Hello, thank you so much for your comment. Here is my revision. Hopefully it is now more up to par.
https://drive.google.com/file/d/1VaC8IqHjXi0P8N9JEspxsJW0JT8WsyAp/view?usp=drivesdk
Thank you so much again for the detailed critique. I think through this exercise, I have gotten a much better grasp of organic form intersections, and I feel like this revision looks quite better than what I had originally. Please do let me know if this will be sufficient, and again thank you for your help!
Hello, thank you so much for your critique. Based on your feedback, in these revisions, I have attempted to be more conscious of these following points:
To not use a 2nd line pass
To add contour lines to joints of limbs
To not cut back on form silhouettes, and focus more on doing additive construction
To avoid implying details with just a single line (antenna etc)
To add additional 3d forms with more solid information (like contour lines/wrapping around original form)
To ignore flat colour patterns.
Please let me know if these sufficiently summed up the points I needed to improve on, and whether the correction sufficiently addressed these points of concern.
Thank you so much!
Thank you for your reply! Here's my revision for the lesson. Please do let me know whether this would be sufficient, and what other areas I should focus on improving.
On that note too, since for the purpose of Drawabox, textures are made from cast shadow, may I ask for flat textures like for example butterfly wing pattern, should I draw that just as a pattern as regular with black and white, or is there anything I should pay attention there too?
Thank you so much for the thorough, constructive and helpful response. Before I start work on my plant constructions (after I finished going over the leaves and branches), there are some questions I'd like to ask, and I would love it if you can give me your perspective.
For my cactus, may I ask what do you mean by leaving my form open-ended? I observed the cactus to be constructed from roughly diamond shapes pieced together - should I have drawn the center out instead? I was a bit iffy about that since I'm not sure where exactly I should have placed the shape outlines, ending up only placing a small light bit at the start.
For the palm tree, I'll admit I skipped a lot of steps there since palm trees are both big as is, and the leaves are also tiny as well, so constructing everything feels like such an undertaking. May I ask for the future, what technique should I look into for drawing trees, as well as plants with a lot of tiny details, like palm trees, pines and the like?
And finally regarding texture, my mindset to it while working on this exercise has been to capture anything I can see, but instead of framing it like that, should I instead as you mentioned try to frame it as a question of "If I move my hand over it, what it would feel like" ? And from there, deciding whether a detail actually would be noticable enough to be included in the implicit depiction?
Again, thank you so much for your insightful critique, and I hope to hear from you soon.
Thank you so much for the detailed wall of text! From what I understand, texture is just a construction of various organic forms, and the idea of drawing cast shadow is to imply the existence of these forms.
After which comes the decision on which shadows should you include, or which shadows will be enough for the implication, and which shadows will make the image muddier more than it helps with the implication.
I'll definitely come back to this message in the future whenever I want to understand texture more thoroughly. Again, thank you so much for your time!
Hello,
Thank you so much for the in-depth critique! Below is my additional submission of one page of the organic intersection exercise.
Looking forward to hearing from you soon!
And regarding the texture question, I was asking more in terms of shadow coloring. In reference pictures, forms cast shadows, but depending on the light source's positioning, some shadows are darker than others. I find it quite difficult to capture grey, or lighter shadows, with the given tool.
Naturally I feel like cross-hatching would be the solution, but obviously since we don't want to use cross-hatching here, I was wondering whether I was missing anything.
Thank you so so much for such a detailed critique! Going into the 250 boxes challenge, I'll remember to use my shoulder and the ghosting method to draw both the primary lines and the single line weights too. For future lessons, I'll remember to focus on accuracy of spheres during warmups as well. Hope you have a nice day!
These are what I use when doing these exercises. They usually run somewhere in the middle of the price/quality range, and are often sold in sets of different line weights - remember that for the Drawabox lessons, we only really use the 0.5s, so try and find sets that sell only one size.
Alternatively, if at all possible, going to an art supply store and buying the pens in person is often better because they'll generally sell them individually and allow you to test them out before you buy (to weed out any duds).
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