Groksar

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    6:49 PM, Monday December 9th 2024

    Hello. Good job with finishing lesson 2. Probably the hardest lesson I have encountered, especially textures. I will try to review your work as objective and close to the lesson as i can, but consider that I myself finished it not long ago. I will be making decisions based upon how you followed the lesson, general rules and whether you got the purpose of the exercise. And please forgive me if I make a grammatical error, English isn't my native language

    Arrows Lines are smooth and confident, accuracy will come with mileage. Generally speaking, you did perspective well, but there are some issues with some of your arrows. First, some arrows do not align with with the flow and position of the tape behind it, then sometimes tapes bulge or narrow inconsistently and lastly, not all of the arrows follow perspective. These issues do not break the main purpose of this exercise. I myself did struggle a little to make them look right and i think it is a good exercise, even if it looks kind of simple at first. You should consider this exercise during your warm-ups, just like any other.

    Organic forms with contours Linework is good, you did your ellipses two times as you should. Mostly they are well aligned. You should really change degrees of each ellipse next time and consider the space in which this ellipse exist. It is actually explained in the lesson here and here. Degree represents orientation of a "slice" of that sausage in space. More about it here. Overall, I think these issues did not stay in the way of understanding the purpose of the exercise

    Textures This one was hard for me and took some time for sure. You focus on outlines and forms way too much. When you see a texture you should ask yourself what makes it look that way. You should be drawing shadows that cast specific elements of the texture and focus more on the implied forms. Probably you tried to draw whole texture all at once, relying entirely on your memory rather than observation. I think you should reread Contour Lines, Texture and Construction part of lesson. But really don't stress too much about it, as it should be just an introduction to the very important concept.

    Form Intersections Forms look solid, no questions arise about your confidence in strokes. As for intersections themselves i think you did good, it looks believable. The exercise itself was meant help you develop understanding of 3D space and relation of each object to each other.

    Organic intersections I think everything is good about it. Everything looks believable. Some forms are probably too complex, as some of them taper or stretch thin. The thing you might want to work on later might be lineweight as some parts does not look separate from each other. Use line weight to emphasize certain lines over others

    I think you are ready for lesson 3. Don't forget about texture exercises later on, even if they seem really hard. Good luck!

    Next Steps:

    Keep practicing previous exercises as warm ups and move on to lesson 3

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    4:39 PM, Sunday October 1st 2023

    Hello and congratulations on finishing the first lesson! Before i start i should say that i finished lesson 1 ~1 month ago, so my critique may not be accurate or even good. However, i've read the lessons thoroughly and i have seen some other student critiques. Also please forgive me if i may make a mistake in grammar, english is my second language. And finally, please, use imgur next time. It is more comfortable to use when criticizing someones work.

    Lines

    Superimposed Lines You did good, lines are confident, smooth and consistent. Which is already enough for this exercise. However, i noticed some fraying on both sides and also arching especially on long ones. Fraying on one end is ok, practice will smooth that out, but fraying in the beginning can tell that you didnt take time to prepare before leaving a mark. Arcing, however, can happen when you aren't fully using your shoulder pivot. Try to do what Uncomfortable said: arch your lines in the opposite direction. This is something you would get over time however, with practice

    Ghosted Lines Good job. 1 repeating line in the corner but that's ok. Just remember that the second your pen touches the page you should accept it as it is.

    Ghosted Planes I think all good, you nailed it. Some of the planes miss certain lines. But why 3 pages though? Dont grind and don't rush. You will improve your skills with practice. In some of your drawings there are repeating lines.

    Ellipses

    Tables of Ellipses Ellipses are consistent and smooth. Some of them overlap, but you will get rid of it with more practice. Don't forget to always set a goal for the ellipse you're about to draw. The only thing i noticed is that you draw more than 3 times some of them, which you shouldn't do. But overall good.

    Ellipses in Planes Everything is drawn confident, ellipses are ellipses. But some planes lacks ellipses and some of them were drawn more than 3 times.

    Funnels Ellipses fit snugly within set space. Some of them aren't aligned right but they aren't slanted and generally they are all good.

    Boxes

    Plotted Perspective Seems you didnt follow what was written in the exercise. First of all you need to use ruler, then you have to draw 3 frames on one page.

    Rough Perspective Boxes are drawn good, no questions about it. Lines aren't exactly accurate but thats alright, it will come with practice. However, you didn't follow the exercise correctly. You had to draw 3 frames on 1 page. Again, you repeat some of the lines and you painted some of the sides red. Don't deviate from what was assigned

    Rotated Boxes The hardest exercise that i have encountered. The fact that you finished it is already enough in my opinion. Boxes are kept together and lines are confident. But it have some problems that you should know about: some sides aren't rotating and some boxes weren't drawn through. Dont forget about this exercise in the future and definitely do 250 box challenge after this one.

    Organic Perspective You didn't follow the exercise correctly. You had to do frames just as with plotted perspective exercise. 1 page isn't finished and the 2 one is quite alright but quality isnt good enough to see it all

    Conclusion Your lines are confident, ellipses are quite good. But it seems to me that you rush alot while going through exercises, you need to pay more attention to them. Dont repeat your lines, leave them as they are no matter how they actually came out. Dont forget your warm ups and 50% rule. And keep on going. It isn't the strongest species that survive in nature, it is those who can adapt.

    Next Steps:

    Do plotted, rough and organic perspective once again.

    When finished, reply to this critique with your revisions.
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    3:58 AM, Wednesday September 27th 2023

    I cant open your work since i don't have an access

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