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Now the submission commences. This is my first critique for lesson for so I don't have a template ready and will just crank this out.

Starting with your sausages they're good. It seems you understand 3-D space for organic forms like this and how to contour them. Going into your insects it stays same. You are strong at keeping with the sausage method and building the forms on top to complete the drawing. Seeing you stick with it, your insects start looking fairly three dimensional.

My main problems only lie with your mark making. You have a habit of going over lines when completely unnecessary in, what seems to be, attempts at correcting wobbly, broken, or inaccurate marks. Or just to make your work look more polished. This is devaluing our whole reason for using fine liner!! Just make your marks and realize your mistake to train yourself to be more careful in the future. If you just keep pushing anf forget the thoughts of this as a strong form we get very jotted and weakly built constructions. For example this here just looks like marks on a page. Its hard to tell what you're trying to convey from the form alone, and may be part of the causation for your heavy line-work to compensate. I want you to think more into the lines you make, but you're doing well. And I think you're ready for, if you haven't started yet that is, lesson 5. Yay.

Hello Its me! I totally forgot I said I would do this im sorry, but I'm here now and I'll go into much detail. Also, for future reference it is much easier if you just put everything under one link.

Starting off with your superimposed lines, it looks good. You're going back to the same point, drawing confident lines, and fraying is natural. There will be less and less as you go. Your ghosted lines are looking really straight and confident. There's good accuracy between the points as well in terms of going in the right direction. You just tend to over and undershoot; here and here respectively. Completely normal st this stage. Actually slightly above average in my opinion, but thats not whats important! You're doing what you're supposed to. Just keep working on these, and eventually you will get to landing right on the mark more of the time. It wont be every time but more often. You're keeping the same confidence with ghosted planes and lines are staying accurate. Seems you have better line control here actually.

Your Table of Ellipses are doing well, you're rounding them at least twice, and making sure to fit within the bounds, as well as getting that circular shape. Same for the ellipses in planes. The ellipses stay within the planes and are having a strong and confident form. Your funnels are done well. They stay symmetrical on both sides of the ellipse, and are confident. They also fit snug within the space.

Plotted perspective has nice understanding vanishing points. You also show nice line weight and overlap. In rough perspective you show a strong sense of understanding how you're supposed to trace back to the vanishing points. The rotated boxes are good. You got your full rotation and it seems you understand how boxes move in 3-D space. What happened to this step? I heavily suggest you follow all the material more closely! Your organic perspective has good rotation. There is solid change in your initial Y and change in perspective. You used overlap as well. Good job.

Awesome Job. You did pretty well, and it seems like you picked up the material pretty quick, but people would get to this stage eventually after a couple attempts of these exercises as warm ups so we don't fret if their attempts aren't that great as long as they follow instructions. Still, I expect you to do just that! Before every session of boxes I suggest you do warm-ups of your choice. It doesn't have to be a whole page just enough planes, ellipses, lines, superimposing or anything else we've worked on here that you feel you need to work on to get you in the mood for drawing those boxes. Good luck and I'll mark it complete!!!

Hello,

I'll be here to give some, hopefully useful, critique for your homework today.

Starting off with your superimposed lines,it looks like its going well enough. You're going back to the same point, drawing confident lines, and fraying is natural. Only problem im seeing is some major bending to these lines. Just try to put more thought into the direction and focus on getting straight to point B instead of the line you're making. Soon enough, you lines will probably straighten out with more practice. I think I see the same problem with the ghosted lines, but its not as prevalent. Still, your lines are confident for the most part, but there are ones that make it seem like you hesitated. Your accuracy is doing fairly well.You're also doing a bit of correcting lines, but I see it more in planes. You're seeming more confident with ghosting planes, and I see better accuracy. Though, theres a pattern of correction when you make a mistake. Don't do that! If you messed up a line, you just have to learn from the mistake and move onto the next. No going over it to trying to make a change to it, regardless of how horrible. Just realize you need to ultra-focus so it doesn't happen again. That is why we are using pen, and correcting your lines like that makes the use of pen for these lessons lose some of its meaning. We aren't making pretty pictures. We are practicing confidence, patience, and commitment. Every stroke is a decision you made and you should not try to go back on it.

Your Table of Ellipses are doing well, you're rounding them at least twice, as well as getting that circular shape. Although, there is a lot of space left to be used. The whole point is to try to make confident shapes that fit within the bounds, but shapes floating in space are little help. I recommend you practice this exercise more like this in the future to properly utilize your space given. Your funnels struggle in a few areas. When you don't even include a line of symmetry like this, the whole point of the exercise is lost. Here we are tying to improve our symmetry by bisecting the space straight down the middle. Without that, we are just doing more fitting ellipses in a space like the table of ellipses exercise. Most others are like this and do not have the line in the middle properly or circles made to fill. It is not as easy to rate your progress if you cannot achieve the steps in the lesson to start the exercise. For this exercise it seems you didn't make your set up properly for the most part sad to say. Besides everything stated previous, I believe you did very well in ellipses in planes.

Plotted perspective has nice understanding vanishing points. You seem hesitant to overlap on the horizon and had made a mistake costing you valuable space to be used here. We cannot be scared to overlap our boxes on the horizon like that. Many shapes youll see in perspective in the future in a real environment will have placement like that, so its better to go for it now. In rough perspective you show a strong sense of understanding how you're supposed to trace back to the vanishing points. The rotated boxes exercise is understandable very hard. I believe you made a good attempt to rotate your shapes. We just have to practice on pushing the bounds of rotation in space. Your organic perspective has good rotation. There is solid change in your initial Y and change in perspective. I noticed that you were trying to make the line go back and forth and it overcomplicated the exercise. These boxes here, its hard to say anything about them. I can say you understand perspective from distance, but doing the back and forth doesn't really give much because from this distance they're like dots. So just focus on bringing the composition closer. I guess this is a general art tip, but its better to focus on bringing the perspective were its easily visible. The last page's lines seemed a little rushed for you, and seemed like you were really ready to get this exercise over with.

Anyways, overall, you did a pretty good job. Some things, it felt like you were in a rush to get past, and barley reached for a bare minimum, and I'd say it did hurt the level you are at by the end of the exercises. Do some of these exercises for warm ups in the 250 box challenge, but do not rush that one. Make sure you're completing your readings and I heavily recommend the demo videos. I am glad to see your progress and look fore ward to seeing you complete your 250 boxes! I'll mark this complete!

Awesome, I think youre good for the 250 box challenge.

Hello I'll review your lesson one for today.

Starting off with your superimposed lines, it looks good. You're going back to the same point, drawing confident lines, and fraying is natural. Your ghosted lines are looking really straight and confident; not anything to worry about there. There's good accuracy between the points as well! The lines seem to stay pretty accurate and confident with your ghosted planes.

Your Table of Ellipses are doing well making sure to fit within the bounds, as well as getting that circular shape, but try to get into the habit making sure you round them at least two times completely. It was a problem you seemed to have fixed, but I'll mention this anyways. You want to make sure that you're making two full rounds to get maximum correction on the ellipse. Making a round and a third doesn't really show if you perfected the circle or not. For ellipses in planes, ellipses stay within the planes and are having a strong and confident form. Your funnels are done well. They stay symmetrical on both sides of the ellipse, and are confident. They also fit snug within the space.

Plotted perspective has nice understanding vanishing points. You also show nice line weight. You used a good amount of overlap too. In rough perspective you show a strong sense of understanding how you're supposed to trace back to the vanishing points. The rotated boxes are good. You got your full rotation and it seems you understand how boxes move in 3-D space. Except you forgot to do the boxes of the four corners. Your organic perspective has good rotation. There is solid change in your initial Y and change in perspective. You used overlap as well. THe line weight does seem a little scribbly though, and I also see attempts to fix broken lines. In quite a few areas it looks like you are attempting to fix some wobbly or inaccurate lines, and that is a bad habit to get into. It ruins a lot of the reason we use pen. If you make a mistake, commit to it!

Read below for revisions please and Ill mark you as complete!

Ok I think I see a better attempt at symmetry with these. The ellipses are a little wobbly. Thats ok though, ellipses are very hard.

BUT for the rotated boxes, you shouldn't have attempted it again. It was heavily implied you would mess up, and this sort of stuff would throw you for a loop, regardless of whats tripping you up. All that was asked was a valid attempt at the exercise and you would've been fine. You don't gain anything more from trying to perfect the submission. Usually people practice rotated boxes in warm ups a little while after the lesson. I understand where you're coming from, but at the end of the day it seems you decided to disregard part of the instructions, as well as repeat an exercise without being asked to do so.

I think for the most part you did great, and you'll show much improvement in the future. I'll make this as complete just keep in mind what I said!

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Hello I'll review your lesson one for today.

Starting off with your superimposed lines, it looks good. You're going back to the same point, drawing confident lines, and fraying is natural. Your ghosted lines are looking really straight and confident. Your line accuracy will progress. Just make sure you keep doing them as warm ups. You're keeping the same confidence with ghosted planes, if your lines are not connected or you mess up, try not to fix it. I saw you did it even if it is very minimal. It is a dangerous habit, and avoiding it pays off well.

Your Table of Ellipses are doing well, you're rounding them at least twice and making sure to fit within the bounds, as well as getting that circular shape. Try and see if you can get the rounds to stay down to at least two or three tho. Same for the ellipses in planes. This one actually seems to have rounds that are staying at three at most, so bonus points! Good job. Now try to get it down to two rounds if you can. It seems theres a big difference between your rounds two so maybe try to ghost a little more, but still, the ellipses stay within the planes and are having a strong and confident form. Your funnels are done ok. The symmetry on both sides of the ellipses are pretty lacking. Especially if you look at the ones in the corners, the line isnt even cutting through the minor axis of those ellipses, and it makes it sound as if you didn't have the minor axis line in mind while drawing them. They fit snuggly into the space, but overall it fails at symmetry along the minor axis. Upon further inspection particularly the top corner suffers because the top corner isn't bisected half-and-half in the space provided. You also have only done one page when the requirement is two.

Plotted perspective has nice overlap and looks seems you're understanding vanishing points. The only problem I see is for the back corner you tilt it. Draw it straight up if you can. I think this is due to the vanishing point being so clouded in ink, that you don't trace it back properly. Don't sweat that too much if that feels like the problem. In rough perspective you seem to be confused on how to trace back to the vanishing points of some of them. A lot of the boxes don't seem drawn understanding how the vanishing points relate. Mainly the ones that aren't on the horizon. All four lines should be going back to that vanishing point. I could explain this in more detail but I think it would be more help for you to look back at your plotted perspective and see how the boxes trace back to the vanishing point when on and off the horizon. The rotated boxes are really good. Hopefully this was a first attempt. You got your full rotation and it seems you understand how boxes move in 3-D space if so. You dont even have the four boxes at the corners that are supposed to help remind you to go the full 90 degrees. This makes me think of one of two things: You just didn't do the initial setup that was presented. If this is not your first attempt I hope it is because someone had told you you did the exercise incorrectly. Your organic perspective has good rotation. There is solid change in your initial Y and change in perspective. Your boxes are just tending to diverge, but when you get to the box challenge you'll improve.

I think you did really good, but look at next steps below, so I can mark you as complete!

Hello I'll review your lesson one for today.

Starting off with your superimposed lines, it looks good. You're going back to the same point, drawing confident lines, and fraying is natural. It looks like you overlapped and superimposed your ghosted lines. The lines were supposed to be just connecting 2 plotted points, not going over the same line. I see you plotted points and everything, but the superimposing makes it hard to see if you actually got to the point you were aiming for an a certain attempt. It just looks like a pile of lines next to a bunch of dots and I cant really tell what is for what. Especially with the area that is completely frayed. I think you understand how the exercise works, but for the sake of critique it is hard to judge how well you did. You're still keeping confidence with ghosted planes and lines are accurate though.

Your Table of Ellipses are doing well, you're rounding them twice and making sure to fit within the bounds, as well as getting that circular shape. Same for the ellipses in planes. The ellipses stay within the planes and are having a strong and confident form. Your funnels are done well. They stay symmetrical on both sides of the ellipse, and are confident. They also fit snug within the space. Although, for some it is hard to judge because theyre so compact and skinny near the middle.

Plotted perspective has nice overlap and looks seems you're understanding vanishing points. In rough perspective you show a strong sense of understanding how you're supposed to trace back to the vanishing points. I think the line weight feels a little much though. The rotated boxes are good. You got your full rotation and it seems you understand how boxes move in 3-D space. Your organic perspective has good rotation. There is solid change in your initial Y and change in perspective. You used overlap as well. Good job.

I had a little problem with the plotted perspective at first, but I'll let it slide, because I think you're able to understand how line plotting works from the other assignments. I think you did great and are ready to move onto the 250 box challenge!

I think one rotated boxes will be fine just to show you understand.