EpicGamer

Hi RAINBOWSAREGODSPROMISE!

Here's the critique....

Lines: They are very scratchy and not confident. Ghost and draw confidently. You also used a bigger pen on one of the plants. You can draw with a 0.5 fineliner, fineliner, then pens, and ther materials (in order of acceptance.

Texture: Don't hatch and your leaves looked like they had too much texture so try to not always use texture. Your texture looked like patterns so re-read lesson 2 texture article and really understand.

Leaves/petals/arrows: Your leaves (I'll call the petals and arrows leaved because they are so similar) look flat. Remeber to factor in gravity and a leaf's "2D-ness." Try to look at a leaf irl or find videos of leaves floating around and specifically find video or look irl at the way leaves act on plants. Try to observe and understand the flow and the way leaves act. One tip: your leaves need to bend over itself ALOT more. For their flow, your leaves dont always follow the flow very well because they dont bend often but try to not always try to make the outline of the leaf not follow the flow because occasionally it does. Your petals are super flat because of the reasons stated here exemplified. The lineweight of your arrows are way to exaggerated and occasionally on a weird side. Dial back your lineweight and blend it into the surrounding areas of lines.

Cylinders: Read the page on the 250 cylinder challenge and try to apply that. If you have any questions ask away!

No Problem!

Sorry for being late to respond! Thanks for the critique! I'll make sure to keep it in mind!

No problem!

Hi WYMARISEA!

Your linework is very scratchy and messy especially in the beginning. Your texture is also very scratchy. Remeber don't be scared of messing up. Would you rather be a good artist or have 1 good drawing. Bad drawings make us good. DAB is all about practice not creating good drawings. It doesn't matter how good it turns out as long as you've learned something from it.

Your number of drawings in one pages is too much. Animals are complex and you need room to figure things out and draw lines that don't combine with each other. Maybe only do 1 full animal and 2 small studies. They get alot better at the end though.

There are some areas where your additional forms feel 2D. For an example, when you have additional forms over the shoulder mass, the additional forms should move around it or if big enough create a bump where they both meet and the additional form goes across the contours of the other mass. (if you need an example just reply and I can post one.) Remember everything is a 3D form and try to imagine them going on top of each other like in the organic intersections exercise.

Occasionally, you make the limb sausages taper so you have no additional forms. For an example, one of the hybrids "leg shoulder mass?" is like a diamond. We only doing 3D this lesson.

Here's a link that might help: https://discordapp.com/channels/365036548820959242/365180330103013388/783038487716429864

It is pretty similar to the other reply.

Hi URAISAMU! Glad you had fun!

Some notes to keep in mind

Your beginning drawings seem very focused on the "trying to make pretty drawings" side. I can't critique those very well because there is too much texture for me to see the underlying forms

It seems you're using some markers in your work. It is good that you're experimenting with your tools, but DAB only allows fineliners till Lesson 6.

Main Parts of the Lesson

Additional Forms: Your additional forms seem 2D. It got better towards the end, but occasionally (like in areas like the neck and limbs or small additional forms) you have some that are 2D.

I think I said it pretty good in this post just skip to the additional forms section (if you are still confused just reply and tell me): https://drawabox.com/community/submission/ZN6Z6IWG/LE3R9M12

Hi VAIBHAVSHAKYA!

First of all I'm seeing little pencil or ballpoint sketches in your work. For an example, on the llamas page (that's what I think it is) there is a box surrounding the legs . You can put dots with your fineliner but I don't think you can draw it outright expecially with a different pen (which is what I think you used.)

Your appendage sausages look alot more like cylinders. If you watch the lesson video he says the reason why you use sausages is because they convey gesture.

I recommend you draw bigger for lessons like this one. An animal is so complex so try to maybe only do 1-2 animals per page and if you want to draw more animals feel free to do so.

Also you shouldn't be doodling or doing any other exercises other than the one your focusing on for that page. One of the llama pages has some warm-ups on it.

Your linework is pretty messy is some areas. That may be because of your small drawings or little confidence. Sometimes I can see your trying to go back over an area and redo it, but don't do that. Remember CONFIDENCE!

Your added texture is also messy probably because of your small drawings.

Your additional forms are pretty good. Some of the forms are a little bit 2D-ish, but the majority are nice!

For how your drawings turned out, lesson 5 isn't really the most visually appealing lesson, Even though it doesn't look like a Mona Lisa (if that's your style), you still got something good out of this lesson. Draw A Box isn't about making pretty drawings. Draw A Box is about becoming a good artist and developing the technicals skills needed.

Here's a video you might like: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=V8OD0_nbqoM

np!

You too and np!