over or undershot.

    Next Steps:

    1 page of organic forms with lines

    1 page of form intersections

    When finished, reply to this critique with your revisions.
    12:16 AM, Monday October 11th 2021 Thanks for the critique! I did two pages because I realized the first redo was basically what you told me NOT to do. I made the second one bigger and tried to clean up the line work a bit more that time. Feel free to make me redo it if I'm still quite not getting it.

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