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Thanks for the great critique! and sorry the little mishap with drive.

indeed i also feel like my line quality had improved more than my boxes and ill try to be more patient with myself ,thank you so much for the thoughtful advice!

understandable, thanks for replying Uncomfortable!

Hello thank you for the thoughtful criticism! it was just what ive been needing im surprised with how quick it was given too!

ahhh that makes sense i was worried that if my drawing weren't porporationally (hoping i spelled that correct) accurate it would damage the exercise's quality it's good to know what to focus on instead rather than worrying about the excess stuff thanks!

try imagining the horizon line in different positions this is explained much better in this link and will help with the complicated dutch angle type of boxes that are present on your page

Heyo I'm AGES and ill be critiquing your work today

Lines:

SuperImposed: great i dont see any wobbling and while near the bottom (2nd page) i see some lines that are fraying most of your lines are very accurate nice job

Ghosted: occasionally i see alittle bit of overshooting in this case lift your pen as soon as you hit the dot although this will need some practice i also see alittle bit of wobbling which i can tell was because poor ghosting but overall your lines are confident and mostly accurate

Ghosted Planes: same as above albeit i do some wobbling at the bottom which could result from weird positioning and poor ghosting make sure to thoughtfully ghost through your lines as unconsciously ghosting can result in not actually ghosting to the point, realizing and then poorly ghosting and being unconfident although maybe that's just me overall good work

Ellipses:

Tables of Ellipses: good work overall i see little to no aggressive overlapping against the bounds you do have some ellipses that dont reach the bounds and thats results in gaps

Planes & Ellipses: same as above small overlapping and undershooting but overall good

Funnels: these are always the hardest to critique as my eyes always play tricks on me personally speaking but regardless they generally look pretty good they're centered in the minor axis although near the bottom i do see some miscentering but overall same as above confident accurate ellipses

Boxes:

Plotted: there is little to nothing to note here as this is just a introduction to vps and 3d space good job

Rough: about that note you put dont grind just post the work you have intially so it can critiqued you'll burn out after constantly grinding out a single exercise. As for your boxes there generally pretty fine no guessing and width lines go parallel to the horizon and height perpendicular also you're lines arent bad its comedic in a way because worrying about how your lines are is actually going to mess them up you're going to be less confident resulting in wobbling

Rotated boxes: you did your best everybody struggles with these even just a little bit overall make sure to keep corners in your boxes close make them snuggly and make the boxes actually rotate (which you did fairly okay with albeit some mistakes) boxes vps will shift against the horizon line when they are rotating creating a new convergence rate

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Organic Perspective: did okay albeit some wobbly lines and perspective jank not going to hard into this as the 250 boxes challenge with solve most of these issues

Notes: although not a mistake i wouldn't recommend putting your exercises in boxes like you did with the organics and rough's as it will make perspective way more difficult to eyeball

Hello again I already see some great improvement nice job! there is a little wobbling in some of the lines but that's gonna be solved with some more practice. When you get better at drawing lines with confidence you can then start focusing your attention on accuracy but always try to keep your lines confident, drawn from the shoulder and ghosted you did great i'll mark this lesson complete.

Heyo I'm Ages and ill be critiquing your work today.

Lines:

SuperImposed: i see alot of fraying and wobbly lines in this case remember to use your shoulder and draw with confidence ignoring accuracy for now as you'll be able to practice that once you learn how to smoother lines

Ghosted: your lines are very wobbly which can solved by the above also remember to plan out your lines by rotating your page and ghosting your lines so you can get some of that temporary muscle memory

Ghosted Planes: i know there isnt any but you should really get that in sometime for solo critiques i recommend going to the discord

Ellipses:

Ghosted Planes with Ellipses: these are fine but can be improved with some more practice as i see some distorted in the planes focus on confidence rather than accuracy

Tables of Ellipses: while your ellipses are in their bounds they aren't confident and very wobbly albeit some are better than others also while there isn't a rule stating against it im really unsure about how some of the orientations are done here id recommend sticking to the wavy lines rather than the boxy ones

Funnels: Remember to keep the ellipses cut in half while also trying to keep inside the funnel (keeping them inside the funnel is less important however. I've probably dried this word the hell out but focusing on confidence is key here)

Boxes:

Plotted Perspective: not bad you did good

Rough Perspective: your first page is good but later on you start guessing alot remember we're working in one point perspective meaning the lines have the following traits

"All lines that go off into the distance converge at the vanishing point.

All horizontal lines run perfectly parallel to the horizon.

All vertical lines run perfectly perpendicular to the horizon."

there aren't any other traits besides those so try to plan your next line to follow those traits

Rotated Boxes: everybody struggles with these id say you did your best the boxes are nice and snug remember the boxes vps need to shift along the horizon that is actual rotation when the boxes convergences are sharing a position those boxes are not rotated

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Organic perspective: its normal to have some perspective wonkiness you will be working on this during the 250 boxes challenge

Overall i heavily recommend focusing on line confidence rather than accuracy using your shoulder and ghosting technique effectively giving you the confidence by using the ghosting technique

possibly although i did them in pencil at the time due to not knowing about the fineliner rule however I do have some warmups I could send into the community critique with stuff the Rotated Boxes exercises being redone since i haven't done that in a while