FlippytheTrier

Way to power through the 250 boxes! Overall, they look good. You have confident lines that converge pretty well through the whole set.

One thing I'll note that's not a mistake per se, but rather a tendency, is that many of your boxes have convergences that are very close to the box. That is, they're dramatically foreshortened. This applies most often when your object is either very close to you, or very large. A few of your boxes have more subtle convergences where the lines would meet "off page," like box 145. This applies when your object is smaller, or farther away.

My question is, do you have a feel for how to control convergence--whether it's dramatic or not? If you feel like the amount of convergence you put in is intentional, then that's just fine. If it feels more unintentional, or you are less confident in making "subtly foreshortened" boxes, then you may want to try 10 or so boxes where the lines would converge off page. (Use this as a warm up exercise a few times.) You could even try a few with a ruler and a second attached page at first, to see what angles work best. (I hate to say "hey, draw more boxes" when you've just finished 250, but when you recover a bit, this might be good to do in a warm up at some point. Again though, you have a better feeling for whether you might need to try this or not.)

Other than that, nice work, and congrats on getting through that beast of a challenge!

Hey there! Great work on your Lesson 1.

Superimposed Lines: Continue working on making sure you start at the same point. On many of your lines, you have fraying on both sides. The goal is to be careful such that the viewer can tell which side is the beginning side. That can still be distinguished, and it can be improved upon. One thing I find that helps is to put the pen down right where I start.

Ghosted Lines: Great work on this exercise. There are a couple of lines that curve unintentionally (not counting the curves at the bottom), so make sure to still make confident strokes, even if it might miss the point. The primary goal is still confidence, and then you can focus on accuracy.

Ghosted Planes: Similar to ghosted lines, great work! Continue being confident in your strokes

Ellipses in Planes: The ellipses looks really nice. I can tell that you drew through them, so keep that up. There are a couple that cave into themselves, so still be confident in how you are drawing them. If you need to, ghost the ellipse before you draw it.

Table of Ellipses: Great job on varying the sizes and orientations of the ellipses. This is key in the future for when you want to make different figures. There is one panel that has floating ellipses, so I just want to remind you to make sure they touch the confines of the cell they are in.

Funnels: Great work on this! The ellipses were drawn through, and you did excellently on making sure to use different degrees.

Plotted Perspective: You did an excellent job here, too. It looks like you grasped the concept of two-point perspective well.

Rough Perspective: It looks like you got better at aiming for the vanishing point, so great work on that. Make sure to continue to be confident in your strokes, even if you feel like they aren't hitting where you want them to hit. There are several lines that are wobbly, so confidence will help them look more steady.

Rotated Boxes: This is a tough exercise, and you excelled at it. Good on you for drawing through your boxes. Continue making confident strokes.

Organic Perspective: You did well in varying the sizes of the boxes, as well as decreasing the sizes to portray perspective well. In future warm-ups, I challenge you to incorporate more overlapping boxes. I see a couple of instances, but doing it more (especially in the beginning boxes) can sell the perspective even more.

Overall, nicely done. Continue working on confident strokes. You are free to move on to Lesson 2.

Hello! Overall you've done a good attempt, but the boxes have some issues:

The linework overall is pretty good and you've done a great job drawing lines cleanly with the ghosting method.

The main issue I could see is that sometimes your boxes have divergences. Boxes do have 3 sets of 4 lines, and these each set of lines converges together. The problem is that on some boxes all lines converge, but on others they don't, so I'm a bit worried you aren't understanding the concepts fully. Here are two examples.

If you have trouble making all lines converge, try following this tutorial. That being said, first I want to make sure if you know which lines are correct and which aren't so if you still have the pages of the boxes, I want you to circle the lines that should converge but that are diverging on the last 10 pages or so, just like I marked the ones on the example. Good luck and keep up the good work!

Hello I’ll be handling the critique for your lesson 3 homework.

Organic Arrows

-Starting with the organic arrows you are doing some good attempts at the perspective of the ribbon and you’ve also drawn your marks with confidence. It seems that you are both aware of how the arrow gets wider as it moves closer to the viewer, and the fact that the negative space between the zigzagging sections of the ribbon decreases as it moves further away. I don’t really have anything to call out here so let’s move on to the next section.

Branches

-Moving on to the branches I think that you may have not followed the instructions as best as you could have.

• First of all remember that you should extend each segment fully halfway to the next ellipse. RIght now it seems that you are drawing each edge of the branch in one go rather than dividing it into segments. This causes you to have some gaps where the edges are not touching the ellipses.

• Once you’ve drawn those edges you can use them as a sort of a “runway” to guide your next stroke, by overlapping them a good bit, this will ehlp ou to achieve a smoother transition. Here is a diagram that illustrates these past two points https://d15v304a6xpq4b.cloudfront.net/lesson_images/18463269.png .

-And lastly remember that the ellipses should shift degrees as they move through space, this concept was explained in lesson 1 ellipses section so go andd check it out if you need a reminder.

Leaves

-Moving on to the leaves you are doing a good job with the first two steps, that is drawing the flow line and the edges for the silhouette. But you are skipping one important step and that is drawing the edge details, the only optional step is to add texture. So unfortunately I don’t have too much to critique here.

Plants

-Moving on to the plant constructions you are moving in the right direction and overall this is a good start but we do need to keep working on some things, so let’s see what those are.

Now that we are getting into constructional drawing is important to keep in mind that we should do our best to break our subjects into their more primitive elements without getting too caught up with one particular aspect or detail of it.That means bulding our drawing one step at a time, making a lot of desicions and smaller moves rather than trying to capture many things at once

-Also before continuing on further I did notice that you included many demos for your plants, and they constitute more than half of them which is against the instructions, they clearly state that they should consitute less than half. I’m not going to hold you back just for that one detail but I do want to stress how important it is to read the instructions carefully.

-The first thing I want to call out is the way you have drawn the leaves in the potato plant demo, it seems that you have not followed the steps laid out in the leaves exercise, right now you are just drawing the flow line but then instead of drawing the edges and then adding the edge details it seems that you are trying to do both at the same time. Which goes against what we were talking about at the beginning of this section, so remember to alway take things one step at a time rather than trying to capture many things at once.

However it seems that you are actually following this process correctly on your orchid, anyways do keep it mind in the future.

-Another important issue to call out is leaving gaps. One way this can happen is when the flow line of one petal or leaf doesn’t meet at the tip with its edges like on your daisy demo and another way it can happen is when you lay down an ellipse as a foot print for how the flow lines should be arranged but at the end those lines don’t touch it.

For example, when you start a flower with an ellipse to establish how far out the petals will reach, the flow lines you then draw for each petal should stop at the perimeter of that ellipse, rather than falling short or shooting past. Then the given petal should only be as long as the flow line, with its end stopping at the flow line's tip. This allows for the simpler structures to pass on their solidity as we build upon them - but this does not work if you approach the drawing as a loose sketch. This issue is seen on your hibiscus demo.

-And lastly let’s talk about texture, I see that you’ve add it in most of your plants but there are some things that need to be adressed.

There are many cases where you will add many cast shadows , like on the hibiscus demo, however this can easily become as distracting as drawing explicit details, and that is what happened here. One way to solve this issue is to use a gradient, that means having an area that is densely packed with cast shadows and progressively moving to an area where these details are more sparse, we saw how to do this on lesson 2 texture analysis. You may be thinking that texture serves as decoration but this isn’t the case it helps to define a specific relationship wih the form casting the shadow and the surface receiving it, It comes handy with situations like your Napoleonaea where all of those exlicit details are quite distracting. So before finishing this critique I want you to go and read this notes that may help you to apply texture more effectively in the future. https://drawabox.com/lesson/2/2/reminders

Okay, I’ll assign some revisions so you can apply these principles on some of your own plants.

Good luck!!!!!!!

Here's my critique!

Exercise 1: Your lines are solid and confident. Your longer lines have arc -- make sure you have room for your arm to move freely. Also, make sure your lines start on the dot.

Exercise 3: Don't forget to plot points for the lines bisecting the planes, too. Ghosted lines go from a point to a point.

Exercise 4: Your elipses look great on page one. On page two you look like you were tired. The elipses are not all drawn through twice, most of them don't fill the space, and there is a lot of empty space.

Exercise 6: Almost all of the outermost elipses are floating to one side or the other. The minor axis should bisect the elipse and it should be in line with the axis of the funnel.

Exercise 7: You didn't draw through all of the boxes. This happens throughout your work on boxes in this lesson.

Exercise 8: It looks like you had some trouble with this and your line work shows less confidence. Don't draw a line more than one time -- even if you made a mistake. Treat it like it was perfect.

Exercise 9: You missed the leftmost corners and almost all of the left column. The lines look a little more confident, though.

Exercise 10: Try to spin the boxes. It looks like they are all at the same angle. Use this exercise to explore the space.