Aielo

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    1:13 PM, Tuesday August 25th 2020

    That makes more sense! I just couldn't wrap my head around a shape like your second example. And since there were no examples of sausages like the first one in the exercise page, I thought there really was something wrong with how I was thinking.

    Thanks a lot!

    12:48 AM, Friday August 21st 2020

    Thank you! I tried to do bigger boxes, to try and get more steady with longer lines. But I now notice I should try some smaller ones, further from the border, to check the convergences better.

    Thank you for the advices! I'll add it to my warmups.

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    10:20 PM, Wednesday August 19th 2020

    First thing is that you didn't do the extending of the back lines. As is stated on the challenge page, the back "Y" is the hardest one to get right, and, by not tracing that after you did the boxes, you probably didn't notice how well you're drawing it. Pay attention to your back lines.

    Furthermore, the hatching on the front face of the cubes is not really what it should be. You need to make the hatched lines go from an edge all the way to the other. You should also ghost those lines to get them very straight and evenly spaced. This will make your boxes feel more solid.

    Also you got a lot of empty space on you page. It's a good thing to extend the lines all the way till off the page or when it gets too messy with other boxes. It can be a great visual queue to check if everything is really lined up.

    Next Steps:

    I noticed an improvement throughout the challenge, for sure. However, it would be nice to check your "back Ys" and how the back lines converge with the ones you traced jsut to be sure that you really got that correctly.

    After checking that you'll be able to tell if you need to do some more boxes as warmups, just to nail that correctly.

    When finished, reply to this critique with your revisions.
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    10:11 PM, Wednesday August 19th 2020

    Your superimposed lines are good. Ghosted lines and planes are also well executed

    Ellipses are a bit more wobbly than straight lines, but they're meeting the standards of shape.

    On the Rough perspective your lines get way wobblier than they have been throughout the previous exercises. Remember that, even when drawing boxes, it's important to keep your lines smooth.

    Rotated boxes are pretty great, as well as the last boxes.

    Overall great work.

    Next Steps:

    Go on! The 250 boxes will be a great improvement to feel more confident to do the lines for the boxes and not think to much while drawing them.

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    2:44 PM, Wednesday August 19th 2020

    Overall your lines are the main problem. The hard thing about doing this digitally is that I can't be sure if your program/tablet is acting weird or if you are not drawing it correctly.

    On the lines exercises they are extremely wobbly, and should be done more confidently.

    The ghosted lines/planes have the same wobble problem, even though they are close to meeting the desired path. You should work first on your fluidity and smoothness and later on accuracy. If you're accurate, but your lines are wobbly, it wont look good.

    Same with ellipses, you're being accurate on keeping them consistent and packed together, but the lines are very wobbly.

    The plotted perspective is great. The rough perspective is ok perspective-wise, but very wobbly lines.

    Your rotated boxes are impressive, you really got close to nailing the overall shape, but again, your lines are very wobbly, so it doesn't look as appealing.

    And for the organic perspective, it feels a bit rushed... By looking at your rotated boxes, I'd imagine this exercise would have great perspective applied, but it got a bit weird in some cubes there.

    Main point here is about the lines. Work on them. Also... take your time to do the exercises. No need to rush.

    Next Steps:

    Before moving on to the boxes challenge, try to re-do some of the line exercises. Superimposed lines and ghosted planes would be great warmups for you.

    When you feel like you improved on that, try a bit of the ellipses just to make sure you can keep the smoothness there, and then you can move on to the 250 Box Challenge

    When finished, reply to this critique with your revisions.
    1:56 PM, Tuesday August 18th 2020

    Thank you! I'm almost finishing the 250 Box challenge now and noticed my lines got way better, but I still need to improve on them. Adding more "Line" exercises to my warmups right now.

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    7:31 PM, Friday August 7th 2020

    I think what you need to work the most is on the quality and precision of your lines. The lines seem very wobbly, you need to execute them more smoothly.

    Your ellipse exercises seem rushed, you should really try to ghost your ellipses and get used to make them align with what you want to draw. Getting them very close packed on the tables of ellipses for example.

    Your perspective is otherwise pretty good. The cube lessons look very well done, besides the wobbly lines.

    Next Steps:

    Everyone should try the 250 box challenge, so do that too, but focus on getting your lines smooth and precise. I advise you to also add some warm up exercises with ellipses, also to try and land smoother lines.

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    12:09 PM, Tuesday August 4th 2020

    Your lines are great, you got a bit of fraying in the ends, but that's expected. The ghosted lines are pretty well done.

    With the ovals, try to draw through it only 2 times. Some of your ovals have 4 draw throughs and that's a bit too much, but in terms of shape and fluidity it's good.

    With your squares you didn't do any "extreme" square, with big distortions, so that made your sheet look very clean for the ellipses. The funnels look very well executed.

    Your rough perspective had some very off lines, but on the second sheet they do get way better, so I can see an improvement there. I felt like you didn't rotate your rotated boxes enough, as your drawing looks a bit square, and not a sphere like the example. I'd advice to try and draw more extreme rotations of the boxes on the corners, to really convey that fully rotated idea.

    On you organic perspective, it feels like you didn't really do any perspective. All the lines look parallel, and not converging to a point. Check the 250 box challenge and how the convergence is measured there, then take a look at your organic perspective boxes and notice how there's little to no convergence.

    Overall pretty good, just pay attention to the minor details, and definitely do the 250 box challenge, focusing on trying out more different and extreme Ys, and also checking your convergence to the imaginary VPs.

    Next Steps:

    Definitely do the 250 Box Challenge, and keep in mind the VPs as you draw, read the instructions and follow them correctly to get the most of it.

    Also try to draw some "extreme" rotation of the boxes, with a face almost obscured in one of the sides, for example.

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    1:05 AM, Tuesday August 4th 2020

    I couldn't see your "Lines" exercises, and I think they would've helped a lot in the start.

    Your ghosted planes are good, but your ellipses have a lot of "draw throughs". Try to keep them to 2, not to overwhelm the lines. Some of them don't meet every side of the more extreme squares, but they are pretty good.

    On your tables of ellipses, most of them don't meet the sides of the boxes, and some of them also don't meet the sides of each other. They could be more packed together.

    The funnels are great, but some of the bigger ellipses are a bit wobbly. That happened to me when I was not drawing with my shoulder, since I couldn't reach the whole motion with the wrist or elbow. Check if you're using your shoulder.

    The last exercises have a lot of wobbly lines, which could be from not drawing from the shoulders or trying to sort it out as you draw them. Again, the first line exercises would help a lot with that.

    Great job overall, just pay attention to the minor details and your lines.

    Next Steps:

    I think you should try the line exercises before moving on, and then apply it to some exercises that made you feel a bit off, like the ellipses one.

    Then you can move to the 250 box challenge and apply everything you learned on ghosting line in there, to improve both the line work and the perspective on the cubes.

    When finished, reply to this critique with your revisions.
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    12:56 AM, Tuesday August 4th 2020

    Really Great work!

    I could see one or two line fraying on both ends on the "superimposed lines" exercise, but not enough to be bothered about, and you quickly got it right.

    Most of the ellipses are very well done, with some more extreme ellipses on planes not meeting every side, but they are close enough and very fluid and smooth lines.

    On the plotted perspective, you didn't through every box, mainly on your second sheet. It does look prettier this way, but the idea is to draw every edge of the box.

    Your rough perspective line are a bit wobbly, but I just think you needed to get more used to commiting to the boxes, because your following box exercises are way better.

    The rotated boxes feel a little bit less rotated on the corners, The example looks like a sphere, but yours got a bit square. The corners are very extreme rotations, so they feel odd, but try to draw them in those extremes either way, so you get used to them. It's a great idea for your 250 boxes, to try some extreme Ys.

    Overall you did pretty good and clearly evolved throughout the exercises.

    Good job!

    Next Steps:

    Try the 250 boxes and force yourself to draw more extreme rotations of the boxes, like the ones in the corners of the "Rotated Boxes" exercises.

    Remember to draw through every box so you get a better understanding of the weird positions it can get in the 3D space

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