Feldspar

The Fearless

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  • Basics Brawler
    9:09 AM, Thursday December 26th 2024

    Omg, Hi Chieftang! Wasn't expecting anyone to review my work except Elodin but a welcome one for sure!

    Yeah you are right about my minor axis skewing a bit high and low every now and then. I am aware of it and working through it with warmups daily. I think its my impatience mostly ^^. Thanks for a diagram for organic forms, i will experiment with them more with widening the degree of the ellipse.

    About my bugs. Yeah, i think they came really decent, maybe some proportions were a bit rough but i really like how they ended up, especially wasp(number 4 with texture) and wings of mosquito-ish insect(the last one). But there is plenty of space to work on with applying additive construction methods and solving texture problems.

    Again thanks for your time and kind words. I really put a lot time and effort into this one and i really glad that someone is appreciating my work and giving me some advices. I will move onto the lesson 5 and try to look through problems that you mentioned in critique. Merry Christmas and happy new year!

    7:58 AM, Sunday November 17th 2024

    Thank you so much!

    12:12 PM, Sunday October 20th 2024

    No, its completely unnecessary. You rotated boxes exercise is mostly fine: you keep gaps between boxes tight and consistent and you boxes rotate as the go further toward wanishing point. I just encouraged you to complete your exercise and finish missing boxes that are most complicated in terms of really rapid convergence. So you can do one corner of the rotated boxes (Only one quadrant like shown in Uncomfortable's video. It means your last step will be the 8th) like for your warmup if you not sure.

    Next Steps:

    I give greenlight to 250 Boxes Challenge.

    Add these exercises to your warmup pool and don't forget about your %50 rule (I will advise if you haven't followed it, you should go ahead and pay your 50% play debt before the challenge)

    Have fun!!!

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    7:36 AM, Friday October 18th 2024

    Hi again, Tawny_Owl! I am Feldspar(apparently you already know me :p) and i will be critiquing your submission today. Without further ado lets start!

    First and foremost congratulations on getting through this tough challenge! It’s definitely a long marathon, but the quality of work between the start and end pages really demonstrates overall improvement. Now let's begin with the critique.

    Things you did well:

    • your boxes smoothly and confidently executed. You're doing a good job of drawing the lines

    • You're doing a great job of experimenting with orientations, proportions and rates of foreshortening. Experimenting is an important habit to build when learning any new skill, it helps form a more well rounded understanding. I hope you'll continue to display and nurture this habit in the future.

    Things you can work on:

    • There are times when your lines converge in pairs or you attempt to keep your lines a bit too parallel which results in them diverging. This is an example of lines converging in pairs, and this shows the relation between each line in a set and their respective vanishing point. The inner pair of lines will be quite similar unless the box gets quite long and the outer pair can vary a lot depending on the location of the vanishing point. Move it further away and the lines become closer to parallel while moving it closer increases the rate of foreshortening. The key things we want to remember from this exercise are that our lines should always converge as a set not in pairs, never diverge from the vanishing point and due to perspective they won't be completely parallel.

    • I not sure if hatching was done using the ghosting method. Don't forget to take the time to plan each of your hatching lines and space them evenly. This helps keep your boxes looking tidy rather than looking like they were rushed on to the page.

    Keep practicing previous exercises and boxes as warm ups, and good luck!

    Next Steps:

    I give greenlight to Lesson 2.

    Add these exercises to your warmup pool and don't forget about your %50 rule (I will advise if you haven't followed it, you should go ahead and pay your 50% play debt before the challenge)

    Have fun!!!

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    1:51 PM, Thursday October 17th 2024

    Hi Emstrange! I am Feldspar and I will be critiquing your work today. I hope you've been keeping up with your 50% rule and warmups while waiting! Without further ado lets begin!

    Lines

    • Superimposed Lines: I see bit of fraying on both sides. It means that you are not taking enough time to place your pen in correct location. Don't rush and take your time. I see your lines wobbling a little It can be a hint that you are executing your marks not from your shoulder but I suggest it comes from hesitation and focusing on their desire for accuracy. Keep an eye on this throughout your warmups.

    • Ghosted Lines: Confident lines, good job!

    • Ghosted Planes: I see some wobbliness here and there but there is nothing warmups cant fix. Remember don't rush and give time to every line. Don't forget confidence beats accurate!

    Ellipses

    • Tables of Ellipses: I notice that your ellipses are mostly wobbly so again Confident but inaccurate line > Accurate but wobbly line. Also remember not to be too focused on putting them snugly against borders. But i think you are on the right track.

    • Ellipses in planes I notice your ellipses are a bit wobbly. Remember not to be too focused on fitting them against all four borders. But it's nothing some practice with warmups can't fix.

    • Funnels: Good funnels. Try to vary size and shape of ellipses and experiment with position of funnels through warmups.

    Boxes

    • Plotted Perspective: Nothing to add here

    • Rough Perspective: I see repeated lines! In DrawABox, you are not allowed to "fix" lines, you only have one shot at a line, and if you miss it, tough luck. This will force you to have a better planning phase, be mindful when ghosting, and will help your accuracy in the long run. Try to ghost more throughly when going towards the vanishing point, that may prove helpful. I also noticed your line confidence took a big hit, remember, confidence beats accuracy! Some of the front/back faces of boxes are not rectangular and this is result of guessing but i suggest it is about accuracy as it happens not so often throughout your exercise and sort itself with warmups. You should remember two main rules: first that your box is converging towards your vanishing point, meaning edges that connect front and back faces will go towards vanishing point and second that front and back faces of the boxes need to be rectangular. I recommend re-consuming the material before attempting this exercise through warmups. You may check out ScyllaStew's video.

    • Rotated Boxes: You have a eye for rotations! Solid job. Although you are missing the four corner boxes. I want you to draw, finish them and send it to me (Not a re-do, just finish the remaining boxes)

    • Organic Perspective: You are leaning more towards the dramatic foreshortening. Most of edges of boxes converge correctly and you definitely understand the core principals behind this exercise, although some of them are parallel or diverging. Also hatching should be applied with ghosting method. I believe with 250 Boxes Challenge instructions, you will understand and get better with Organic Perspective exercise even more and have plenty of time to experiment with boxes. Keep it up!

    Next Steps:

    I request:

    • Add the missing boxes on your existing Rotated Boxes

    I don't expect perfect, or not even a good work, just one that follows the instructions. You will post the first page you do, no practice pages, no grinding. I'll be waiting here for your reply so you can start your box challenge :)

    When finished, reply to this critique with your revisions.
    9:04 PM, Thursday October 3rd 2024

    You absolutely right - my points about your ellipses are too strict and wrong, they are really good. Critique on your submission was one of my first i did back when i just started DrawABox, but it not justifies my mistakes in any manner so i am really sorry and thanks for doing this revisions even if its just for a warmup.

    I recommend after a long break you should revise the material to make sure you remember everything correctly (memory can play tricks on us) and do longer warm ups. This is Uncomfortable's post in discord on this matter https://imgur.com/a/ag7mWG2.

    Also if you want to make your work to be critiqued faster by other people you can go on the official discord server in critique exchange channel, read pinned massage and post it there(in short, for doing critiques for other people you can post your work to the special list and make it more visible for people like you) or simply repost your work after some time.

    Next Steps:

    I give greenlight to 250 Boxes Challenge(Second one?)

    Add these exercises to your warmup pool and don't forget about your %50 rule (I will advise if you haven't followed it, you should go ahead and pay your 50% play debt before the challenge)

    Have fun!!!

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    11:45 AM, Friday September 13th 2024

    Hi, Kort3. I also really happy to see you too! ^^ Firstly thanks for doing this in-depth critique. Its really means a lot!

    I understand and totally agree with your point about my arrows, leaves and branches. I still have a long way to go and will revisit them throughout my warmups without rushing and giving time to every line. What i struggle the most, in my opinion, is the variety in twisting and turning, perhaps i should look more through the references and update my visual library.

    When it comes to plants i agree that they came really decent not only in the end result but how i started to understand process of construction and decision making.(Really glad how my three cacti came up in terms of construction where i understand how spikes align and how bumps works between them).

    Again deep thanks for this critique. Hope we will meet again!

    8:29 AM, Wednesday August 14th 2024

    Thanks for taking time and completing this exercise!

    About Ellipses in Planes: Solid ellipses! You are on the right track.

    Good luck with next one!

    Next Steps:

    I give greenlight to 250 Boxes Challenge.

    Add these exercises to your warmup pool and don't forget about your %50 rule (I will advise if you haven't followed it, you should go ahead and pay your 50% play debt before the challenge)

    Have fun!!!

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    8:17 AM, Tuesday August 13th 2024

    Thanks for taking time and completing this exercises!

    About your Rotated boxes exercise: Its much better! I see your gaps between boxes are tight and consistent. Although i see that your boxes aren't actually rotating, meaning the have the same vanishing points. For every boxe that go further from the middle one you need to 'rotate' it meaning to give it different vanishing point. I made the visualisation of most common mistakes with rotated boxes(https://imgur.com/a/LmCj6zD), maybe it will help.(Pre-last picture describes you mistake)

    About your Ellipses in Planes: Also good work! I see you trying to put your ellipses between two borders that encase them, to check their accuracy.

    As about the 250 Box Challenge:

    Next Steps:

    I give greenlight to 250 Boxes Challenge.

    Add these exercises to your warmup pool and don't forget about your %50 rule (I will advise if you haven't followed it, you should go ahead and pay your 50% play debt before the challenge)

    Have fun!!!

    This community member feels the lesson should be marked as complete, and 2 others agree. The student has earned their completion badge for this lesson and should feel confident in moving onto the next lesson.
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    2:32 PM, Sunday August 11th 2024

    Hi Tart! I am Feldspar and I will be critiquing your work today. I hope you've been keeping up with your 50% rule and warmups while waiting! Lets start!

    Lines

    • Superimposed Lines: I notice a bit fraying on both sides. It means that you are not taking enough time to place your pen in correct location. Don't rush and take your time.

    • Ghosted Lines: Confident lines! Good work.

    • Ghosted Planes: I see some wobbliness here and there especially on bigger planes but there is nothing warmups cant fix. Remember dont rush and give time to every line.

    Ellipses

    • Tables of Ellipses: I notice some of ellipses looks like being rushed. It may be due to the quantity of work. Don't forget giving yourself as much time as you require to do the work to the best of your current ability. But i see you trying to execute your ellipses evenly shaped and fitting them snugly against the borders.

    • Ellipses in Planes: I don't see second page of this exercise, i assume you forgot to post it and i want to see it throughout a revision.On the first page some of the ellipses are wobbling and egg-shaped but i see you trying to put them snugly agains all borders and they are confident so this is the matter of some warmups. Remember, confident but inaccurate line > Accurate but wobbly line. Remember not to be too focused on fitting them against all four borders.

    • Funnels: Good funnels. Try to vary size and shape of ellipses and experiment with position of funnels through warmups.

    Boxes

    • Plotted Perspective: I see some of the back vertical lines are not perpendicular. It's not a big deal as it is the result of all the little mistakes that accumulate as you work through core steps of this exercise. It means you have room to improve. Give yourself more time when lining up ruler.

    • Rough Perspective: Solid boxes! Front and back faces of boxes are rectangular and line extensions are applied correctly. Although I also noticed your line confidence took a big hit, remember, confidence beats accuracy!

    • Rotated Boxes: You have a eye for rotations! Solid job. Your gaps between boxes are consistent and your boxes are actually rotating.

    • Organic Perspective: You boxes are converging mostly correctly and you definitely understand the core principals behind this exercise. Although mostly all of them are the same shape and degree of converging. I believe with 250 Boxes Challenge instructions, you will understand and get better with Organic Perspective exercise even more and have plenty of time to experiment with boxes. Keep it up!

    Next Steps:

    I request:

    • 1 page of Ellipses in Planes

    I don't expect perfect, or not even a good work, just one that follows the instructions. You will post the first page you do, no practice pages, no grinding. I'll be waiting here for your reply so you can start your box challenge :)

    When finished, reply to this critique with your revisions.
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