Aki

Looks much better, good work! Onward you go!

Hi Tacospin,

First off, congrats on submitting Lesson 1, this is a huge accomplishment. These are the fundamentals that all great art is based on, and you're doing a fantastic job choosing to pursue this.

Overall, this is a pretty good first try. I think you did a better job on your ellipses than I did my first attempt.

There are a few things here that I would like you to work on. Your ghosting method needs a little bit of work on a few of these, particularly the shorter strokes you used for your rough perspective boxes. I've got a feeling that you're using your "fingers" to do these, or not properly ghosting. Drawing from the "fingers" in this context meaning drawing in the style of handwriting, rather than from the wrist, elbow, or shoulder. I usually tell people that when I'm drawing I'm using my fingers exclusively to grip the pen, while the movement is handled by my wrist (finer details), elbow or shoulder (for larger strokes).

I'd like to see you redo two things for me to give you a passing grade. The first would be to redo the rotated boxes. I hate to tell people to redo this one, since I know it's a total nightmare to do. But I see what you did and it's a significant thing that I feel I would be doing you a disservice by allowing to slide.

https://i.imgur.com/1T4Jcvm.jpeg

Your boxes that sit beside the central box have bases (ie the face furthest from the viewer that are composed of lines that are either parallel, or even drifting apart in some cases. They should be converging, like in this image.

https://d15v304a6xpq4b.cloudfront.net/lesson_images/5bda1f62.jpg

I would like you to redo this. I know it's a lot to ask, but it's important that rotation of boxes make sense to you before taking on the 150 box challenge.

Additionally, I'd like to see you redo a page of the organic perspective. There are two reasons for this. One is the misuse of foreshortening, the other is that your pages aren't very full, there just aren't many boxes to judge. I think some of your boxes in the distance of some of your panels are a bit too squished for the distance that they're at and would present themselves as more of a traditional box shape, and less compressed than they are, ie. the lines would converge less dramatically.

Hi Ageth,

I've redone a few of the sausages. I think they're closer, but ultimately that's for you to decide. What do you think?

https://imgur.com/HgeRXhV

Hey HOMEISHELHEIM,

So it looks good to me, other than the rough perspective. The rough perspective is wrong though. It's all meant to trace back to a single vanishing point, rather than just the line.

https://d15v304a6xpq4b.cloudfront.net/lesson_images/cc14a4f6.jpg

So one more page of that, and you're golden.

Great! There we go. I'm marking you for passing. On to the boxes.

There we go. I'm marking you as passing. On to the boxes.

Hi DROPTHUND3R

Honestly, this is a great submission. I really don't have any comments for most of them. The only comment I have is that your rough perspective could stand to be redone. The lines where you trace back to the VP should not pierce the line. If you give me one more page of Rough Perspective, you have my clearance to start the 250 boxes.

Hi LORDOFLIZARDS,

I'm going to pass you. Your execution isn't always 100% accurate, but you have the confidence and do your ghosting properly and that is what it's all about. I know the exercises, like rotated boxes might not be the prettiest thing ever with your current skill level, but that's okay. The whole point of the really hard stuff is more to introduce you to the ideas, it's intentional failure.

So with that, I'm going to pass you. On to the 250 boxes!

Hi Mati,

This is a great one to look at. You don't let your ego get in the way, which is awesome. Your lines look properly ghosted and everything.

I have a few small issues, and I'd like to see you redo a few things:

Tables of Ellipses. I wanna see you really fill out those boxes. There's too much white space here. See Comfy's example. Notice how they're wall to wall with boxes. You're like 90% of the way there, but ellipses are a tricky thing and people REALLY struggle with them. I think it's in your best interest to redo this. I think redoing this will also help compensate for what I think to be what's causing your ellipses in planes to be slightly off.

https://d15v304a6xpq4b.cloudfront.net/lesson_images/f4181ea2.jpg

Rough perspective, I'd liek to see you try this one again. When forming your corners that form a line towards your plotted point, you should try your best to form a line with your minds eye, connecting your dot with the plotted point, and place an additional dot along that line.

1 page of Organic Perspective. This one I more want you to do out of principle. I see you going over lines 2 or more on some boxes times here. This is not ideal. Your lines should be one confident, clean stroke. Just one page of this, remade with proper line execution.

Otherwise, great job!

Howdy GASTERA3,

Honestly, this is a fantastic first attempt, albeit a little bit sloppy. You seem to understand exactly what each this is meant to be, and I appreciate that so much. Congrats. That being said, there's a few things that I'd like to see you do, moving forward. If you fwub something, wind up with an ugly looking box, just own it. It's okay. Don't try to add another corner that you think looks right compared to it. An ugly box executed with confidence looks better than a frankenbox 100% of the time.

Also, don't make a new dot when your line doesn't end up exactly where you want it. It's okay, own the mistake and move on. You should be comfortable with your linemaking, even if it's not fully accurate. It will come along with time and mileage.

I'd like to see you redo the tables of ellipses. Ellipses are a weak point for you. Me too. Just make sure when redoing it to execute confidently, and ghost your circle. Do 2 passes on the circle.

I'd also like to see you redo the organic perspective WITHOUT trying to fix bad corners. Remember, mistakes are permissible.