DomK100

Hi Tofu,

Thank you for explaining those points so clearly, I'm going to keep going over the exercises and think about what you've said as I'm doing them. It's reassuring to know I'm not alone in finding these tasks difficult but I think with some guidance and practice I will get there in the end.

Thanks again

Dom

Hi Tofu,

Thank you for the thorough critique, I just want to clarify a few things.

Arrows: 'I'd like you to experiment more with foreshortening in your future attempts, by utilizing it in both the arrows themselves as well as the negative space between their curves we can create a stronger illusion of an object moving through 3D space as demonstrated here.' How do I forshorten the negative space?

Organic forms with contours: 'I'd also like you to try and shift the degree of your contours more.' I find drawing consistent 'sausage like' forms very tricky, and get confused about the degree of contour ellipses because the forms aren't tapered or foreshortened.

Textures: 'you're focusing largely on outlines and negative space rather than cast shadows created by forms along the texture itself.' I found this exercise incredibly difficult and painstaking. It's very hard to work out the cast shadows, so any more advice would be helpful.

Form Intersections: 'You're making multiple groups of forms at times rather than one large group as discussed here. You're also highlighting existing edges rather than creating new ones via your intersections,' I thought my forms were all in one big group. Also, I agree the intersections are very difficult and I'm not totally clear on how they are supposed to work based on the video and accompanying notes.

Organic Intersections: Again, a tricky task and I'm not quite sure how to correctly show a cast shadow on such forms.

In all, I feel I'm making some progress, and any more feedback and information would be much appreciated.

Thanks

Dom

Here's the link for the Lesson 2 revisions as requested:

https://imgur.com/a/PXRjARo

Thanks Tofu. Yes, I thought you meant downwards, just as I marked them in my original submission. What I couldn't get was that when I extended the lines downwards, the lines seemed to remain parallel more often than the other two sets with less convergence or divergence. I looked through your guide after the 250 boxes but I think I still need to practise a lot more before I really get to grips with what is going on in terms of the effects of foreshortening on lines, and how the different lines relate to one another and how one set of lines impacts on another set of lines.

Hi Tofu,

Thanks again for more feedback. I think I understand when you talk about extending all three sets of lines, but could you give me an example?

Thanks

Dom

Hi Tofu,

Thanks for your detailed and constructive critique. I've had a think about a few of the things which I need to improve on and had another go; I've done 20 boxes as requested. Here's the link:

https://imgur.com/a/faZyd4W

Thanks again

Dom

Thanks Rob, for all your feedback so far. It makes sense, now you've said it, about moving the boxes back rather than rotating them. I hope I can correct that further down the line. I'll do the 250 boxes and move on to lesson 2. Thanks again.

Hi Rob, I've had another go at the rotated boxes exercise. Here's the link:

https://imgur.com/xQ6ZPe1

Thanks

Dom

Thanks Rob for that positive and detailed critique. I think you've made a fair assessment of what I've done so far, it's clear I have a long way to go but it's encouraging that I seem to be reasonably consistent with the basics. I'll have another crack at the rotated box exercise and send it over to you.

Thanks again,

Dom

Okay try this link: https://imgur.com/a/ujWDgNy

Hi Rob,

I've just checked the url in my browser and the images came up. Let me know if if works, and if not I can try to reupload.

Thanks

Dominic