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Thank you! ^w^ Here's my feedback:

Lines

From what I see in your lines, the biggest instance I see is wobbling. Remember, aim for confident and bold strokes over accurate ones. Accuracy builds with time. Otherwise, your superimposed lines + ghosted lines look good!

Same for your planes. Though I want to note that sometimes you repeat a line. Next time, if you get a inaccurate line, treat it as if it were correct.

Ellipses

Your ellipses in planes were done really well and confidently, albeit sometimes loosely. I'll elaborate on this, but overall you did really well on those.

For your table of ellipses, note to aim for the ellipses to:

a. not overlap

b. not cross bounds (The table the ellipses are drawn in)

It's fine if the ellipses do, but from looking at your tables of ellipses, I'm not sure if you were lost with the intent of it or drew it more loosely. While you should draw your ellipses confidently, having a clear goal for each ellipse should be prioritized equally. The idea of this exercise is to set criteria and goals for the ellipses we draw, and the exercise should reflect the concept. I'm going to request revisions for these, I hope you understand.

While some of the funnel's ellipses are drawn loosely as well, generally the ellipses align to the minor axis, so I won't request revisions for those. Nice job though!

Boxes

Your rough perspective was really nice, and they were really well done. However I want to note that for certain reasons, to use either fine liners or ballpoint for your exercises. This article summarizes up why really well, although you can use ballpoint for this and the 250 box challenge only.

I couldn't find a rough perspective exercise, so I'm going to request revisions for those. It's a required part of the homework, I'll link you the article here.

Your rotated boxes, while exhibit errors, are done nicely too. Same for your organic perspective, the perspective you used was interesting. Though I'll say you submitted 3 of those, one more than the homework asked.

Conclusion

The main points I see reflected in your exercises are loose ellipses and sometimes wobbly lines. Remember priortize confidence over accuracy, but equally prioritize the criteria for the exercise as well.

I'm going to request revisions, (rough perspective + table of ellipses) but overall you did a nice job :)

Alright, here's what I think:

Lines

For some of your super imposed lines, I noticed fraying on both ends. To elaborate, the super imposed lines drawn straight horizontally. Although it isn't present in your other super imposed lines, a reminder to position your pen at the beginning of each line/dot (depending on what you're doing.)

While there is a slight wobble in your ghosted lines, I can see how you're going for bold lines. They're drawn cleanly and boldly, so nice job!

I'm not exactly sure if you did your ghosted planes, then added the ellipses, but I request that you do these. You don't have to post them, I just recommend it as it's part of the assignments.

Ellipses

Although there are some overlaps in your ellipse tables, they're really well done. So I congratulate you for that. Same for the ellipses in planes, while they sometimes go out of bounds, they are smooth and confident.

Your funnels were also generally aligned to the minor axis, therefore, you did really good job with your ellipses. :>

Boxes

While you did a nice job with your plotted perspective, it is noted that you have to draw through the boxes. I'd request something simillar for your ghosted planes: draw through those boxes, but you don't have to post it.

Nice job on your rotated boxes and rough perspective. Your rotated boxes are nice and clean, as well as neatly packed and a clear indication of rotating.

Your organic perspective was done really well, I like how the flow or gesture of the lines fit how the boxes are freely rotated in space. Although you shouldn't strive for visually-pleasing exercises, your organic perspective was really nice.

Conclusion

The assignments you submitted were done really well and met the assignment requirements. I'll ask you to finish the ghosted planes, and draw through the boxes on your plotted perspective. Otherwise, I'll mark the lesson as complete.

Thanks for the "thank you beforehand" ^^

Now here's my critique:

Lines

The first thing to say generally, is that there's indication of a wobble. Therefore, I suggest to prioritize the confidence and boldness of your lines over the accuracy.

While it's not as prominent I think there's a small arch in your lines, which is more present in your ghosted lines. Presuming your drawing for your shoulder, I can say to just conciously arch them the opposite direction you're accustomed to drawing your lines to.

Another note is that there are 2 planes where the center line isn't drawn in. Since you've drawn them in others, fill it in and be concious of it when you do warm-ups.

Otherwise, I like the neatness of your lines :>

Ellipses

While in your table of ellipses, there are some ellipses squeezed in, some overlaps, you did really well with them.

Although there is a slight wobble, some overlaps, I can see you're priortizing confidence in drawing your ellipses. So well done!

Some overlapping and crossing-bounds ellipses, but you're clear for the funnels. I also like the diversity in size and length with your funnels, it's just nice to look at.

Boxes

There's some neat crosshatching done with your plotted perspective, you did really with those.

You did a nice job for your rough perspective too, so I congratulate you on that :>

While maintaining a nice rotation for your rotated boxes, you've also managed to add some crosshatching, so I applaud you for that.

I do suggest adding boxes farther off in the distance to fill in empty space, for your organic perspective. However the interesting angles and perspective is a really nice sight to see with them. So well done on those.

Conclusion

A general thing I suggest is to/to continue to priortize confident and bold lines to the accuracy of them. Otherwise, you're assignment was nicely done.

Here's my input:

Lines

These are pretty good! While there's an instance of some slight wobbling, I can see you're delibrately creating confident and bold strokes. So good job with those!

A thing to note though is that I believe instead of doing your ellipses in planes on another sheet, you drew your ellipses in ghosted planes. Since these are both different assignments, I'm going to suggest to do another sheet of ghosted planes. You don't have to post them though, since there's really any different, save for the ellipse, that I can point out.

Ellipses

While there are some slight crossing-between-boundaries, you did really well for your tables of ellipses.

Your ellipses in planes are drawn confidently as well, so I applaud you again for those.

The funnels are generally aligned to the minor axis, which is good so congrats on that!

Boxes

No complaints for your rough and plotted perspectives. The marked VPs are a nice thing to note though.

As for the rotated boxes, I like the neatness of it. Again, you met the criteria for the boxes, so nice job.

The use of interesting angles and the diversity of the boxes, for your organic perspective is nice to see. While not an fault, I suggest next time to add more boxes, especially more farther away. There's a lot of space there that I think could be somewhat filled more, so here's an example. Otherwise, you're clear.

Conclusion

Your assignment was neatly done, meeting all the criteria needed to move on. So I'd like to congratulate you for that :)

As a reminder for the ghosted planes, there's no need to post them, but I suggest you do them so you can say you finished the assignment.

Again, you a did really nice job, so now you can move onto the 250 box challenge. :)

Alright, here's my analysis:

Lines

Overall, you did pretty well with your lines. You have a slight wobble, but I can see that you're working to prioritize keeping your lines confident. So you're on the right track.

Though I note, to keep the ellipses in planes and ghosted planes seperate. I believe you added the ellipses later, but since they're both different assignments. Please do these over again, you don't have to post it though. (I'll go more in depth in the conclusion about the requested reworkings)

Ellipses

Looking more at the ellipses, there's more clear instances of wobbling compared to the lines. Just as a reminder, priortize keeping your lines smooth and confident, not accurate. Accuracy comes with time, as you get used to drawing with your shoulder.

In your Ellipses Tables, there are some small instances with overlapping. I can see that you improve on that later, just note that you should aim to keep your ellipses within the bounds, touching each other without overlapping.

For your Funnels, you did really well with aligning your ellipses with the minor axis. Although to note, some of the major axises weren't drawn in. Otherwise, it's just the general wobble.

Boxes

Your plotted perspective and rough perspective are done really well, so good job on those! Your cross-hatching for your plotted perspective is very neat, and I liked that a lot

For your rotating boxes, while the boxes are kept close, there's little to no indication of the boxes being rotated. Some of the planes and sets of boxes aren't drawn in either.

Overall, I think the biggest thing for the Rotated Boxes is that, you missed the concept of exercise. There's a lot I could point out, but I think rereading the article itself might be the best course of action.

A useful tip (addressed here, specifically the image) is to use the side, bottom, top, boxes edges to help infer the perspective for the next box.

From what I can assume, I believe there was some frustration from this, and that's okay. It's not supposed to look pleasing, you're going to mess up a lot. Don't put pressure to make it look good, as long as you fully attempted you'll succeed with the assignment. Over time, as you do these for your warm-ups, you'll see improvement in how these look. It's slightly cheesy, but as a general rule of thumb, focus on the process, lessons learned, concepts, etc. and not the result.

As for the Organic Perspective, it's very bare. I suggest to add more boxes. I also suggest to diversify the sizes of them. Generally the boxes bigger as they get closer and vice versa if smaller. The lineweight is also thicker if closer and vice versa as well. Though I can see this in instances of your Organic Perspective, don't be afraid to make-somewhat more-drastic changes to the size. If you need a guide, you can check some of the examples for the homework, here.

These are some of my own suggestions, so you won't need to do the Organic Perspective for revisions.

Conclusion

Most of the general errors I see are wobbling, but as you prioritize the confidence of those lines over the accuracy, it'll improve. As for the Organic Perspective and Rotating Boxes, they'll improve over time too, you just need to continue to persist with them.

Otherwise, you did a really nice job on everything else, and on a side note, I liked how you organized everything too :>

As for the revisions, I'm going to request revisions for Rotated Boxes. As for the Ghosted Lines, I believe you got the concept of them, so there's so need to post them. I'll just ask for the Rotated Boxes as I don't believe you got the full idea for it. Besides that, nice job!

Yup! These are looking better. Although it took some time, I can see some rotation with the boxes. Also, nice work with using the planes of other boxes to help sculpt the ones next to it. However, I would like to note that you didn't draw all the boxes in (the top and bottom furthest left-right ones.) Please draw these in, but don't post them. Otherwise, I'm looking forward to your ghosted lines :>

Before the actual critique, one of the things I found done well was your organic perspective. The boxes you've drawn had interesting shapes and different angles that were pleasant to see. You have a nice grasp for rotating those, and I commend you on that.

However, a general issue I see in most of these exercises is wobbly lines. The reason why this is, is you priortize accuracy while mark-making with (what I assume, otherwise refer to this) your shoulder. Having your conscious brain guide your arm to draw. In order to fix this, trust your arm and focus on making confident strokes. Improvement doesn't come fast, and you'll still see a lot of wobbly lines while practicing. However, as you continue to do this repeatively, it should improve over time. (Uncomfortable explains "wobbling" in superimposed lines, you can see his explaination, here.)

Now, here are some of the last critiques I have.

• On your funnels, they are generally aligned to it's central minor axis, which pretty much meets the exercise's goal. However, if you ever revisit these, I'd advise you to draw more. There is a lot of space on that paper, and you can rotate the funnels to fit the space. Here are some of the lesson's examples if you like to see one.

• Looking at the edges of your rotated boxes, you can see they all roughly converge to the same vanishing point. When you rotate a box, the vanishing points slide along the horizon line. Watch the video and refer to the lesson instructions if you need more elaboration.

I'm going to request revisions in order to help with your wobbling. Along with that, try at it again with the rotating boxes. It's not going to perfect and it's expected to make many mistakes. The reason why I want you to redo this is to get a general idea of the concept the exercise is introducing you to. Besides this, you produced some solid work, so great job! ^^

Yup! You're welcome!

Alright, so here's what I've got:

One of the things I noticed is that you didn't draw a line down vertically (sometimes horizonally) down to the center of your ghosted planes. What I mean is demonstrated here. Please draw these in before moving on (as they were part of the instructions), but there's no need to post them.

On your superimposed lines, you do fray, but that's bound to happen. However, there are some times where you do fray on both ends. Make sure to position the point of your pen to the start of the drawn out line before executing it.

Overall, your lines do tend to wobble, so I advise that you to keep this in mind when you continue. Aim for confident strokes. Otherwise nice work, you can continue on to the ellipses section, after you draw in those lines for your planes. ^^