Joaz

Thanks a lot for the critique!

Regarding the foreshortening, I tried to do a lot more dramatic foreshortening for the later boxes because I didn't really have that in mind for the first many boxes, so I tried to compensate for that.

Regarding lineweight, this is a dumb excuse, but I feared that I was gonna mess up and muddy it too much. In hindsight this is dumb, because now is obviously the time to practice it.

Thank you again.

Hey. It seems you understand all the exercises with the exception of one. I'll go through the exercises one by one, try to give you an idea of something to keep in mind for the future, and then go more in-depth for the one I believe you misunderstood.

Lines

For superimposed lines it looks mostly fine. There are some expected mistakes, but overall I think you tried to keep your lines smooth. Try to remember not to correct yourself while you're drawing a line. Some of the lines start out the same place, then branch out, then come back to the place you intended it to end at, which is a sign of correcting yourself.

For ghosted lines it looks fine. There's a bit of wobble and stuff, but again, that's to be expected.

For ghosted planes I like that you tried different perspectives.

Ellipses

For tables of ellipses I think you did mostly fine. There's some inconsistency, which is to be expected. Maybe try to be more conscious of your ghosting.

For ellipses in planes it's pretty much the same. I think you stayed within the lines pretty well, but remember that you're to focus on smoothness over accuracy.

For funnels I think they look pretty good. For some of them it looks like you maybe drew the ellipse too many times?

Boxes

For plotted perspective I'm not sure if you used a ruler like you're supposed to, and there's a line or two you didn't extend.

For rough perspective, this is the one I believe you misunderstood. You're supposed to extend your lines to where they're going, not to the VP. Your vertical lines are also not perpendicular to the horizon.

For rotated boxes this is a tough one, but I think you did fine. Your boxes are bunched up nice and close to each other, but they're not rotated properly, which is to be expected. This really is a rough exercise, so don't worry about it.

For organic perspective I think your lines are starting to look more wobbly. Remember to focus on smoothness over accuracy. It doesn't matter if you miss the mark you made, or if you overshoot or undershoot, just focus on making the line smooth and confident.

I'm gonna request a revision for you to do rough perspective again. Reread the assignment page, and watch the video. Again, what I think you did wrong here was the extension of your lines, where instead of extending your lines in the direction they're going and ending them when they get to the horizon line, you just started at the front point of your box and then extended them to the vanishing point, regardless of whether your lines went in that direction or not. Read the instructions thoroughly and ask if you have any questions!

Thanks for the thorough critique! Here are the revisions https://imgur.com/a/d1QKxSv

For ghosted planes, I thought back to the basics of ghosting and drawing from the shoulders, and achieving smooth lines. I think I am and have been drawing from the shoulder, it's a little hard to tell sometimes, but I try to consciously focus on using my whole arm. When ghosting I tried to execute the mark without pause between the ghosting and the execution, this led to a line here or there being started late. It didn't seem to improve my smoothness, so I've gone back to taking as short a pause as possible to make sure I'm starting my line from the mark I placed.

For ellipses, I did forget to try different starting points and drawing counter clockwise. I'm left handed, so drawing an ellipse clockwise is what I naturally did when I started, and is what I'm comfortable with. I'll definitely try to draw ellipses in different ways to see if there might be a better way. It felt easier to do smooth ellipses, where I wasn't going completely off on the second rotation, when they were smaller. The bigger they were the more off I was, I felt like. Not sure if this is a big issue, or if it's just my inexperience.

For rough perspective, I started to really see the benefit of your advice of placing more marks. It can be hard to visualize what I'm intending to draw sometimes, so placing the marks, and then taking a step back to see if it seems right is definitely a big help.

For rotated boxes... the first time I tried this exercise I think one of my big mistakes was looking at the reference page on the lesson instructions way too much. I tried to mimic it instead of focusing on my own page and as a result it ended up as a big mess. After going through the instructions and video again, I also realized that the reference page's space between the boxes is a bit bigger than when Uncomfortable draws in the video, or in the step by step instructions pictures. So I tried to make the space between the boxes smaller than the first time, and instead of having a reference picture open the entire time, I tried to take a good look at it and then just focus on my own page. I think I did a little better at rotating, but the top boxes got a little squished and ugly, and I still found it very hard to rotate the corner boxes the way I wanted.

Thanks again!