Alturass

Thank you so much for the critique! "Phenomenal" is a very strong word, but I´ll take it :)

I have to say again that your critique here is absolutely invaluable to me. Looking back several month and reading through your critiques (especially this to me very important Lesson 6 right here) makes me think I´m on the right track for now.

I am already dreading the moment when the course will be completed for me, and I will have to sift through all the courses once again, where I probably will not get personal feedback. I am trying to get a solid foundation, and signing into drawabox was probably one of the best decisions I could have made here. So for that I wanted to say a big thank you, and I probably will do so again.

I will upload the wheels shortly.

Best Regards

Dominik

Dang. My mistake, I didn´t check it as I normally do.

Here is the correct link:

https://imgur.com/a/Rnh8lyD

Regards

Dominik

Thank you very much for your detailed critique! Here are the additional drawings:

https://imgur.com/a/UHh5sxG

I had all of your critique points in mind when I drew these. There are almost no contour lines, I do admit I like those a lot but I left them out almost completely, which does not really look right...?

I tried improving the sausage method (I have to draw them slower, otherwise they end up as ellipses again) and adding bulks/organic forms to the legs and body while thinking more about the "wrapping". In the end a lot of areas got too "bulky" since I only thought about the pinches and not the overlappings in these additional bulks.

I added no additional silhouette, but I did find the reason why I did this initially. I included the picture of your wolf demo, where you made an outline for your fur texture - I did not want to do any kind of details/fur, but I put in a lot of outlines nontheless where it was totally misplaced - I had a wrong understanding of this.

I am looking forward for your critique and I hope there is some improvement - I´d rather draw 100 more insects than more muzzles, but that´s just me.

Cheers!

Dominik

Thank you for the feedback!

https://imgur.com/a/akRgB0E

With the leaves I definitely struggle when it turns and twists, and make out which side is up and down and make it look right. It took me a while. Solid forms are actually easier.

I agree on the branch exercise, I have difficulties with this approach. I actually do a table of ellipses almost daily (one of my fav warm ups) and I always draw through them. But as soon as I make the actual homework I want it to look more “clean” and not too sketchy, which is the wrong approach, I get that. I ghost the ellipse, but I don’t draw through them. Thanks for pointing that out. But I did not realize this while drawing, I am certainly not looking to skip rules or make shortcuts – that’s not why I signed up for this course... “Don’t half-ass it”, a wise man once said.

After the hibiscus I decided to step back to the more basic leafs, yes. I tried it, but some leaf forms are too complex for now, and the flow is hard to make out sometimes.

Things I definitely must work on: Implicit textures.Subtle line weights. Not “cleaning up” lines later. Lilypad degrees. And my new nemesis: branches with curved “superimposed”-like lines. I uploaded the additional page of branches, I hope this is sufficient. I understand the concept better now, but oh boy, the execution.

Stay healthy!

Regards

Dominik

Thank you very much for your detailled critique! I know other courses where the feedback is more like "Great job, keep up the good work", which is not really helpful. I just want to let you know that I really appreciate your effort and feedback!

It´s interesting how you point out things I compeletely did not see (like the "fat" sausages") and are on the other happy relatively happy with form intersections and texture analysis, which I thought I completely screwed up. That shows how important it is not to work in a bubble, that is new to me.

I will upload Lession 3 shortly and I´m looking forward to hearing from you.

Best Regards, Stay healthy!

Dominik

Hello Svendogee,

thank you for your detailed critique!

It´s good to hear I am moving in the right direction with line quality, ghosting and ellipses. I will keep working on that.

I apologize for not reading the instruction carefully. I did not realize it the pages were meant to be framed in thirds. I really am not trying to cut any corners just because I did some lessionspreviously, you just have to believe me that for now. Otherwise I wouldn´t even have signed up as a patreon for this course.

But I will read instructions more carefully from now, I think I was just a little bit too eager ^^

Stay healthy!

Regards

Alturass