5:37 PM, Sunday June 28th 2020
Hi Delphine,
Here is my critique for you.
First off, your exercise in ghosted lines looks very well done, the lines are straight and are hitting the mark most of the time which would suggest you are drawing at a good pace while still having accuracy. Similarly, for the superimposed lines and ghosted planes you are drawing at a good pace and accuracy. There isn’t much to recommend here except to keep this up in future lessons and the 250 box challenge.
You’ve put a lot of work into the ellipse section, which is excellent. You are concentrating on where the ellipses are going to be and for the most part hitting the mark. One thing I do see is that there are times where you don’t quite get the right position and miss or overshoot some of the boundaries. What I would recommend in the future when drawing ellipses is to make sure you draw through them, what I mean by this is going around each ellipse 2 or 3 times before you lift your pen. This will give your arm a chance to familiarise itself with what it’s trying to draw on the first pass and improve on the second or third. Uncomfortable mentions this explicitly, for example in Tables of Ellipses exercise page.
For the box exercises, your plotted, rough, and organic perspective exercises look good. In the rough and organic perspective exercises, some lines seem wobbly and some have been corrected. For the wobbly lines make sure the paper is at a comfortable angle for your hand and that you ghost your lines and draw at a good pace as you did with the line exercises.
For the rotated boxes, you do a great job at keeping the boxes together and drawing through them. One thing I did notice is that the outer middle boxes do not seem as rotated as they should be, as if the vanishing point isn’t in the centre. To fix this I would recommend considering where the vanishing point is for every line and prioritising drawing the line towards the vanishing point over having the line match with the other lines.
All in all, you’ve done a great job with the first lesson and you are definitely ready to move on to the 250 box challenge. Keep it up!
All the best,
FlyingMoose
Next Steps:
Move on to the 250 box challenge and remember to draw through your ellipses.
