Gran

Hey there, im Gran and i'll be critiquing your lesson 2 homework. congrats on making it this far, It's not an easy task and requires quite a bit of dedication! Now onto your homework:

Organic Arrows:

Your linework on the arrows is looking smooth. There is no stretching or pinching in your arrows, which helps reinforce their solidity. One thing I want to point out is that as the arrow moves further away from the viewer, it not only gets smaller. but the space between each crest gets smaller as well. Link

Also, try adding lineweight where there is overlap, to show which side is in front. Link You don't have to make it too thick, just a little bit subtle lineweight does the trick.

Organic ellipses and contours

This section is looking nicely done, the sausages are simple, which is really important to keep them looking solid and not look flabby. The ellipse contours snugly fit inside the sausage, and their degree is varying as well. Contours are also hooking nicely.

Texture analysis

You've done a good job on this section as well, though maybe you can try pushing the gradient further by making darks stronger and the lights lighter. This isn't wholly required, and your homework is fine as is, but it's a good idea to see how farther you can really push your textures.

Organic Disections

Well done on studying your textures and applying their cast shadows. A lot of people tend to slip back into drawing their outlines. I have a few points to make on this sections:

• Brick does not count as a texture. While you have done quite a well job on drawing it, It is ultimately a pattern. The ture ON the bricks however, does count as a texture i.e the holes and pocks on the brick itself.

• some of your textures are flattening out, and are not wrapping around the sausage pieces. Link This is a common mistakes many students make at first when doing this exercise as they're focusing a lot on conveying the texture, and the idea that they must convey this texture on a rounded surface escapes them. I see this on your fishscales.strawberry, and grid scale pattern. You have, however, converyed the rounded texture on your raspberry one. When your texture approaches the edges, if it an elliptical one, slant the ellipse (make it thinner, instead of a more rounded circle) to give the illusion of a curved surface.

• A few of your sausages are missing texture. these are lost oppotunities for more study. If you left these because you were getting tired, stop, take a break, and then come back to thes exercise. It's also possible that you may have spent the entirity of your time studying the testure (Which is all too common) and did not make any marks. You can always come back tommorow, whenever you have the time to do so. Try not to leave anything undone next time, sometimes it's simply not feasible to do a whole page in one session, especially when it comes to textures.

Form Intersections

Your form intersections are looking pretty good, when you practice these as warmups later on, try not to use a different coloured pen to mark your intersections. This will train your brain to see through, even when there are a lot of marks on the page. As for your self critique on page two, you're correct, due to the rotation of the boxes, such an tersection is not possible. You could instead and made it similar, or maybe even a bigger of an intersection as you did with the middle box the box adjacent to it.

Organic intersections

While the second page of your organic intersections are pretty solid, your first page has some mistakes i'd like to point out. First of all, the overlapping sausages seem like they're about to fall over. Try curling them around one another, make them really hug one another, this will balance them. As for your own self-critique on the page, you're right, though if you had slumped the midsection of the sausage on the main one, it would have helped make it look believable. Look at this image, Note how the sausage aren't as the same as you drew in contour/ellipse homework? This is because that now, you have to make them fit together cohesively and make them really interact with one another. While your homework isn't exactly wrong, but doing the following step I have listed will really make them look better.

That's all I have to say. Don't be afraid to ask questions or if you'd like any clarifications. :)

Thank you for critiquing my lesson 1 work! It's most appreciated, as a lot of people usually don't. Thank you for your time.

Thankyou so much!! You helped clear any doubts I had regarding boxes, I really appreciate your critque. I'll try to practice adding line weight, and avoid redoing lines, it really does make stuff messier. Thank again!