EpainDedRick

Thanks for the critique!

There's a bit of issues like the sausages ends aren't even in some, and the intersections not highlighted properly with line-weight but these are minor. You did as requested and I'm marking your submission complete.

First glance note : Your pages are bit out of order but I will do my best critiquing your submission

Arrows

Major note : Please do not grind the exercise. You've done 4 pages instead of requested 2.

1. Mistake on lines: pass although some of the lines feel wobbly.

2.Arrows not compressing: pass

3.Lineweight related: a bit of non existent lineweight on the twists

Side note: The hatching seems a bit inconsistent

Organic Forms

1.Mistakes on lines: some of the hook contours exhibit lack of confidence

2.Not following the simple form they need to be; they should be 2 identical balls connected by a tube of consistent width: a few sausages exhibit the issue

3.Degrees of the ellipses/contours don't change, they stay static: pass

4.Not hooking contours: pass

5.Misaligned ellipses and not drawing the axis line: a few are missing the axis line.

6.Ellipses not touching the boundaries, or getting out of them: pass

Texture Analysis

1.Doing dotting or any kind of hatching to achieve transition: pass

2.Not doing a seamless transition on the gradients, if either the black bar on the left or the white bar on the right are really easy to spot because the transition isn't smooth enough: You've missed the point of the transition/gradient. Please revisit the instructions page for this exercise.

3.All marks on this exercise should be done purposefully, and by looking at the reference before, so scribbling or doing non planned marks is a mistake: pass

Disections

1.Not wrapping the textures around the form: pass

2.Not breaking the silhouette: pass

Side note : You're missing some texture work on the ellipses/cross section of the sausages.

Form Intersections

1.Repetition of lines, lines not being confident, not planing lines, not ghosting, clear divergences, not drawing through ellipses, etc.: Some of your boxes have very clear divergence issues.

2.The forms need to have consistent foreshortening: pass

Organic intersections

1.Not drawing simple forms. On this exercise the forms should be kept simple, just like in the previous organic forms exercises. 2 identical balls connected by a tube of consistent width: pass

2.Shadows sticking to the forms. The shadows have to follow the form of object they're being casted on, not the form of the object that casts it: pass

3.Not ghosting lines, not hooking the lines, adding linweight by tracing instead of drawing confident lines etc.: your sausages are missing some lineweight to indicate which sausage is on top of what sausage.

4.Not drawing through forms. You should always draw through forms, just like in the form intersections exercise: pass

5.Drawing non stable forms: pass

Please practice on your line work/confidence, you can use lesson 1 exercises as warmup since you've taken a long break.

Arrows

1. Mistake on lines: pass

2.Arrows not compressing: pass

3.Lineweight related: pass

Organic Forms

1.Mistakes on lines: pass

2.Not following the simple form they need to be; they should be 2 identical balls connected by a tube of consistent width: some sausages have uneven ends

3.Degrees of the ellipses/contours don't change, they stay static: pass

4.Not hooking contours: pass

5.Misaligned ellipses and not drawing the axis line: pass

6.Ellipses not touching the boundaries, or getting out of them: pass

Texture Analysis

1.Doing dotting or any kind of hatching to achieve transition: pass

2.Not doing a seamless transition on the gradients, if either the black bar on the left or the white bar on the right are really easy to spot because the transition isn't smooth enough: pass

3.All marks on this exercise should be done purposefully, and by looking at the reference before, so scribbling or doing non planned marks is a mistake: pass

Disections

1.Not wrapping the textures around the form: pass

2.Not breaking the silhouette: some of the textures aren't breaking the silhouette

Form Intersections

1.Repetition of lines, lines not being confident, not planing lines, not ghosting, clear divergences, not drawing through ellipses, etc.:

2.The forms need to have consistent foreshortening: pass

Organic intersections

1.Not drawing simple forms. On this exercise the forms should be kept simple, just like in the previous organic forms exercises. 2 identical balls connected by a tube of consistent width: pass

2.Shadows sticking to the forms. The shadows have to follow the form of object they're being casted on, not the form of the object that casts it: pass though there's a bit of confusion on some sausage's cast shadows especially on page 2

3.Not ghosting lines, not hooking the lines, adding linweight by tracing instead of drawing confident lines etc.: pass

4.Not drawing through forms. You should always draw through forms, just like in the form intersections exercise: pass

5.Drawing non stable forms: pass though a nitpick is some of the support is a bit floaty especially the monstrosity that is page 2

Arrows

1. Mistake on lines: pass

2.Arrows not compressing: pass

3.Lineweight related: pass

Organic Forms

1.Mistakes on lines: pass

2.Not following the simple form they need to be; they should be 2 identical balls connected by a tube of consistent width: pass

3.Degrees of the ellipses/contours don't change, they stay static: pass

4.Not hooking contours: pass

5.Misaligned ellipses and not drawing the axis line: pass

6.Ellipses not touching the boundaries, or getting out of them: pass

Texture Analysis

1.Doing dotting or any kind of hatching to achieve transition: pass

2.Not doing a seamless transition on the gradients, if either the black bar on the left or the white bar on the right are really easy to spot because the transition isn't smooth enough: pass (very well done in this case)

3.All marks on this exercise should be done purposefully, and by looking at the reference before, so scribbling or doing non planned marks is a mistake: pass

Disections

1.Not wrapping the textures around the form: pass

2.Not breaking the silhouette: pass

Side note: Great rendering of the textures!

Form Intersections

1.Repetition of lines, lines not being confident, not planing lines, not ghosting, clear divergences, not drawing through ellipses, etc.: a few shapes aren't drawn through

2.The forms need to have consistent foreshortening: pass

Organic intersections

1.Not drawing simple forms. On this exercise the forms should be kept simple, just like in the previous organic forms exercises. 2 identical balls connected by a tube of consistent width: pass

2.Shadows sticking to the forms. The shadows have to follow the form of object they're being casted on, not the form of the object that casts it: pass

3.Not ghosting lines, not hooking the lines, adding linweight by tracing instead of drawing confident lines etc.: pass

4.Not drawing through forms. You should always draw through forms, just like in the form intersections exercise: pass

5.Drawing non stable forms: pass

Arrows

1. Mistake on lines: pass

2.Arrows not compressing: On pg2 most of your arrows look too uniform and no barely any convergence

3.Lineweight related: pass

Organic Forms

1.Mistakes on lines: pass

2.Not following the simple form they need to be; they should be 2 identical balls connected by a tube of consistent width: most of your sausages have uneven ends

3.Degrees of the ellipses/contours don't change, they stay static: you ellipses are way too static they dont change thier degrees much

4.Not hooking contours: pass

5.Misaligned ellipses and not drawing the axis line: pass

6.Ellipses not touching the boundaries, or getting out of them: pass

Texture Analysis

1.Doing dotting or any kind of hatching to achieve transition: pass

2.Not doing a seamless transition on the gradients, if either the black bar on the left or the white bar on the right are really easy to spot because the transition isn't smooth enough: especially evident on the pebbles and mostly the crack study, the pebble shadow transition is too instant, the cracks don't fade into the light towards the right. go through the exercise description page once again.

3.All marks on this exercise should be done purposefully, and by looking at the reference before, so scribbling or doing non planned marks is a mistake: pass

Disections

1.Not wrapping the textures around the form: pass

2.Not breaking the silhouette: pass

Form Intersections

1.Repetition of lines, lines not being confident, not planing lines, not ghosting, clear divergences, not drawing through ellipses, etc.: pass

2.The forms need to have consistent foreshortening: the 1st page its very evident that most of the boxes aren't equilateral and are stretched in one axis. Mostly aim for shallow foreshortening/slow convergence. Similar stuff exists on the remaining pages especially with streched pyramids, cylinder, cones & spheres.

Organic intersections

1.Not drawing simple forms. On this exercise the forms should be kept simple, just like in the previous organic forms exercises. 2 identical balls connected by a tube of consistent width: pass

2.Shadows sticking to the forms. The shadows have to follow the form of object they're being casted on, not the form of the object that casts it: pass

3.Not ghosting lines, not hooking the lines, adding linweight by tracing instead of drawing confident lines etc.: pass

4.Not drawing through forms. You should always draw through forms, just like in the form intersections exercise: pass

5.Drawing non stable forms: some of the sausages are floating or dont provide structure/support to the other sausages. some of them don't overlap each other well.

Arrows

1. Mistake on lines: pass

2.Arrows not compressing: pass

3.Lineweight related: pass

Organic Forms

1.Mistakes on lines: pass

2.Not following the simple form they need to be; they should be 2 identical balls connected by a tube of consistent width: A few sausages exhibit the issues

3.Degrees of the ellipses/contours don't change, they stay static: pass

4.Not hooking contours: pass

5.Misaligned ellipses and not drawing the axis line: pass

6.Ellipses not touching the boundaries, or getting out of them: pass

Texture Analysis

1.Doing dotting or any kind of hatching to achieve transition: pass

2.Not doing a seamless transition on the gradients, if either the black bar on the left or the white bar on the right are really easy to spot because the transition isn't smooth enough: pass

3.All marks on this exercise should be done purposefully, and by looking at the reference before, so scribbling or doing non planned marks is a mistake: pass

Disections

1.Not wrapping the textures around the form: pass

2.Not breaking the silhouette: pass

Form Intersections

1.Repetition of lines, lines not being confident, not planing lines, not ghosting, clear divergences, not drawing through ellipses, etc.: pass

2.The forms need to have consistent foreshortening: some of the forms have extereme foreshortening or streched in one axis

Organic intersections

1.Not drawing simple forms. On this exercise the forms should be kept simple, just like in the previous organic forms exercises. 2 identical balls connected by a tube of consistent width: pass

2.Shadows sticking to the forms. The shadows have to follow the form of object they're being casted on, not the form of the object that casts it: pass

3.Not ghosting lines, not hooking the lines, adding linweight by tracing instead of drawing confident lines etc.: pass

4.Not drawing through forms. You should always draw through forms, just like in the form intersections exercise: pass

5.Drawing non stable forms: pass

Side note: There's a lack of lineweight on the sausages causing a bit confusion on which sausage lies on which.

Arrows

1. Mistake on lines: pass

2.Arrows not compressing: pass

3.Lineweight related: pass

Organic Forms

1.Mistakes on lines:pass

2.Not following the simple form they need to be; they should be 2 identical balls connected by a tube of consistent width: A few sausages exhibit this issues especially on page 2

3.Degrees of the ellipses/contours don't change, they stay static: pass

4.Not hooking contours: pass

5.Misaligned ellipses and not drawing the axis line: pass

6.Ellipses not touching the boundaries, or getting out of them: pass

Texture Analysis

1.Doing dotting or any kind of hatching to achieve transition: pass

2.Not doing a seamless transition on the gradients, if either the black bar on the left or the white bar on the right are really easy to spot because the transition isn't smooth enough: pass

3.All marks on this exercise should be done purposefully, and by looking at the reference before, so scribbling or doing non planned marks is a mistake: pass

Disections

1.Not wrapping the textures around the form: pass

2.Not breaking the silhouette: pass

Form Intersections

1.Repetition of lines, lines not being confident, not planing lines, not ghosting, clear divergences, not drawing through ellipses, etc.: pass

2.The forms need to have consistent foreshortening: pass

Sidenote : Most of these forms don't have hatched face/plane that indicates which side is facing towards the observer

Organic intersections

1.Not drawing simple forms. On this exercise the forms should be kept simple, just like in the previous organic forms exercises. 2 identical balls connected by a tube of consistent width: pass

2.Shadows sticking to the forms. The shadows have to follow the form of object they're being casted on, not the form of the object that casts it: pass

3.Not ghosting lines, not hooking the lines, adding linweight by tracing instead of drawing confident lines etc.: pass

4.Not drawing through forms. You should always draw through forms, just like in the form intersections exercise: pass

5.Drawing non stable forms: pass

Thanks for the input!

In the Next Steps please ignore the first point as hatching is optional. Just do 10 more boxes as requested.