HootyHoo

Glad you found it useful, hope you have a great week too.

I agree with Maxxburn, but given that your rough perspectives are not perfect (and they shouldn't be at this point), I think it is important to complete the exercise as prescribed, with 6 total scenes - right now you have 2 completed. Here's the example provided: https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/roughperspective

Lines

Superimposed Lines: All lines have a tight originating bundle that only frays at the end. I like that you made a lot of long lines.

Ghosted Lines: Minimal wobbles, but a lot of them are arcing. I still have difficulty distinguishing between when I am drawing from the elbow and shoulder when lines are at this medium length. My understanding is arcing tends to occur more often when drawing from the elbow instead of the shoulder. I also wonder how quickly you are drawing your lines given how the weight of the ink reduces pretty dramatically; after watching a few videos of people I discoered I was drawing my lines a little too fast as a substitution for confidence.

Ghosted Planes: Nice big planes of varying angles. When I did this I used ghosting circles for the vertical and horizontal lines across the planes as well as the corners.

Ellipses

Ellipse tables: Nice job staying within the bounds. I would suggest a little more variety in degree and minor axis orientation, a lot of them are fairly similar circles.

Ghosted planes with elipses: These are all pretty nice, keeping yrou elipses enscribed within the planes. Ellipses are drawn confidently and 2-3x as recommended.

Funnels: Ellipses are generally split symetrically, and are, with a few exceptions, kept within the bounds of the funnel.

Boxes

Plotted Perspective: Rear corner line looks vertical in your boxes except for the top right two in the lowest panel, nice job.

Rough Perspective: Vertical lines are perpendicular to horizon and horizontal lines are parallel, nice job. Some wobbles present on the first page that appear to smooth at on the second page. Since you don't overshoot or undershoot on any of your lines, this may be due to focusing too much on hitting your points and sacrificing line confidence.

Rotated boxes: 25 boxes, you completed it! (I only did 21, haha). Boxes could have been a little closer to each other, which helps with drawing adjacent boxes since I believe adjacent lines are parallel. Boxes definately need to be rotated more, there is little difference in rotation between your 2nd and 3rd tier boxes in a lot of cases - but I believe this is a common mistake so no biggie.

Organic Perspectives: You really hit this one out of the park. Distant boxes are have minimal line weight (teach me!), lines are confident, perspective is good, boxes are incrementally bigger/smaller and clearly flow along your line and emphasis added appropriately to overlapping lines. I don't know how strictly we are supposed to do 3 panels per page, but given the overall quality and quantity of this exercise I think you follow the spirit of the exercise.

Overall this is a very nice job, you clearly took your time and were thoughtful with all exercises.

(Full disclosure: This is my first time critiquing, and I've only just finished lesson 1 today; so keep that in mind!)

Lines

• Superimposed Lines: These all appear confident with a tight originating bundle that only frays at the end. I can't see any wobbles, good job.

• Ghosted Lines: These all look fairly confident and accurate, with ghosting beginning and ending points used for all lines.

• Ghosted Planes: A few wobbles here and there, your lines are very accurate but I wonder if you are sacrificing some confident straight lines to land precisely on your target?

Ellipses

• Ellipse tables: You do a very good job of just barely kissing one elipse to its neighbor, but quite a few go out-of-bouds of their container box, usually on the top line. They are drawn confidently and you drew quite a variety of elipses.

• Ghosted planes with elipses: You do a better job here keeping the elipses within the planes, and while there are some wobbles here or there I think this is a good job

• Funnels: Ellipses are generally split symetrically, they do not appear to be as confidently drawn as your table of ellipses, with more wobbles.

Boxes

• Plotted Perspective: This looks really well done to me.

• Rough Perspective: Vertical lines are perpendicular to horizon and horizontal lines are parallel, nice job. Your corrected lines are easy to see and generally on target, with a few oddballs here or there. When the boxes got far away from the vanishing point but had a very narrow angle towards it, often had the most difficult time in judging those angles. I like that you attempted a lot of big boxes in this exercise.

• Rotated boxes: Your boxe row that goes vertically up the page don't rotate as much as the horizontal row. The corners of your boxes are all kept very close together per the instructions which is good.

• Organic Perspectives: Something I struggled with too was keeping the line weight light for the small and distant boxes. For whatever reason my fineliner likes to drop a lot more ink on my tight short lines, so my lineweight was typically the opposite of what it should have been - the small distant boxes were heavy and dark and the big boxes were light and faint. Boxes have decent perspectives, and I really wanted to commend that big box in the second to last panel, it is really amazing. I think you have a good variety of boxes with different rotations and angles.

I think you did an excellent job overall and made a clear and thoughtul attempt to follow the instructions as they were written. The only thing that stood out to me is that in general you may be focusing a little too much on accuracy of a line ending precisely at a point, and this is leading to some wobbles that don't need to be there. Thanks for baring with me on my first critique and I hope it was somewhat helpful.