Andrew_T34pot

Hi! Congrats on finishing lesson 2! I'm gonna take a look at your homework. This is my first critique and also I also just finished lesson 2 recently so take what I say with a grain of salt.

Arrows: I don't have much to say here, other than that the overlapping of the arrow on itself isn't always parralel, in the sense that the angle of the arrow (not the direction itself) bends sometimes when it turns. I wouldn't really call this a mistake but in the exercise it's demonstrated usually that the "ribbon" shouldn't twirl and you kind of be just all on one angle. Idk if that makes sense, but optimally the edge of the arrow should be parralel to all the other edges of the ribbon. Sorry if that doesn't makes 100% sense, I don't know if that's the best way to describe it.

Organic Forms: For the elipses, I feel like in some (only some) the degrees of the elipses aren't accurate, like the bottom left one, but I know that they're not gonna all come out greate, sometimes you just draw one like that and that's ok. I would though pay attention to where you place the tip (the tiny oval), they could be slightly higher in a couple places. all in all for the eplise ones I think your best one was the top right corner one. For the line ones, make sure you're still paying attention to the degree of the lines just like in the elipse version. Try and imagine that you're using elipses, just that you're not drawing them. Because you didn't add an extreme enough curve on many of them, they come out kind of flat.

Texture analisis: I think you gave this a great shot, but I don't find entirely convincing in some parts. One thing I noticed for the shadows in this exercise is that you want to be careful when you get to the darker parts of the texture. I like the parts where it's light, feel like for instance with the scales (that's what I'm looking most at) where it's darker I feel like the ones furthest to the left are too prominent where they shouldn't really be.

Dissections: These are cool! I like the textures you chose. The main thing I would say here is to pay more attention to how you can make your textures more implicit. In my opinion you're using too many lines, in places where you could have substituted it for large areas of light and dark. An example could be your cactus . It's nice and the readability is good, but it would like even better if you took into consideration an obvious light source, I imagine that it could be in a way where those peaks of the cactus would still be black, but could also add on to the black based on whether light would get to that part of the cactus flesh, depending on your established light source. Good job all in all though, the sausages themselves are impeccable!

Shape intersections: I think you did a decent job on these, though I feel like you could have applied line weight to the shapes to make everything come together a bit more, it would also help you think of it more as a 3d shape in the process. I do feel though that some of the intersections don't make sense, like the bottom cylinder on your second page as an example. what I reccomend for this is to close your eyes(or don't) and visualize how 2 shapes like this could go through eachother. This is for some of them really difficult, if your mind doesn't come up with anything I would reccomend downloading some 3d software like blender which is free to use, and you could put different shapes in to eachother and study how they will collide. It's the best way as there's 100% accuracy on the computer's part.

Organic Intersections: These are tough and I had a problem with them too, so this is not too bad. A problem with this exercise is that it's hard to not make everything look cluttered, but good job on establishing the shadows at the right times, although I would say some of them could wrap around the forms they touch a bit better. I also think you did much better with readability the second time so good job!

Agreed! The other 50% is basically you doing what you actually want to do as an artist.