4:07 AM, Saturday July 15th 2023
Hi Kaasschaaf, hope you're doing well.
Congratulations on completing Lesson 1. I'll be reviewing your work
- Lines
Superimposed Lines
You're doing a good job keeping your lines consistently starting at the same point and only frying at the end which its expected. Theres is some wobbliness that can be worked on the longer ones. You should aim to make a confident and longer stroke using mainly your shoulder and rotating the page to find and comfortably angle, also varying the speed will help. Too slow wobble, too fast no control, you should seek a balance
Ghosted Lines
The lines start straigth and smooth. Some of them wobble at the middle and end which seems that you are probably correcting the movement in order to hit end point. If that's the case don't worry about the line not ending where you expected.
Remember that you first priority is confidence and smoothness rather than accuracy as you can see on https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/14/levels
Ghosted planes
You're doing a great job here placing the dots first even on the center lines (some students skip this step). Your lines appear confident with less wobbling. Some lines are arching, you could try to arch them a little in the opposite direction while ghosting until it appears straighter https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/14/arc
- Ellipses:
Table of ellipses:
Your doing a good job here drawing your ellipses two times before lifting your pen, maintaining a variety of ellipses . Some of them don't follow the same degree and angle as the others. There are gaps between each other, your ellipses should not touch only the edges of the box but the other ellipses aswell. As it provides a concrete goal to aim for while ghosting take a look on https://drawabox.com/lesson/1/16/example and observe how the ellipses touch each other
Ellipses in Plane:
Good job at keeping your ellipses smooth and continuous. Looks like your trying to match your ellipse with the four edges of the plane and doing so it makes an uneven ellipse remember that you should prioritize an smooth and even ellipse https://imgur.com/4KCqYO5 you got right the first part
Funnels:
You're doing a great job at keeping the minor axis of your ellipses aligned and seems that your aware of some misaligned ones. Theres room for improvement on your ellipses which actually are pretty difficult to freehand. So don't stress that much you'll get more experienced with time and effort just keep in mind the previous points
- Boxes
Plotted Perspective: You're getting the right idea from this exercise and you work looks solid nothing else to say.
Rough Perspective:
When doing the rough perspective you should prioritize the horizontal and vertical lines. (It's just a reminder) The horizontal lines being parallel to the horizon and the vertical being perpendicular, you seem to aim for that. Don't stress much about the depth lines, the ones that goes to the vanishing point, you get enough practice through all the 250 box challenge.
Rotated Boxes: you're rotating enough your boxes and trying to keep your gaps narrow (perhaps too much I should say), there some areas to improve but overall you did well. This is intended to be a tough exercise after all
Organic Perspective
You did a good job here, there's room for improvement for the boxes closes to the viewer in terms of size. One of your mistake here is the repeating lines.
Don't try to fix a bad line, leave an ugly line and then next time you make a line think of your past mistakes. Those are exercises, not pretty drawings, we are trying to learn something from them.
I did the same mistake as you so Im just reminding you what I got from my critique
Overall your work done here its pretty solid. You should feel free to move on to the 250 box challenge and don't forget to use those exercises as warmups before doing your work, you add those into a warm-up pool
Next Steps:
The 250 Box Challenge
