Ebni

Hello, congratulations on completing lesson 1. I’m Ebni and will be critiquing your work.

Your superimposed lines look good with a defined starting pont and all the fraying at one end. On your ghosted lines and planes you sometimes draw multiple strokes for a single line. Each stroke should be a single line. When mistakes happen, you should accept it and move on. Our focus is on drawing smooth, confident lines. Accuracy will come with practice.

Your tables of ellipses look good. You’re applying the ghosting method and drawing through your ellipses with a focus on confidence over accuracy. Ellipses in planes are mostly the same. A few look quite deformed as you focus on keeping the curve in the bounds defined by your planes. Again, focus on smooth ellipse shape over trying to hit all the marks. Your funnels exercise looks good.

Plotted perspective looks good. Your rough perspective has the same issue with redrawing the same strokes, but otherwise looks decent. Rotated boxes looks good as well. It’s a hard exercise. You keep the boxes tight together. Also drawing big and filling the page is good as it helps with visual clarity. Organic boxes is also a solid attempt, aside from the issues already mentioned.

I’ll mark this exercise as complete. Remember to keep revisiting these exercises as warm-ups and keeping the advice from here in mind. Otherwise you’re on to the 250 box challenge!

Thank you for this reply. Redoing these things started to click for me as to what the exercises were going for. It's one thing to read it in the lesson, another to attempt to put it in practice.

I'm glad my improvement stood out. I will continue to work on issues like the redrawing lines thing.

Thank you again.

https://imgur.com/a/t5qOg88

Sorry these took so long. It's been an extremely stressful couple of months for me.

Hello and congratulations on completing lesson 1. I’m Ebni, and I will be critiquing your work.

Your superimposed lines look good. Smooth, confident lines with the fraying at only one end. The ghosted lines and planes exercises also look good. You’re focused on drawing smooth confident lines over accurate ones which is correct. Accuracy will come with practice.

On your table of ellipses, there’s a fair bit of wobble to them. It seems you’re slowing down to hit the targets rather than focus on drawing smooth curves. I notice improvement in this on your ghosted ellipses, though, and your funnels look really good. You did a good job keeping them aligned to the axis. Also good job in drawing through your ellipses in all of these exercises.

Onto boxes. Your plotted perspective looks alright. For the rough perspective there’s a fair bit of wobble to the lines. You’re likely slowing down to focus on accuracy. You should be focused on smooth, confident lines over accurate ones even as you use them to build up these more complicated shapes. You’re starting to experiment with line weight as well, which is good. It should be applied subtly with one stroke per line, applied using the ghosting method. Also in an exercise like this the line weight should be applied to the lines closest the viewer. Otherwise you are following your lines back to the horizon to check your work, which is good.

For the rotated boxes exercise, you did good for such a complicated challenge. You’re using the previous points to guide your positioning on the successive boxes. For the organic perspective, just the same comment as before. Your lines are wobbly/arcing as your focused on completing the box rather than on the individual lines that make it up. Remember to take your time and not rush. Carefully set up the points and draw the marks with confidence using the ghosting method.

I’m going to mark this exercise as complete. The 250 box challenge is next. Good luck.

Hello and congratulations on finishing lesson 1. I’m Ebni, and I’ll be critiquing your work.

Your superimposed lines look good. They are confidently drawn with all the fraying at one end. Your ghosted lines and planes also look good. It’s good you’re focusing on confidence over accuracy, as accuracy will develop with time.

The tables of ellipses and ellipses in planes look really good. You’re drawing through the ellipses and drawing them smoothly and confidently. In the funnels exercise they are lined up well with only slight deviations from the minor axis line. However, there is a bit of wobble showing here as you slow down to hit the target. Focus on confident ellipses first, accuracy will come with practice.

Your plotted perspective looks good. In your rough perspective exercise there are some issues with the width and height lines not being parallel and perpendicular to the horizon, respectively. Otherwise you are drawing the lines with confidence, and tracing the depth lines back to the horizon to check your work.

For the rotated boxes you did good for such a hard exercise. You’re lining up the corner and edges well, drawing through your boxes, and drawing with confidence. My only note would be to draw larger when revisiting this exercise. Don’t be afraid to use the whole paper.

In the organic perspective exercise it looks like you’re starting to experiment with line weight. Line weight should be applied with the ghosting method and should only use one extra stroke per line. There are also some issues with the perspective, but you’ll get plenty more practice with that in the 250 box challenge.

All in all a very good assignment. Remember to keep revisiting these exercises for warmups. Good luck with the 250 box challenge!

Thank you for the analysis. I was expecting revisions being requested as I was definitely not happy the overall quality of this assignment. I appreciate you pointing out the areas I'm having trouble with. I will review those sections and do the revisions as requested.

Thank you again.