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    1:08 PM, Saturday October 5th 2024

    Hi Bavulture, Congratulations on finishing the 250 box challenge. I'll be giving you feedback. Pointing out mistakes you've made as well as thing you did good.

    • Your lineworks looks very confident. The lines are straight and don't over or undershoot their mark. Hatching also looks very consistent. I would suggest adding extra lineweight to the contour of the boxes as it sets the boxes better apart from the paper and it is good exercise for your line placing.

    • There is a bit of variation in the orientation of your boxes. I encourage you to push this further. Look at this diagram of different possible orientations. A lot of this comes down to changing the length and direction of your starting Y-shape.

    • Some of your boxes (nrs. 170, 180, 186, 214, 216, 225, 230, 235 to name a few) look a bit warped. This is due to one of the angles of the initial Y-shape being smaller than 90°. When using this method of drawing boxes the starting Y-shape always has it's lines at angles greater than 90°.

    Overall very nice work. Good luck with lesson 2

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    5:52 PM, Thursday October 3rd 2024

    Always happy to help a fellow drawing enthousiast :)

    With perspective I mean that the lines move in the right direction toward the vanishing points. When I say you vary your perspective I guess I should say you vary in foreshortening.

    Orientation is the direction from which you look at the box, or how the box is angled towards the viewer. When you draw a perfect Y shape with all the lines at a 120° angle from eachother you get a box where you look directly on the corner of that box. But when two of the lines are close to 90° (but never less than that) you make a box where you look at the face side.

    The 3rd box down and to the right in this diagram shows a box in the first orientation while the one above it is an example of the second.

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    7:34 PM, Wednesday October 2nd 2024

    Hi Liia, Congratulations on finishing the 250 box challenge. I'll be giving you feedback. Pointing out mistakes you've made as well as thing you did good.

    • Your lineworks looks very confident. The lines are straight and don't over or undershoot their mark. Hatching also looks very consistent. I would suggest adding extra lineweight to the contour of the boxes as it sets the boxes better apart from the paper and it is good exercise for your line placing.

    • Most of your boxes have a similar orientation where the viewer looks straight on the front corner. It would be good practice to experiment with this. Look at this diagram of different possible orientations. A lot of this comes down to changing the length and direction of your starting Y-shape.

    • There is good variation in the shape of the boxes as well as the perspective. There are some very minor mistakes with one of the back lines not lining up. I wouldn't worry too much about those as that will improver further over time.

    Overall very nice work. Good luck with lesson 2

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    7:22 PM, Wednesday October 2nd 2024

    Hi Friendly_Neighbour, Congratulations on finishing the 250 box challenge. I'll be giving you feedback, pointing out mistakes you've made as well as thing you did good.

    • Your lineworks looks very confident. The lines are straight and don't over or undershoot their mark. Hatching also looks very consistent.

    • Most of your boxes have a similar orientation where the viewer looks straight on the front corner. It would be good practice to experiment with this. Look at this diagram of different possible orientations. A lot of this comes down to changing the length and direction of your starting Y-shape.

    • Perspective looks good. You also have a nice variation in perspective. There are some very minor mistakes with one of the back lines not lining up. I wouldn't worry too much about those as that will improver further over time.

    Overall very nice work. Good luck with lesson 2

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    1:53 PM, Tuesday October 1st 2024

    Hi Shellfeda, Congratulations on finishing your first Drawabox lesson. I'll be giving you feedback, pointing out mistakes you've made and how to improve them, as well as the things you did good.

    Lines

    • Your lines look confident and straight for the first two exercises. In ghosted planes the lines still look mostly confident but start to under or overshoot their mark. Take your time for each and every line you place and you'll get the same result here as you did in the ghosted lines exercise.

    Ellipses

    • You draw through all your ellipses twice nicely.

    • In tables of ellipses and ellipses in planes most ellipses fit in their border nicely and are consistent with each other. There are only a few uneven ellipses but nothing to worry about at this point.

    • In the middle and the top-middle funnels the minor axis is off center resulting in the funnels looking a bit skewed. Otherwise this exercise looks fine.

    Boxes

    • In the rough perspective exercise your linework starts getting wobbly. Remember to keep using the ghosting method for every line you put down. It's okay when they don't hit there mark, that's something you can practice as you continue through the exercises.

    • In rotated boxes you show an understanding of what is asked. The boxes become inconsistent towards the edges and this is to be expected as it is a very confusing exercise the first time you do it. You are missing some boxes towards the edges however and I encourage you try to finish the set before moving on.

    • In organic perspective I suggest you only place one path with boxes along in for each frame. With the boxes getting smaller towards one end.

    • You make good use of the Y method. Make sure the lines converge away from the center of the Y. For some boxes the lines diverge leading to incorrect perspective.

    Overall you show an understanding of the exercises. In the more complicated exercises your lines lack some confidence. In ghosted lines you showed you can do it. If you apply the ghosting method for each and every line you put down and take your time I'm confident you'll do fine during the rest of the exercises.

    I won't ask for a revision of the rotated boxes exercise but I do encourage you to finish it before continuing to the 250 boxes challenge.

    Good luck.

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    • Add the lesson 1 exercises to the pool of warmup exercises.

    • Continue to the 250 box challenge

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    12:52 PM, Saturday May 4th 2024

    Hi Senj, thanks again for taking the time to write a feedback. I see what you mean when you talk about the legs. I'll keep that in mind going forward.

    7:27 PM, Monday April 15th 2024

    Mistakes in the textures are not really a problem. As stated in the lesson, this is the first time practicing textures which is a very difficult subject and mistakes are very common. It's commendable that you try difficult textures and you should continue doing so. Just be aware of the possible mistakes and when you finish a texture look back at it critically and if you spot a mistake, like drawing contours, think to yourself what you could improve next time.

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    7:16 PM, Sunday April 14th 2024

    Hi Cornball, Congratulations on finishing lesson 2. I'll be giving you feedback, pointing out mistakes you've made as well as thing you did good.

    Organic arrows

    • Your linework looks mostly fine. Some of the longer lines you've drawn in multiple parts. Try to place them as one continuous line. This may be difficult because of how long these lines get but you'll get better at it with practice.

    • The increased linethickness is very scratchy with multiple small lines. These should also be just one additional line, placed using the ghosting method.

    • The arrows get smaller towards the back properly.

    Organic intersections

    • The sausage shapes have a consistent thickness.

    • The ellipses are drawn properly going through each one 2-3 times.

    • The contours don't have varying degrees as described in this picture. Some of them also have a flat section in the middle. When drawing these use the ghosting method as if you were drawing an ellipse but only put you pen down for the front part.

    Texture analysis

    • There is a nice gradient from light to dark in the textures.

    • The black bar on the left blends a bit with the texture but it is still noticeable just like the white bar on the right. See this picture for reference.

    Dissections

    • Your textures wrap around the sausage shape nicely. Most of them also get darker towards the edges.

    • You've mostly drawn cast shades. However for some of the textures you've drawn contours like the watermelon and sunflower textures.

    Form intersections

    • Your linework on the base shapes looks good. The hatching lines are a bit arched sometimes which is often a result of rushing these. Take your time when hatching and use the ghosting method and you'll be fine. For the added lineweight the same applies as I said in the organic arrows exercise.

    • I don't see major mistakes in the intersections. You look like you have a good understanding in how shapes interact in 3D space.

    Organic intersections

    • Both pages look like they are solid piles of sausage shapes.

    • The shadows wrap nicely around the shapes.

    • Same as before applies to the lineweight.

    Overall very nice work. You are ready to continue with lesson 3.

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    3:26 PM, Sunday April 14th 2024

    Hi Epaindedrick, Congratulations on finishing the 250 box challenge. I'll be giving you feedback, pointing out mistakes you've made as well as thing you did good.

    • Your linework looks good. Strokes are confident and smooth. Extra lines for added lineweight overlap or stick closely to the original line. Your hatching however looks a bit rushed. These lines often are a bit curved and undershoot their bounds. Take your time even when doing the hatching and use the ghosting method.

    • Most of your boxes have a similar orientation where the viewer looks straight on the front corner. There are some boxes that deviate from this but it would be good practice to experiment even further with this. Look at this diagram of different possible orientations.

    • Another tip, the horizontal parts of the y-line will always converge to vanishing points that can be connected to each other by a line perpendicular to the vertical part of the y-line. Boxes 214, 227, 231, 234 and 246 among others don't follow this principle and look a little skewed as a result. If you look at this diagram, the center vertical line of the box will always be perpendicular to the local horizon line of the box.

    Overall very nice work. Good luck with lesson 2

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    1:27 PM, Sunday April 14th 2024

    Hi BLVD, Congratulations on finishing the 250 box challenge. I'll be giving you feedback. Pointing out mistakes you've made as well as thing you did good.

    • Your lineworks looks very confident. The lines are straight and don't over or undershoot their mark and the added line thickness stays on the line. Hatching also looks very consistent.

    • Most of your boxes have a similar orientation where the viewer looks straight on the front corner. It would be good practice to experiment with this. Look at this diagram of different possible orientations.

    • Another tip, the horizontal parts of the y-line will always converge to vanishing points that can be connected to each other by a line perpendicular to the vertical part of the y-line. Boxes 227, 228, 233, 235 and 245 among others don't follow this principle and look a little skewed as a result. If you look at this diagram, the center vertical line of the box will always be perpendicular to the local horizon line of the box.

    Overall very nice work. Good luck with lesson 2

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