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Hi Coolrock, thank you for your feedback!

I definitely agree with you about the tomato plant drawing being stiff. Sometimes I get too caught up in trying to get the perspective right that I neglect my linework. Will keep this and your other tips in mind for the next lesson.

Thanks again and good luck with lesson 4!

Charming character design and good inkwork!

Thanks a lot!

Thank you! The boxes have come in handy for this one :p

Big thank you for the kind words!

Thank you for the kind comment!

Glad my critique was useful to you.

Hi Meapro! I'll be giving feedback for your lesson 2 homework. Here and there I've included links to text sections on the website, please have a look at those as well.

Now onto the critique:

Thinking in 3D

Your organic arrows flow nicely accross the page and have clean linework on the edges. I did notice that your lines become more timid when adding lineweight. Remember to put confidence over accuracy, your lines might not complete overlap at first when using dynamic strokes, but this will improve with milage.

For the hatching lines do make sure that these follow the right direction. (see this example: https://drawabox.com/lesson/2/4/step4). Adding shading, hatching or details that don't align with the surface area of your construction will flatten out the drawing.

I'd also recommend to push your perspective more. Let the arrows grow larger and wider as they travel towards you and thinner + more compressed as the arrows moves away. (see https://drawabox.com/lesson/2/4/step2)

The organic forms exercise was completed well. You kept your forms simple and aligned the contour ellipses and curves correctly to the centre line. On the first page, some ellipses look a bit uneven. Ghosting and experimenting with drawing speeds may help with making smoother marks. Don't be afraid to overlap your ellipses more so you can create more dynamic/dramatic orientations (see https://drawabox.com/lesson/2/5/ellipses). No remarks on the contour curves, good job.

Texture and detail

You did great on the texture analysis exercise. Your work shows that you took your time to observe your reference and carefully recreate it using cast shadows. I do have one remark regarding the black bars in the 3rd column of the page. Make sure you create a gradual transition from dark to light across the rectangle. The shadows for the crumpled paper and ice cream texture don't blend seamlessly into the black bar. (see https://drawabox.com/lesson/2/6/step5)

For the dissection again you made good use of cast shadows to imply textural forms and shifting lighting. Two remarks for this one: first try to rely less on outlining forms (f. ex. turtle shell & fish scale texture). Leave your outlines open and focus on the cast shadows (see https://drawabox.com/lesson/2/6/drawingforms). Second, don't draw local/surface color (salmon texture). Only observe the forms present in your reference.

Construction

Moving on the the form intersections. You did well on this challenging exercise. The forms look solid and feel like they belong in the same space. The intersection points are convincing and you made clever use of hatching to make these areas stand out. No remarks for this one, thumbs up.

Lasty, the organic intersections. You kept the sausage forms simple and evenly shaped which makes them easier to work with and the forms are stacked perpendicular to form a stable whole. The contour curves are correctly aligned to centre line but have no/minimal degree changes. Remember that as the form turns in space it will either turn towards you and make the contour ellipse appear wider, or it wil turn away making the ellipse thinner. Also try to think more on how gravity affects the forms when they are stacked on eachother. The form being placed on top should wrap around the one below, following its contours. (see https://drawabox.com/lesson/2/9/step3)

Overall this is solid submission. You've shown you have a good grasp on the concepts of lesson 2.

Hi LuminusRed, first of all I'd like to thank you for your detailed critique!

I wouldn't have spotted these mistakes by myself and appreciate that you clarified them like the organic intersections exercise.

This link will take you to the revisions:

https://imgur.com/a/oYgYwtK

Kind regards

Hi Gababa, congratulations on completing lesson 1! I'll be taking a look at your work.

Lines:

Super imposed lines:

Your lines look smooth & confidently executed, with no fraying at the start of the line. This shows that you took the time to carfully plan and make your marks. I only saw a bit of wobbling for the short lines on the second page and on the curves. Remember to put confidence first when practising these in the future. Your longer lines tend to have a small arch, but there's a visible improvement form page one to two. Try to arch your lines in the opposite direction if you encounter this again to counteract the curving.

Ghosted lines & ghosted planes exercices are good. Your lines look smooth and your accuracy improved over the course of the excercices.

Ellipses:

Tables of ellipses & ellipses in planes:

Your ellipses are nicely drawn. You've drawn through them and made efforts to fit them snugly in the tables/planes. But some ellipses are a little deformed, meaning that they are not symmetrical if you devide them in to two halves with the minor axis. Maybe try to experiment a bit with the speed at which you draw them. Some people find it easier to draw even ellipses when drawing a bit slower, and others when they execute their marks faster. Also don't forget to ghost your ellipses a couple of times first before drawing.

You did a good job with the funnels as well. I have the same remark for this exercise as for the previous two exercices. Also be mindful the keep the line representing the minor axis (the long horizontal one) in the middle of your ellipses, placing it so your ellipse is devided into two equal/symmetrical halves. Ellipses & the concept of the minor axis will return in lesson 2, so it's a good thing to keep in mind.

Boxes:

For the first frame of the plotted perspective, one box (the outer left one) is drawn outside of the two vanishing points. This can make it appear distorted. See this link for more info about distortion with two point perspective: https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/10/distortion

The other boxes look great, they have clean linework and fall nicely in between the vanishing points.

The rough perspective exercice is completed well. Your depth lines are extended correctly and the convergences improved from the first page to the second. On page one, some of your width lines aren't parallel and a few height lines aren't perpendicular the the horizon line. But I see you corrected this on page two, good job.

Rotated boxes looks solid, they feel 3D and have rotation. Don't worry about this exercise. Its purpose is just to introduce you to how the concergences of a box change as the vanishing points slide across the horizon line. You'll get plenty of practice with convergence with the 250 box challenge later.

Your organic perspective pages are good. The boxes flow well accross the frame and you've varied the oriëntations of your forms.

Overall this is a really solid submission. You've shown you have a good grasp on the concepts of lesson 1.